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Dragon Ball Z; King Makayao Arc
Topic Started: Mar 23 2012, 01:42 PM (706 Views)
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Anyone who has read my other fanfics should know that I have the bad tendency of leaving them incomplete. Well, this is a bit different. I'm legitimately going to try, as hard as I can, to update this, at the very least, weekly. Everytime I add a new chapter, I'll include it in this post as a spoiler, and then in another post in this thread as uncovered. Obviously, I will only do this with the second addition and onwards. The prelude will be only in this post.
This story continues beyond the Boo Saga, disregarding the events of GT. I will admit that I do slightly dislike characters introduced at the EOZ (Pan, for example), but I will try my best to fit them into the story and may even change their characterization or power a little. The End of Z didn't give us much to go on with their power. So, without further ado:
Prelude: End of Training

Chapter One: The Disturbance

Chapter Two: Off To Find the Yang Kakusaretaki

Chapter Three: Makayao's War

Feel free to tell me what you think!
Edited by Nimbo-Bimbo lord of all noobs, Apr 24 2012, 01:24 AM.
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Although at the end of DBZ we see Uub flying on Goku's back and not the flying Nimbus, I still like your story. I haven't read your previous ones, but if you say that they're unfinished, then I don't regret. Hope you will finish this one. Good luck!
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Chapter One: The Disturbance

Goku arrived back at his home. Something about it felt right, but awkward. After such a long time, he wondered how his family would react when they saw him. Pan, his granddaughter, Gohan and Goten, his sons... Chi Chi, his wife. She had always been the one most impacted by Goku and Gohan and Goten fighting, the one most impacted whenever Goku left.

"Come on, Oob. Get off," Goku said.

Oob nodded and jumped off the hovering Flying Nimbus. Goku jumped off as well, and walked over to the door. Raising his hand, he opened it and walked in

Goku walked in to see Chi Chi doing the laundry. She cocked her head to see who had opened the door. "What the... GOKU!" she screamed.

She ran to him in furious tears. "You... you're back! I can't believe you're back! You... BASTARD!" Chi Chi screamed.

"Whoa Chi Chi! Tone down the language around the children!" Goku said.

"Is that the delinquent you ran off with to train for the last five years?!" Chi Chi asked.

Oob blushed and looked down.

"Yes, but he's not a delinquent. The reason I trained him was so that he could take on the role as guardian of Earth, and I... could stay with you," Goku admitted.

"You call that an excuse? Don't you know how sad Goten and Gohan were when you left? And how sad I was when you left?!"

Goku didn't respond and looked down.

"Oh... it..." Chi Chi hugged Goku. "As long as you're back," she whispered.

"Now Chi Chi... where are Goten and Gohan and Pan?" Goku asked.

"Well, Gohan and Videl moved into the house next to us with Pan in there, and Goten went into the woods to train," Chi Chi said.

"I see. Chi Chi, do you want to come with me and Oob to see Gohan and Videl, and then I could go and find Goten?"

"Oh, I'll come over after I change my outfit," Chi Chi muttered. "Suit yourself!" said Goku.
They arrived in Gohan's house.

"Hey Gohan! Guess who!" Goku called out.

"What... Dad?! Is that really you?" Gohan asked, putting down his book.

Gohan was wearing an outfit Piccolo had made for him, nearly identical to Piccolo's, barring the turban and shoulder caps. "Now Gohan, you haven't been neglecting your training, have you? I don't mean to be mean, but you feel a lot weaker than since I remember!" Goku teased.

Gohan chuckled. "Calm down dad. We all know the potential possibilities of what would happen if another villain like Majin Boo, or even stronger than him showed up. I've kept in top shape with enough training that I could take on any form of Majin Boo easy by now!"

"That's good. Now, where is my granddaughter? I haven't seen her in a while, and I'm hoping she got even stronger!"

