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| Dragon Ball Z: Last Days Ch. 2 The Bad, The Evil, and the Worst | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Jun 2 2012, 02:49 AM (2,894 Views) | |
| FollowtheLeader | Jun 2 2012, 02:49 AM Post #1 |
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Location: King Kai’s new planet. (Same place as the old one.) The North Kai paced back and forth in front of his little outdoor table. Sitting at the table was a man, stuffing his face with food, as a monkey brought him even more dishes to satisfy his near endless appetite, as a little grasshopper stared in awe. “Dammit!” King Kai shouted. “Dammit! Dammit! Dammit! Hell-*****! Vagina! Ants in the butt-hole! Goku!!!!!” “Uagh, kuymg kuaaw?” the saiyan warrior said through a mouthful of food. “Goku…..Bubbles! No more food!” The little monkey ran into the kitchen in fear. “Goku….you just had to go exploring! You just had to go with some guy saying Vegeta was the prince of some new planet! He had just one a million dollars, and all that *****! Goku, a galaxy is gone!!!” Goku finished chewing the wad of food in his mouth and swallowed. He demeanor changed to a more serious one. “Yeah, King Kai…but I was thinking that we could just use the dragon balls to restore-” “WRONG!!!” King Kai roared. “There’s a difference Goku! A few million people is one thing! A whole plane is one thing! But a whole damn galaxy?! Goku….the dragon balls don’t have that kind of power. All those people who died….they’re dead, Goku. Get over it. You can’t rush to the dragon balls to solve your problems. Goku!” Goku looked down at his plate, slowly loosing himself in memories of the days gone past….. Location: West Galaxy, five days earlier. Goku was bleeding, his ribs were broken, an his vision was fading. Before his was a fellow saiyan warrior. His was bigger than Goku. He was incredibly strong, stronger than Majin Buu. Goku was in his Super Saiyan 3 transformation, and he was barely beating him back. They had fought into the atmosphere, and Goku was about to try one last plan. Broly….the saiyan’s name was Broly, and for some reason he really hated Goku. Piccolo was down, Gohan was down, but Vegeta….before Vegeta had managed to inflict a few powerful blows onto Broly before he lost consciousness from the surge of energy. He managed to finally, after so many years achieve the third Super Saiyan transformation. But Broly was something else, his power was unlike anything Goku had ever seen before, it was like it had no ending to it. But Goku had one last plan….he managed to get Broly in front of the sun. “Worked on Cooler………worth a shot!” Goku readies himself, and put his arms behind him. Broly saw this and laughing, formed a gigantic sphere of energy around himself. ‘KAKAROTT! AAHH! HA! HA! HA! HA! RUAAAAAGGHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!” “KA…..ME…….HAAAAAA…MEEEEEEE………………..HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!” Goku let the last of his Super Saiyan 3 power go as his kamehameha crashed against Broly’s sphere, engulfing it, and sending it flying the other way, right towards the sun. Goku thought he hear Broly stop laughing, then start up again, even harder. Goku gave the last bit of his Super Saiyan power with a final cry of pain and rage as the kamehameha met with the sun. Most people wouldn’t think this about suns, but they’re very tough on the outside. It would take a massive spirit bomb at least to even damage a sun. But the inside of a sun……that’s different. It’s hotter, but softer. The kamehameha faded out. And Broly was nowhere to be seen, literally. Goku’s eyes shut, and as best he could, he guided himself as he fell. He fell and he feel, feeling the cold of the atmosphere of New Vegeta grip his body and holding tight. Then umf! Goku opened his eyes to see Gohan, a man and a warrior in his own right smiling, tears falling from his left eye, the only eye left after Broly delt a powerful blow to Gohan’s face, and blood dripping from the other. “You……did..it..dad. You….b-beat him.” Goku smiled back. “I think I did…ungh! We need some sensu beans pretty bad right now.” Before Gohan could say anything. Before a leaf on a tree on the far side of New Vegeta could fall to the ground. Before the dust and dirt splashed into Vegeta’s face, finally bringing the Saiyan Prince back into consciousness, it happened. Light. The light from the sun began to dim as son watched in awe, and father watched in horror. “No. No!! NO!!!” Goku grabbed his son, Vegeta, Piccolo, and the few Shamoians he could get together. He didn’t have time to save the rest. He didn’t have time to hate himself for that. Goku landed on earth, near his home. He dropped his friends and collapsed. Back on King Kai’s new planet. King Kai breathed a heavy sigh. His soul was pained with the loss of so many lives. “I’m sorry Goku. I shouldn’t have attacked you like that. You were confident that the heat of the sun would be the end of Broly. How could you know that he’d just go to the center of the sun and cause it to go super nova, ending it all in one big black hole, fueled by his own life force?” King Kai walked over to the table and shat down, holding his head in his hands. “We were lucky that we were able to contain the black hole……but it’ll take power far beyond the Kais if we could even begin to think about restoring that part of the universe. It seemed like it wouldn’t stop growing!” King Kai slammed his fists down on the table. “We call ourselves gods and we can’t do a damn thing to save our own universe! Goku….we owe you for what you did. Even though an entire galaxy is lost, there’s still three left. If Broly hadn’t have killed himself causing the sun to go super nova…he’d probably….no…definitely would have just gone on to destroy everything in existence. I