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| Dragon Ball Finale; Didn't you like DBGT? Want to know how the story really ends? Then read my story and you won't regret it! | |
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| Megasaiyan | May 23 2012, 11:06 AM Post #61 |
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Episode 56: Khitan vs. Vegeta Back on Earth, we see Vegeta and Khitan fighting at an incredible speed. However, it was clearly visible, that Vegeta was more skillful and a bit stronger than his adversary. He punched Khitan so strong, that he flew 140 meters away and crashed on the ground. -Had enough yet?-Vegeta asked with a smirk. -Actually...-Khitan started-I'm just warming up.-then he attacked Vegeta with all his might, only to be punched back even further; he tried several times more, until he realised it was pointless-I will have to come up with something if I want to take this guy down.-he thought, then he had an idea-I guess, it's time to reveal my secret to you of all people.-he said out loud. -And what would that be? I hope it's something worthy of my time, or I will kill you, and I DO mean it. -I don't think so.-then Khitan threw down his cap and cleared his hair from his forehead; suddenly, a third black eye appeared on his forehead, but Vegeta wasn't all that surprised. -Is that it?! So, you inherited your father's third eye...And what exactly do you plan to do with it? Take a better look at me? -Actually, I plan to do this...-then Khitan's third eye color turned silver as it began glowing, which paralyzed Vegeta's whole body; with Vegeta unable to move, Khitan approached him in a relaxing way with a smirk on his face-Now then, how many times do I have to hit you to have your permission to date Bra? Ten was it? Ok, then. One...-then he punched Vegeta in the stomach-Two...-this time his face-Three...-face again-Four, five...-he spun and kicked him twice, however, Vegeta began laughing. -If you think that this puny technique of yours will keep me this way, then you're dead wrong!-then he began powering up tremendously, until he broke free from Khitan's spell and kicked him so hard that this time, Khitan flew 300 meters away; then Vegeta flew where Khitan landed, who by now managed to stand up-By the way, does Bra know about your third eye? Does anyone from your teenager group knows? -Well, no. I'm not really proud of having another eye on my forehead like my father does. Luckily, mine is less visible, and I always keep it closed. But I WAS about to tell them later today, until YOU showed up. -Don't blame me for your cowardness! Now, do you have any other technique that you want to show me or has the time come for me to end your pathetic life? -Hm...there is a technique which I recently perfected, but never had the chance to try it out on someone. You should feel honored to be my test partner. -I just hope it's better than the last one, cause, I'm really losing my patience. -Oh, don't worry. It will be...-this time, Khitan threw down his shirt and began concentrating so hard, that his whole body turned red by the hard effort, and suddenly, four more arms appeared from his back, and this time, Vegeta was completely shocked-I present to you, the "Six Witches' Technique." -This guy is one freaky Earthling!-Vegeta thought-Nevertheless, he does seem to have the potential to be worthy of my daughter. -So, what do you think? -Not bad. Now let's see how well you use them!-then Vegeta powered up and instantly attacked Khitan. This time, it seemed that they were evenly matched; Khitan's six arms were more than enough to block Vegeta's every hit, and he even managed to punch Vegeta four more times. Then Vegeta backed down and fired multiple ki blast at Khitan, who blocked them with his arms. Meanwhile, Vegeta teleported himself behind Khitan and banged his head so hard, that he fainted. One hour later, Khitan woke up with a terrible headache, and he saw Vegeta standing with his back 10 meters further him. -Did I win?-Khitan asked unsure. -I'll give you four months to train yourself!-Vegeta responded-After that, we'll have another battle, where you will have to defeat me in my SSJ3 form. Meanwhile, as I promised, you can also date Bra, but I strongly advise you not to get too distracted by her, because next time, I won't be as merciful like today.-then he took off and flew away. Khitan was on his knees and staring at Vegeta in amaze, as he watched him fly away. He then understood, that was Vegeta's way of giving his blessing for him to date Bra. He began smiling, after that stood up and flew back to his friends to the fast-food. TO BE CONTINUED>>> Edited by Megasaiyan, Jun 16 2012, 02:29 PM.
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| Billa | May 29 2012, 10:38 AM Post #62 |
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Thala na Gethu!
