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Topic Started: Apr 21 2014, 11:30 PM (4,331 Views)
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I'm caught up, Super. This is really good. I love all of the new powers.

The Philosophy Stone and Philosopher is really cool. I really liked his character in chapter 9. Keep it up. I'll be here, my friend.
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I'm all caught up now and wow, certainly got the power aspect down lol. I can definitely see some Naruto influences within your work. I'm also liking the inclusion of elements in this, and not just broad ki.
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What's up with the chest plate?? Are you able to explain more about it, or do I have to wait?
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You and Yusuke are the same, gotta stop when we're hooked... good job ;) .

I couldn't help but remember Superman when you mentioned limits. Exactly how long ago did Piccolo have such an ability?

Like PG said, I'm curious about his plate he discarded.
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Sep 15 2014, 08:28 PM
You and Yusuke are the same, gotta stop when we're hooked... good job ;) .

I couldn't help but remember Superman when you mentioned limits. Exactly how long ago did Piccolo have such an ability?

Like PG said, I'm curious about his plate he discarded.
This takes place after the 28th Budokai Tenkaichi. Exactly 5 years after the tournament, where Uub finished his training.

In the break between the Budokai Tenkaichi and the current Arc.

You can think of it as a weighted clothing. Not going to say anything more than this.

EDIT: From 0 to 10, what will you give this chapter? Do you like the new narrator system?
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Its gave important factual info regarding Piccolo's change, so it's pretty decent.

A 7.8, I think if it were a few hundred words longer I would have given it 8.
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I like the narrator system. In my opinion that and the chapter(s) should be a little longer. It seems once I get started reading it's over.

But... only you personally know what's necessary for your own story. You're the one who knows how long your chapter(s) need to be for you to execute whatever.

I'm not bringing up my own story here in your thread, but that's why I'm currently using a 10,000 characters system, so I can run my story at the pace I need to keep it flowing good, less dragging, just so my readers won't get bored and can get through it well.

That's why I don't usually pay any mind to how long someone's chapter is. But it would indeed be nice if they were a little longer, so I can start soaking in more information for what's going on.
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Well, all of my chapters were less than 10,000 characters. I wanted to be consistent, but I sense a drop of material in each chapter. I'll be working on the 10,000 characters with the new chapter.
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Lol damn! Your Uub is amazingly powerful. Narration is sweet too. Who're the army forces again and what's your mini tier list?
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Lol damn! Your Uub is amazingly powerful. Narration is sweet too. Who're the army forces again and what's your mini tier list?
Uub had to sacrifice everything he had to achieve this kind of power. Lol, you don't remember? They were at the very beginning of the story. Go and re-read the first chapter. You'll know them.

Mini Tier list? What do you mean with that?

From 1 to 10, how much will you give this chapter?
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Wow, wow, wow! It has been three entire months since the last time I posted here. What the heck?

Sorry guys. I'll be back to this as soon as I can. I'm just so sorry.
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I hope this isn't canceled lol
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It's not, rest assured. I was extremely busy with life and school, I couldn't write chapters. With the summer vacation, I'm going to surely finish this arc.
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