don’t know why we’re all here Goku..I don’t know who made the gods “gods”, but whoever made Broly….they must really hate us. Location: The darkest, most remote corner of the universe. On a small planet barren of any life or intelligence, save for one. A small figure lay on the ground. No more larger than a child. His skin was pink, his eyes pitch black, with red irises. A wicked smile parted the creatures lips revealing sharp fangs as tiny, microscopic pink dots rejoined their host. Those tiny, microscopic, if viewed underneath a microscope, would reveal to be microscopic versions of the pink creature. He had been laying low these past months. He has mastered his most dangerous weapon, his mind. Those little pink dots were his spies. They had infiltrated numerous planets, civilizations, and planes of existence. They had at last found what was needed to kill the one called “Goku”. The child sized pink creature smiled. “Cho-ca-late.” it said in a rough, high voice. The creature vanished. He was off to et his plans into action. He would destroy everything. Majin Buu would fulfill his design at last. Ch. 2 End. |
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| Megasaiyan | Jun 2 2012, 07:58 AM Post #2 |
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Osz Karoly Szilard
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Well, I still find it interesting, a few mistakes here and there, but the biggest issue I'm having is that you made a new topic for this chapter, which I'm sure is not allowed and isn't fair either. |
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| Billa | Jun 2 2012, 08:25 AM Post #3 |
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Thala na Gethu!
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Not bad. I read out of sheer boredom & I've gotta say, I was quite suprised! |
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| FollowtheLeader | Jun 2 2012, 02:20 PM Post #4 |
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Yeah, its allowed.
Thank you. |
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| Megasaiyan | Jun 2 2012, 06:08 PM Post #5 |
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Osz Karoly Szilard
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When posting in the Fan Fic board, there are certain rules you must obey. Failure to follow these rules will result in your thread/post being locked or deleted. In the Fan Fic board, you are permitted to post fanfics about Dragon Ball, Dragon Ball Z, Dragon Ball GT, or even the imaginary series of Dragon Ball AF. But, please make sure you stay within the rules: Threads in this board should only be fanfics. There should not be threads containing only comments or questions. Be sure to keep your fanfic PG-13 or lower. If you think your story is boarderline, then in the Title Description say "PG-13". When posting a fanfic, it's always a good idea to make sure you've used Spell Check to weed out any grammatical errors. Make the fanfics a decent length. Don't just throw together a few sentences and call it a story. Put some effort into your writing. Keep chapters to the same fanfic in the same post. Don't make a new thread for every new chapter you post. Stealing fanfics is strictly prohibited here at DBZF. If you are caught plagerizing or taking credit for somebody elses work, you will be immediately banned from the Fan Fic Board. Don't necro post. This is when you post in a topic that has long since served its purpose. Posting in long since ceased fanfics will force you to pay consequences. > Keep chapters to the same fanfic in the same post. Don't make a new thread for every new chapter you post. What does this mean to you? Edited by Megasaiyan, Jun 2 2012, 06:08 PM.
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| FollowtheLeader | Jun 2 2012, 07:04 PM Post #6 |
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So I am to merely post new chapter in one thread as replys?! |
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| Auld-Dog | Jun 2 2012, 08:13 PM Post #7 |
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Thats the idea mate. Its what we all do, you post in a new chapter as a response. I agree with MegaSaiyan. A mod should be brought in to have a say here. In response to the story. I liked the description, enjoyed the visual element of Goku going SS3 and taking on Broly, you get a sense too that there was an epic battle earlier. Majin Buu, hey, he's a creepy little bugger isnt he, be cool to see what he's got planned. Now thats a creepier thought, Majin Buu (Kid) having the intellect and patience to plan, yeesh. Reckon we can expect Majin Broly Buu... ... Oh dear. |
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| FollowtheLeader | Jun 3 2012, 02:35 AM Post #8 |
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Absorbing Broly?! Whatever gave you that idea?! |
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| Auld-Dog | Jun 3 2012, 09:52 AM Post #9 |
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You've mentioned Broly for starters. Majin Buu (Kid) is still around and active and is now intelliegent to set a plan in motion. Figured the two maybe linked, and who wouldnt want to see the Majin Broly Buu monstrosity?! Bit of overkill for the Z warriors but then again you may have a completely different idea in mind. Either way, look forward to see what you come up with. EDIT= one thing that gets me wondering though is how Buu survived the Spirit Bomb and how Goku was no longer able to sense his chi and what made Buu have the sense to lie low when he has infinite energy??? Not like he couldnt have just attacked the weakened Z warriors again. Unless, its possible the SPirit Bomb sent him into a wierd coma like state... knocking him out for a time... Edited by Auld-Dog, Jun 3 2012, 09:57 AM.
