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Durian
Topic Started: Mar 13 2012, 09:43 PM (719 Views)
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So this is a fan fiction that I'm writing in my spare time. I enjoy writing alot but mainly poetry, this being my first attempt at ever trying to write a story. It's centered around dbz after cell saga and before buu saga arc. I don't plan on incorporating many characters from the original series in the story but it will be grounded in the dbz universe and already have a way for it to be planned out to fit into the timeline. It isn't much but this is the opening to chapter 1. I don't have a name for the story yet so I named it after the first chapter for now. I'll rename it when the story is completely planned out :s. Most of the characters names will be based off a fruit, vegetable, plant, much like dbz.

Chapter 1: Portal

“Where am I? What is all this?”
A troubled voice resounded in the dimly lit facility with only the flicker of lights given off by the busy machinery to allow a fleeting glimpse of a shadowy profile.

“The specimen has been processed and we are now ready to begin. Initializing testing protocol”
A cold monotone voice drones. Grinding gears creep up, providing an unsettling rhythm throughout the dark hallows. Wide eyed and bewildered, the captive looks up to find a drill looming in overhead.

“Why are you doing this?!?”
Bound to an operating table, the subject thrashes wildly trying to break free from his bindings as the drill casts a somber shadow overhead. The humming of the drill reverberates through the chambers, as it rotates with more fervor as if crying out from being restrained.

“NO! Stop!”
Piercing his temple, the drill burrows into his head.

“50%, Heart rate rising, subject seizing”
Entwining dizziness overtakes the prisoner, trembling hands that just can’t shake this feeling, of an unending pain that has no ceiling.

“80% complete. Subjects pupils dilated”
Sputtering lights from the baffling machines monitoring and cataloging the findings glare with increased intensity as the readings become more sporatic.

“AHHHHHHH!”
A guttural bellow emerges, after being drown out from the sound of drills rending of flesh and bone.

“Danger! Unidentified energy eminating from test chamber”

The manufactured voice distraughtly declares as the room begins to quake as if it were frightened. Sparks fly and puffs of smoke shoot out of overheating machines as circuitry malfunctions. A dark rift opens above the prisoner, wrapping the chamber like a gift wrapped in fire, fires from the bowels of hell, the type of fire you just can’t quell. Computer apparatus are sucked into the bottomless vacuum. The rock ceiling begins to give as the portal rips away at the compounds very seams, unraveled like the dark plots sewn in that labyrinth, until eventually caving in.
Edited by Pylons, Mar 17 2012, 11:01 PM.
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Pretty interesting, like the style of writing and I'm intrigued to see an explanation. Keep it up!
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Finished chapter 1 :s. It seemed so much longer when writing it out XD. It's just a scene in a lab while providing some backstory, next chapter will be more introduction to characters. I know things still don't make alot of sense but I'll try as best I can to clear it up as it moves along. Looking back I should've been alot more descriptive on certain things, sorry if it's sort of flat. Anxious to get to the next chapter to talk about something brighter. Will go back and add more description later.
Edited by Pylons, Mar 17 2012, 11:29 PM.
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