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Awesome. Man, you really have passion for this! Keep up the Good Work pal!!! |
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| Megasaiyan | May 29 2012, 10:45 AM Post #63 |
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Osz Karoly Szilard
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SSJ2 Pan Episode 57: Mission: Save Kibitoshin Previously, on Dragon Ball F, Pan and Xevo took off to find a giant 60-meter-long anaconda, to somehow get a drop of venom from it in order to kill the larvas inside Kibitoshin's very weaken body. Will they succeed? Find out today on Dragon Ball F! Xevo and Pan easily located what they were looking for, thanks to their tracking watch. But instead of finding ONE anaconda, they found a whole nest, with a female anaconda guarding the eggs and nine male ones guarding her. Our heroes now had to figure out how to get the venom from them, since it was rather obvious the anacondas didn't have the need to bite them; they could easily swallow their tiny prey just by opening their mouths. Xevo of all people, had the idea of killing them, but Pan couldn't even harm a fly, less than kill it. Luckily, she had another plan, which this time Xevo didn't quite like, but he had no choice, cause they were running out of time. Xevo flew over the nest and in order to draw the male snakes' attention to him, he started firing his laser gun at them. Of course, he made sure to lower the laser gun's fire power, to prevent it from killing them. All the male snakes immediately attacked him, leaving the female snake alone with the eggs. Now it was Pan's turn. She transformed into a Super Saiyan, and knowing she could ascend further, she pushed herself until she somehow managed to transform into a Super Saiyan 2, as electric aura surrounded her. She knew she wouldn't be able to hold on to this form, for that she needed much more training, but she did not intend that anyway. In fact, she started concentrating really hard, transferring all her electric aura into her right punch, and to her amaze, she even succeeded. Now, her right punch was the only part of her that had an electric yellow aura surrounding it. It was now time to test it. While Xevo was still dodging the snakes' attacks, Pan flew towards the female snake and with all her might, she yelled: -Electro-Shocking Punch!!!-and she punched the snake from her right sideways, electrocuting her instantly, but without killing her; the snake's large body crashed loudly on the ground, near her nest, with her mouth opened, as Pan looked at her, feeling sorry she had to do that to her. Pan saw that the male snakes noticed the female anaconda being in danger, so they started crawling back towards her. Xevo had no choice than to raise the laser gun's power to buy more time for Pan, this time actually managing to injure the anacondas. Indeed, his plan did work, sort of, as five snakes did turn around towards him, while the other four continued their path towards Pan. Pan immediately flew inside the female snake's mouth. Suddenly, a dreadful smell touched her nose: the smell of dead bodies, still being digested, coming from the snake's stomach. She cowered her nose with one of her hands, while she headed to one of the snake's front tooth. She then saw that her plan was a total success: because of the sudden shock, the snake's reflex caused her to release the venom from her teeth, without her even realizing and wanting it. The venom was still dripping from the tooth, while Pan took out a very small bottle and placed it under the tooth until a big drop of venom dropped inside it. Then she immediately turned around and flew out of the mouth, only to be greeted by four more anacondas. She barely managed to zig-zag them all, while she headed towards Xevo. However, it wasn't over yet. Suddenly, the fuel from Xevo's shoes ran out, as he started to fall down to the snakes, one of them opening its mouth wide-open to eat him alive. Luckily, for Xevo, Pan arrived just in time to catch him, thus saving his life from certain death. -Thanks, Pan!-Xevo managed to say, still recovering from the shock of almost dying. -No sweat; now we're even.-Pan replied with a smirk, as they both left the nest and headed back to the town. But will they make it back in time to save Kibitoshin's life? Find out on the next "shocking" episode of Dragon Ball F! Edited by Megasaiyan, Jun 16 2012, 02:31 PM.
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| Megasaiyan | May 29 2012, 10:46 AM Post #64 |
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Osz Karoly Szilard
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And here I was thinking no one read it here>I'm glad you like it. Edited by Megasaiyan, May 29 2012, 12:47 PM.
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| Billa | May 29 2012, 10:51 AM Post #65 |
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Thala na Gethu!