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| Megasaiyan | Jun 3 2012, 03:47 PM Post #10 |
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Osz Karoly Szilard
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Yep, that's the idea. Imagine if it were otherwise;my story has 57 episodes and there are a lot more to come, which would mean this place would be full with all of my threads:))I'm surprised you didn't knew all this. You're here a bit longer than I am, so I thought you kind of did it on purpose. I guess this is your first time posting a story here, so I forgive you:)) You can ask one of the admin's to combine the chapters or just simply continue posting the following episodes here. Don't worry, though; whenever you post something, it appears on the front page, so people will know you've posted. Or you can do as I do: shout on the SHOUT BOX to let others really know:D Good luck! |
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| FollowtheLeader | Jun 3 2012, 07:37 PM Post #11 |
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Chapter 3: The Beginning of the End Location: HFIL. It was a warm day in the Home For Infinite Losers. The morning rounds were being made. This day my Mog and Zog, green and red ogres respectively. Zog was counting off. “Okay…..Frieza….check. Ginyu Force…check. Spice Boys…..check. Garlic Jr.’s other goons…check. Frieza’s goons…check. Frieza….check. Kin-” “For *****’s sake, we all know they’re in their cages were we left them!” Mog roared. “Every freakin’ day with this! To think that this is how I’m gonna spend the rest of eternity! I shoulda’ become a lawyer.” “Ah c’mon, Mog. It ain’t so bad. Besides makin’ sure that the regulator chips are still in workin’ order, there ain’t much we gotta do. Just keep the place clean and the inmates behind bars. What’s to complain about?” “Simple.” Mog said. “That fact that this new technology stuff could short out at any moment, then who’s gonna stop Cooler from ripping me a new *****?!” “You don’t have that much faith I weapons that’ve made our jobs not only a hell of a lot easier, but a hell of a lot safer?! The hell is wrong with you man? Lord Slug…check.” Zog was surprised by his friends fears. “I don’t…I don’t know….it just….hey you forgot Babidi.” “Oh thanks. Babidi crossed offa this here little list of mine o-rooney.” Mog hurried a bit forward. “This is what I mean!” Mog raised his arm, gesturing to the massive bars before them. They were part of the cell that held Hirudegarn. “I mean ever since that Goku GUY came around all he’s done is dump more baddies on us. And yeah, these new Regulator thinga-ma-gigs are nice and all but…just something doesn’t seem right. I mean these things are the “great equalizers?” “I never thought about things like that, Mog. You know why? Casue I don’t touch the Grand Kai’s sticky icky!” Zog hurried down the line. Mog started to chuckle a little. “Ah c’mon, man, that’s just for my sinuses!” Mog hurried and catched up to his partner, completely oblivious to what was behind him. It ws the size of a flea…..no…even smaller than that. It was near microscopic. Completely undetectable, it was in motion, that small, pink dot. It was following them. It was waiting. Mog and Zog finally reached the final cell. It was the newest one, located far away from the rest, in the canyon, within the cave. Mog and Zog were huffing and puffing. “Haaaa……hugghh…Broly….check.” “Ahh!” Mog cried as he cracked his back. “A few thousand years of takin it easy, and I’m outta shape….of *****! Today’s Thursday! Hot cakes in the wreck room!” “I’m with ya there, man!” Zog said with a grin on his face. The two ogre guards ran as fast as they could back to the main wreck room. Hot caks waited, nothing else mattered. Moments after they left the scene, a small, pink dot floating in the air floated towards the dark pink sphere of energy. Location: The darkest, most remote corner of the universe. On a small planet barren of any life or intelligence, save for one. Majin Buu roared in delight. He beat his chest as steam rose from his porous holes on his body. He was happy, he could start killing again. He did not wan’t to die, and the mere though of ‘reincarnation” or whatever that was, just to fight that warrior again…it wasn’t going to happen. “HYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAUUGHH!! