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my own dbz character!
Topic Started: Apr 16 2012, 05:02 PM (876 Views)
xxdragonscarxx
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hello, im xxdragonscar and im new on this here forum but i decided to join because i wanted place to show my new dbz character that i made :cool: i worked very hard on both image and history so please think about that before commenting and i dont want any trolls or haters only serious comments plz...

his name is... son evil and he is son gokus evil twin brother. :o_O: when they were born on the sayin planet goku and evils father thought they both too powerful too be together and send evil off to live on another planet where he would train with his trainer dragonscar names after the scar on his eye from his fight with shenlon 50 years ago. dragonscar was old but not weak and could train son evil to become one of the strongest fighters in the universe :cool: . son evil did not know about his brother son goku until the fight with boo was over and he felt the incredble strentgh flow in him and knew he must find this man. he left dragonscar and started looking for his brother and find him on earth where he first was friends but he was angry. son goku got to live the life of hero while evil spend his life training and alone. he now know he must have his revenge and soon the fighting begin and goku soon realise just how strong evil was and that he would be his most strongest enemy yet.... :(

story to be continued, took me long time to write this and i need to take a break :=]:

here are images i made of son evil and his trainer dragonscar (yes i used his name for my but he is a good character maybe i make a threat for him too later :p )

name: son evil
hair: red but yellow when sayin
body: very muscles
special power: a spirit bomb like goku but black and also faster to make
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name: dragonscar
hair: no grey beard
body: thin
special power: dragon claw
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Nimbo-Bimbo lord of all noobs
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Interesting concept I guess, but being brutally honest, I will admit that your drawings are hilariously subpar. You should try drawing with hand, it allows for more precision than using an online program.

And calling him 'Son Evil' is far too blatant. You should come up with a different name, since it sounds kind of childish and cheesy. Same for Dragonscar, it sounds cool, but it's too over the top and cheesy.

And the story you made is an interesting concept, but it's just that: a concept. You should expand it, add more details, and add more dialogue and more characters. What you wrote is basically a summary of what could be an interesting story.

Oh, and welcome to the forums xxdragonscarxx. I hope you stay for a while :)
Edited by Nimbo-Bimbo lord of all noobs, Apr 16 2012, 05:12 PM.
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MysticGotenks
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I like the drawings as a concept. It gives a visualization into what you are trying to portray in your story concept.

I also recommend doing them in free hand. Moreover, Dragonscar looks too much like a tramp - either give him a thin beard, like Nappa's, or give him some hair, he looks too rough as is.

Welcome to the forums! Stay and check out the other threads!
Hey Piccolo......are..are you a Yoshi?
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Indeed, I agree with both of them. You should try drawing using a real pencil or something, rather than the computer. I too hate using PAINT cause my drawings would come out ridiculuos
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