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My process of writing Three Years
Topic Started: Jun 19 2016, 12:40 AM (735 Views)
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Hello everyone,

This is my first time ever posting here. I will give an introduction of my experience with the entire Dragon Ball series so far (I'm currently up to the Gotenks vs. Buu part) and the inspiration to write a fanfiction.

I started watching this anime months ago. Unlike most people, I actually started at the very beginning - Episode 1 of Dragon Ball, not Dragon Ball Z. As I have stated, I'm currently in the middle of the Buu Saga. If there's one friendship in this series that emotionally impacts me, it's Chiaotzu and Tien's, hands down. I could go into extreme levels of detail about this, but once you read the story you will understand.

After Chiaotzu's suicide, both Chiaotzu and Tien get sidelined, hard, and I really could not accept that. So, I went out of my way to see if anything, even things that were non-cannon, included him. I finally came across the movie Dragon Ball Z: Mystical Adventure. While I was expecting more conversation between the two, there is a particular scene in there that is very touching. For those of you who know the movie, it is the nightmare scene.

Seeing that part of the movie is really what drove me to search even further, and I ended up finding the fanfiction called My Brother, which imagines Tien being forced to do horrible things under Shen, who holds Chiaotzu captive. That was the breaking point, when I finally decided to write a fanfiction of my own.

I'm currently writing the very last of the three parts of the story. After I am done, I plan to post it all here. The story takes place in the three-year gap (which the anime conveniently skips over) right after Trunks warns the Z Fighters about the upcoming android attack. There are some flashbacks that I take from the anime, but you will see that I have created some plot points of my own in order for my story to run smoothly.

Let me know if you guys are interested in this or have any questions! One more thing: this is not going to be a sexual, or even romantic, Tien x Chiaotzu fanfiction. While there are a lot of brotherly love hugging moments of comfort and care, it does not go any further than that, certainly not to the point where it is inappropriate. The title of the fanficiton is, so far, Three Years I'll leave an excerpt here!

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It was dark when they arrived, the consequence of Tien’s preference to walk instead of fly. Tien’s feet hurt, and Chiaotzu was tired, but they didn’t mind.

They inched closer and closer until the house came into view. No more wind blew, and the water didn’t splash (for certain no waterfall was near), so it was deeply, deeply quiet. Chiaotzu, who had inched closer to Tien so that their shoulders were almost touching, was the first to break the silence, with a whisper.

“Do you see anything around it?”

“No, and hopefully we won’t.”

Chiaotzu’s attention turned to the house. “It doesn’t look too bad from the outside.”

They moved ever so silently to the single-story, gray wooden house with a tall roof. The chimney didn’t smoke, as nobody was there to light the fire. The pair looked through windows, but there was no point, on account of it being too dark to see anything. It was a house in the scenic middle of nowhere, and they both had fears that, since it stood out, someone, or something, had been there during their absence. They would ultimately know once they got to the door.

They also had a fear of being watched, and this is why Chiaotzu inquired about the surroundings of the house. For all they knew, somebody could have camped up on that cliff, which truly never ended, where they would be waiting for somebody to attack. This all fed into their collective suspicion.

After what seemed like hours, they finally approached the door. As Tien quietly turned the knob, Chiaotzu watched and prayed that something, like a hand, would not suddenly appear, grabbing his best friend by the throat and breaking loose all hell.

As Tien quietly opened the door, they both let out a sigh of relief. The worst part of the walk seemed over.

Chiaotzu quietly closed the door behind him, but before either of them could turn on the lights, they heard a soft noise. The noise almost fell on deaf ears, but both heard it.

“Tien! Did you…”

“Shh!”

A five second window of severe silence filled the house. None of them made a sound.

And suddenly a loud, popping crack could be heard, coming from behind the house. Chiaotzu gasped, startled, but he knew better not to make a noise.

Tien, what was that?

Tien’s head turned to the closest window to look out of it. Nothing.

I don’t know, Chiaotzu. I’m going to check it out. Stay here.

Please be careful, Tien. Tien heard the dreadful fear in Chiaotzu’s own mind. Knowing that, it was hard for him to stay calm.

So Tien was tasked with quitely, and therefore, slowly, going outside to scan the perimeter of the house to find the source of the two noises. As he finally finished turning the knob and opening the door to walk out. He left Chiaotzu with one last message.

Don’t turn on any lights, and close the door quietly behind me.

Chiaotzu let out a quiet whimper of fear. Okay.

He saw Tien become swallowed by the darkness of their shelter’s outskirts.

There are no words to describe how uncomfortable it was for Chiaotzu to stand in this black room with no knowledge of exactly what had happened, or what was happening. He didn’t dare communicate to Tien again, for fear of startling him and causing him to make a noise, possibly alerting whatever might be hiding in the shadows. Otherwise, they hadn’t even gotten to searching the entirety of the house. For all Chiaotzu knew, there was something in his bed. He heard his own breathing, and consequently, his heart rate rose. The periodic thumping exacerbated his situation.

It rose to an inhuman level when he heard footsteps, getting louder and louder. This is it, he thought. It’s either Tien or...oh please, let it be Tien!

The footsteps stopped and he started to hear the doorknob turn. His heart was racing. Before the door opened, he was spared.

Chiaotzu, it’s me. Don’t worry, I’m fine.

Tien’s voice startled him, and he jumped back, so far that he hit his head on the wooden rocking chair behind him. As he felt slight, but bearable pain, he let out a sigh of drastic relief.


Any feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thanks guys!

-commanderAIK
Edited by commanderAIK, Jun 19 2016, 12:41 AM.
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My story is finished. You can check it out on here: http://commanderaik.deviantart.com/art/Three-Years-Chapter-1-Nothing-634707953

Or here: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12151040/1/Three-Years

I'm updating it every night, so more chapters coming soon!
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