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! ME MAJIN BUU!!! ME KILL ALL OF YOU!!!!!!!!” With a flash the pink monster was gone, and silence gripped the planet again. Majin Buu had found a bountiful harvest indeed, and he knew where to start. Location: Inside the mind of Broly. It was raining on a grassy field, though the sun shone brightly, as a man with long, scraggly black hair and strange garbs rested on the back of a large tree trunk. Broly was feeling what he only feeling when he was destroying entire civilizations with a single attack. A feeling he only felt when he was ripping a crying stranger into pieces in front of their fellow victims. His father had called it “happiness”. Broly liked feeling happiness. Though he knew that something was a bit off, that this isn’t what he remembered doing or how he got where his was, but he didn’t care. He was feeling good. Till his body was shaken and flung into the air, were darkness met him again. Location: Outside of Broly’s Imprisonment Sphere, three minutes earlier. Majin Buu appeared before Broly’s prison. He had to work fast, he was no longer hiding, and the Kais were sure to feel his presence soon. Then they would send heroes. That didn’t bother Buu, but he had to hurry, in case he was among them. Only he the power to kill Majin Buu. Buu didn’t like him. Majin Buu would need some…help. He needed more power…..plenty of willing helpers in HFIL. He would absorb them all, weather they wanted to be or not. They’re time would come, but not before this one. Byy could sense in this one….a kindred spirit. Destruction and death reeked off of him. “Buu find new friend. Buu free new friend. Buu absorbs new friend. Buu kills everyone.” The grin that took over Majin Buu’s face would send the bravest man into a corner, crying in fear. Inhaling deeply and drawing his head back in a very disturbing image, Buu let loose a mighty scream. He didn’t know what this pink sphere was, but he didn’t like the feel of it, it need to go bye-bye. The sphere gave way and crumbled. Location: World of the Kais. The cup of tea that Old Kai was holding feel to the ground, his face, his whole body shuddering in fear as a tear ran down is wrinkled face. “No……..” The Supreme Kai, or someone who appeared to be Supreme Kai. “Shin?” Old Kai asked the stranger. “No. I am Kabito Kai. Like Goku and Vegeta before us, Kabito and I have fused. For some reason though, I am the dominant one, but I have Kabito’s power to back me up.” The newborn Kai held out his hand to the elder god. “Come, we must stop Buu before his absorbs Broly, or worse…” The elder Kai took his successor’s hand and they vanished, on their way to stop the end of all life. Location: Outside of Broly’s Sphere. Majin Buu held the wrapped up saiyan over his in triumph, roaring in delight. The ogres were alerted, and they scrambled and panicked, grabbing their regulators and calling for help, but help was already there. A large torrent of fire blasted the canyon side, decimating it. Out of the some flew Majin Buu, with Broly slung over his shoulders. He looked around to see who hared dared to ruin his moment of truimph, the starting point for universal destruction. He found him as the smoke cleared, standing on the opposite side of the canyon. Green skin, white clothing, topped with a black headdress. Pikkon, strongest hero in Other World stood before him. “Now that’s not polite, sneaking in hear and trying to take what’s not yours.” Pikkon threw aside his weighted clothing, and disappeared, reappearing in front of Buu, his arm nearly penetrating Buu’s stomach as it stretched upwards with Pikkon’s arm. Majin Buu cried in shock and pain as Pikkon knocked him to the ground. Majin Buu picked himself up from the rubble, holding Broly close. “You may not remember me.” Pikkon said in his monotone voice. “But I remember you. And before I destroy you, you’re going to feel the power Old Kai unlocked within me.” Ch. 3 End. Edited by FollowtheLeader, Jun 3 2012, 07:38 PM.
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| Pylons | Jun 3 2012, 08:04 PM Post #12 |
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Enjoyed chapter 3 alot. Great blend of action and comedy. My favorite part was the dialogue between Mog and Zog. |
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| Auld-Dog | Jun 3 2012, 10:58 PM Post #13 |
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Nice. Even more scary, Buu absorbing EVERYONE in HFIL. Yeesh! Like the ending with Pikkon appearing, brilliant cliff-hanger with his statement about how Old Kai unlocked his ability just before he prepares to destroy Buu. Mystic Pikkon anyone?!!!!!! Wonder why Buu hasnt just absorbed Broly yet? Heck, just thought, does this mean that Broly will wake up now...???? EDIT= small suggestion. As you appear to be continuing posting new chapters in this post, maybe you could edit the title too to match it and edit the original post so you have a link to the first chapter topic. Edited by Auld-Dog, Jun 3 2012, 11:01 PM.
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| FollowtheLeader | Jun 4 2012, 12:29 AM Post #14 |
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Why thank you! You'll have to tune in. No! I will never ever do that! No! I refuse! |
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| Auld-Dog | Jun 4 2012, 12:36 AM Post #15 |
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Haha ok, didnt plan to knock you off the cliff edge yet anyway, your choice. On topic. Liked too how Buu, maybe for the first time in his existence finds someone who is like him and can relate too, if he abosrbs Broly it could be the ultimate fusion, better than even Super Vegeto!! |
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