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Aww, you make me feel bad . I honestly feel that you deserve more praises frm everyone here. I mean, not everyone have the passion for this things
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| Megasaiyan | Jun 5 2012, 04:05 PM Post #66 |
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Episode 58: All's Well That Ends Well Pan was flying as fast as she could, while carrying Xevo on her back. The chances for them succeeding to actually save Kibitoshin's life were very slim, and they knew it. Not only, they had to make it back in time, but also wait for Mizuna to bring Xaras with her, not to mention saving Goku's and Bardock's life too. At last, they arrived to their destination, only to see Kibitoshin barely breathing, while Xaras and Mizuna haven't arrived yet. They couldn't do anything, only to wait, while hoping Xaras and Mizuna would make it back in time too. Meanwhile, Xevo decapsulized the house where he put the person's in, he saved, and luckily, Bardock and Goku were also alive. Even though they were still living, it looked as if they weren't even breathing, they just laid there, as if they were already dead. Even their bodies were cold, their souls slowly drifting away. If only that process was visible to human eyes, Pan would actually freak out, seeing his grandpa slowly passing to the Other World. Just then, Mizuna appeared out of nowhere, along with Xaras, as they quickly rushed to Kibitoshin's body. Pan gave the bottle with the venom to Leana, who slowly dropped a small drop of it into Kibitshon's mouth, while Xaras started healing him. Everyone just stared in amaze, while hoping for the best. Suddenly, Kibitoshin's hands started to move, and after that, he managed to open his eyes, seeing the face of the beautiful doctor in front of him. He thought he was in Heaven, so he began smiling and closed his eyes, resting in peace. -Wake up, Kibitoshin!-Pan yelled, which he suddenly did. -What...what's going on?-Kibitoshin managed to ask-Am I in Heaven or not? -No, you silly, you're still alive; we rescued you. -Oh...Too bad... -Quickly!-a townsmen started-Get him into the surgery room! -But why?-Xevo asked. -We might have killed the larvas inside of his body, but we still need to remove them, as their bodies still emanate a small fraction of poison. -Will you please come with me to ease my pain?-Kibitoshin asked the lovely doctor. -Sure. I'll assist you the whole process. Don't worry. I'll make it as painless as possible.-then she smiled, while Kibitoshin thought again he was in Heaven, or in love? -Xaras...-Xevo started-Will you quickly, please heal Goku and Bardock? -Right on it.-he responded, and he headed towards the house, only to see Gohan and Trunks coming out of it, while Gohan was holding Trunks not to fall down. -Papa! Trunks!-Pan yelled, as she quickly ran to them, hugging them both. -Pan!-Gohan shouted happily-You're ok! What happened to us? Where did you find father and grandpa, and even Kibitoshin? -It's a pretty long story. I'll tell you about it after the others wake up too.-while Xaras went inside the house to start healing everyone. -Oh...ok The last thing I remember is that I saw a very dear person to me, alive in the forrest. It was Number 16... -Yea?-Trunks started-Well the last thing I remember, is that I was clobbered by a girl!-then he saw Mizuna, who turned away blushed-Hey, wasn't that her? -Trunks, there is something we have to tell you...-Pan said, while she and Xevo approached him. -What is it?-then Pan began to whisper: -You see that girl over there? She helped us out a lot saving our lives and we promised her a date with you. -YOU DID WHAT?! How can I date someone, when I don't even know her? -Well, you'll know her better once you go out on a date with her. -Yea, and the next thing you know, you tell me that I have to fall in love with her too! -We didn't promise that to her, so that's entirely up to you.-Xevo replied. -Gee, thanks.-he responded sarcastically, while everyone saw Goku and Bardock coming out of the house; Pan of course, was the first one greeting them, as she ran towards them as well, first hugging Goku, then Bardock, which was a bit awkward for him. -Hi, Pan, everyone!-Goku started-What happened here? -Wait until Xaras heals everyone, then we'll tell you all about it!-Pan answered, while Trunks walked towards Mizuna, blushing as well: -So...-he started-Pan told me that I owe you big time for saving our lives; heck, we all owe you. I'm not sure, why would you want to go out on a date with me? -Isn't it obvious?!-Mizuna turned around madly-It's because I like you, dah! -Then why did you clobber me like that?!-while Mizuna blushed again. -Consider it, my way of saying hi!-then Trunks also remembered something about a kiss, but he wasn't 100% sure, so he just gave up and turned towards the house, as more creatures began coming out of it. -Now that everyone is alive and well, we can finally explain what happened to you.-Xevo said proudly. -But what about Kibitoshin?-Pan asked. -He'll find out later. I think he's preoccupied with someone else at the moment. As we leave our heroes rejoicing their reunion, we can only wonder what will happen next, as the thing which calls itself a Megasaiyan, is still out there, and is about to test out its awesome strength. Soon, a great battle for the sake of the entire existence is about to begin, so join us next time too on Dragon Ball Finale! 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| Pylons | Jun 6 2012, 12:03 PM Post #67 |