"She definitely did! Me, Goten, and Pan usually train together, and she's been able to keep up with us! Right now, she went with Goten to train in the forest," Gohan said. "Hey wait a minute! Is that the same Oob I saw at the Budokai? He's gotten a lot more muscular and tall!"

Oob blushed. "Thanks Gohan."

"Come on Oob, don't be so shy! You haven't said a word since we got here! Make yourself comfortable. Gohan, I'm thinking of finally settling down for good with Chi Chi. I've trained Oob to the point where he can take on any villain that shows up, stronger than Majin Boo or not!" Goku said.

"That's great! I can feel he's very strong!" Gohan said.

"So anyway, where did Videl go?"

"Oh, she flew over to the nearest town to go buy some food from the market," Gohan said.

"I see. You want to go search the forest to find Pan and Goten with me and Oob?" Goku asked.

"Count me in!" Gohan said.
Goku and Gohan hovered above the ground as Oob got onto the Nimbus. They flew off towards the forest in the distance searching for Goten and Pan's ki.

Oob stopped dead in his track, and Gohan and Goku stopped with him.

"What's the matter, Oob?" Gohan asked.

"I sense... a lot of Yang Kakusaretaki," Oob said.

"Yang what?"

"It's what they call evil ki in Oob's village," Goku explained.

"Well, I don't even feel any big amounts of ki," Gohan said.

"Well, me neither. But maybe Oob can sense something we can't?" Goku asked.

"I don't know guys... this feels as if it is growing, not even alive. Something is being born, or created," Oob said.

"Well Oob, even if it is someone dangerous, I bet if me, you, Gohan, Goten and Pan all get together, we can bring it down easily!" Goku said.

"Well, yeah, I guess that's true, but something about it... makes me feel uneasy."
Edited by Nimbo-Bimbo lord of all noobs, Mar 23 2012, 03:52 PM.
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Mar 23 2012, 03:19 PM
Although at the end of DBZ we see Uub flying on Goku's back and not the flying Nimbus, I still like your story. I haven't read your previous ones, but if you say that they're unfinished, then I don't regret. Hope you will finish this one. Good luck!
Oh yeah, I think I need to edit that. Thanks for pointing it out!
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Chapter Two: Off To Find the Yang Kakusaretaki

Goku could feel a familiar ki somewhere near.

"Hey guys, I think I feel Goten's ki! Come on down here!" Goku said.

Gohan, Oob, and Goku began to fly down to the spot in the forest. Coming closer, they could see it was a gap in the large forest without any trees, just grass and a large pond.

"I can see a pond down there, but not Goten or Pan. I can feel their energy, though. Do you think those lazy kids went for a swim?" Goku asked jokingly.

Gohan, Oob, and Goku landed down in the spot, and looking around them, there seemed to be no trace of Goten or Pan.

"Well... I can feel someone's ki, and it feels as if it's actually inside the pond. Can anyone here hold their breath long?" Oob asked.

"Of course!" Goku said, remembering his fight with Frieza. "I'll just jump in there and see if they went diving a bit deeper down."

Goku took a large breath and dived in. Swimming lower down, he tried to make some sense of where their ki was. Of course, Goku thought. I'll just use Instant Transmission! Putting his fingers to his forehead, he searched for Goten and Pan's ki. ...done! I've locked straight onto it!

In one last shimmer, Goku had already transported directly to Goten and Pan's location, only to arrive in a dry underwater cave. "Whoa!" Goku said, upon realizing he was soaking wet, standing on dry rock, yet still underwater. Goten and Pan were right besides him.

"Goku!" Goten exclaimed.

"Grandpa!" Pan said overjoyously.

"Wow guys, nice to see you! What is this place you guys are snooping around in?" Goku asked.

"Me and Pan have been investigating this place for a while. It's some kind of cave that's somehow dry and you can breathe in, but if you reach your hand out of the cave, you can feel the water. It's amazing!" Goten said.

"Seems pretty cool, but I think it's time we get out of here. Gohan wants to see you!" Goku said. "Grab my elbow guys."

Goku put his fingers to his head and teleported to Gohan and Oob.

"Here they are guys!" Goku said.

"Well now that you found them..." Oob said. "Can we go investigate that Yang Kakusaretaki that I felt earlier before?"

"Can you still sense it?" Gohan asked.

"A Yang what?" Goten asked.

"I can explain later," Goku said, "But for now, Oob is sensing some kind of evil energy."

"Evil energy? Maybe it's another bad guy!" Pan said excitedly.

Goten sighed. Pan had been obsessed with defeating villains ever since she heard of Goku's exploits with Majin Boo, Cell, Frieza, and King Piccolo especially.

"Come on guys, I'm ready when you are!" Goku said, flying off.
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As the new guardian of Earth, i think Goku would have atleast taught uub to fly in 5 years, i kinda like it though and might periodically check up on it.
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Mar 24 2012, 01:28 AM
As the new guardian of Earth, i think Goku would have atleast taught uub to fly in 5 years, i kinda like it though and might periodically check up on it.
Oob can fly, I'm unsure if I ever implied he couldn't. He just likes to use the Flying Nimbus, I guess?
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I still like the part where Goku gives him the Flying Nimbus.
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Chapter Three: Makayao's War

Back at Goku's home, Chi Chi watched the news in horror.

"Huge fights between two factions who call themselves 'Makayao's Resurrectors' and the 'Lotus Cult' have broken out throughout the globe. The members of these factions are not limited to one country, and include thousands of people. Several armies and military forces have attempted to stop this war, leading to many deaths, as these factions seem to possess the ability to fly and shoot energy out of their palms, which were thought to be only held by Earth's most elite fighters, such as the Zetto Senshi. The current progress on stopping this war is being withheld from the government as of now."

"This is terrible! A war with thousands of superhumans? I thought only Goku and his friends could use ki and fly..."
"Guys, something about this is weird. This Yang Kakusaretaki is huge, and the more I focus on it, I can also feel Yong Kakusaretaki as well," Oob said.

"That's weird Oob, because I can't sense any large ki," Gohan said.

"It's not how huge the ki is itself," Oob explained. "It's the inherent evil or good in it."

Gohan pondered it for a while. Does this mean... he can actually sense good and evil?! Gohan thought to himself.
Oob led the group to the massive sight.

"This is... impossible!" Gohan said in shock.

"What's going on? Why is everyone so shocked?" Pan asked, oblivious to the situation.

"No... way. So many people... how are they all flying and using ki energy?!" Goten asked.

"And even more, they're using it to fight! I think what we're seeing... is a war," Goku said.

Far above the Earth, they could all see hundreds of people flying, throwing ki blasts, and warring with each other. As blood began to stain the dirt, Gohan covered Pan's eyes.

"No wonder none of you could feel any large ki. These are all weak humans. What I sensed was a massive amount of evil and good humans, concentrated into one area," Oob said in amazement and shock.

"This is terrible? How can we stop this?" Goku asked.

"We can't, dad. War has been happening since the start of humanity. And this one will pass over eventually. The only way to stop it right now would be to kill them all," Gohan said.
The hooded figure basked in the darkness.

"A war has started already?" he asked.

"Yes, my lord," said his assistant.

"I see. My existence will be made known to the world sooner than previously thought."

"Yes, it would seem. If this interferes with the plans, I will do all in my ability to make sure it is withheld."

"No, it is fine. We will simply have to accelerate our plans. Hopefully, we will dispatch of the Lotus Cult quickly."

"My lord, I don't think you understand the severity of the situation. These are not just isolated gang fights. This is a world-wide war, with dozens of thousands of people fighting. The outcome of the war may depend on a multitude of factors."

King Makayao rose from his throne. "Chaos has already broken out on Earth? This might help. It will make the world easier to take over. But before this happens, I must become... complete."
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