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Hello, I just started reading your fan fic and can see you're very passionate about it. From reading the first couple episodes some things I'd focus on would be being more descriptive about the characters looks and what's going on. I feel like posting images of what the characters look like takes alot away from the story and instead you should try to describe the characters, setting, attacks, everything with greater detail and let the reader interpret that as they will. Try not to assume the reader knows what's going on in your head. Right now I have it at 2 1/2 stars. Edited by Pylons, Jun 6 2012, 12:04 PM.
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| Megasaiyan | Jun 7 2012, 04:15 PM Post #68 |
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Osz Karoly Szilard
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Thank you for taking your time reading my fic. Indeed, I would agree to you, but for now, this is the best I can. Describing things isn't my thing...yet. I'd rather draw it down, this way, letting readers kind of "knowing what's going on in my head". In the distant future, when I improve more, I do plan developing my story and "remaster" it, but until then, you'll just have to wait:) I hope you will enjoy reading it further and hopefully liking it more! |
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| Megasaiyan | Jun 10 2012, 09:21 PM Post #69 |
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Episode 59: Confrontation On the last episode of Dragon Ball F, Pan and Xevo managed the impossible and saved everyone's life, with the help of Mizuna and Xaras. But it's not over yet, as our heroes still have to face their greatest challenge yet. Stay tuned for more, only on Dragon Ball F! Somewhere on Earth 2.0, we see the Megasaiyan, flying with an incredible speed, this time, wearing clothes on it. It was actually heading into the violent storm, in order to test its strength. Without hesitation, the thing burst right into the middle of the storm, as it was constantly struck by lightning, which had no effect on it. Of course, not even the powerful blow of the wind could manage to flinch it. Then the Megasaiyan looked up and positioned itself in an attack position. Using its ki energy, it blasted all the clouds into space, thus ending the terror of the mighty storm and saving countless lives on the planet, which certainly, was not It's goal at all. -I am finally ready to confront my opponents.-the Megasaiyan started-I can sense that by now, they also recovered their strength, nevertheless, they are no match for me. But I'm sure they will put up a decent fight, as they are the only ones capable of holding me back from destroying the Universe. However, they ARE the good guys, so they deserve an explanation, before killing them.-then it took off, heading towards our heroes. Tsufurukan City...The leader of the city, Tsufurak, has been told to hurry to the headquarters where the violent storm was monitored: -What is it, Leas?-the mayor asked-Is the storm causing more havoc somewhere? Is it already heading this way? -Actually, sir, the storm is gone.-the researcher answered. -What do you mean, gone? -It's gone from the radar, as if it literally disappeared into thin air. -But how could that be? -Do you think it's the work of the Gods? Or maybe the brave warriors managed to destroy it somehow? -I'm not sure. Although we should be relieved and happy that the dreadful storm is finally gone, however, I sense that there is a greater threat to be worried about. And I'm not just talking about this planet, the entire Universe is about to be eradicated, unless the cause is destroyed, and fast. Back in the town, where our heroes were still rejoicing their reunion... -So, that's about it.-Pan finished telling the story of the earlier events; of course, the other creatures which have been saved, were still a bit confused. -Wow...-Goku started-I never thought I would ever need to be saved by a mere Earthling. Thanks a lot, Xevo! -It was really nothing, actually...-Xevo responded blushful. -Too bad Mizuna destroyed that thing; I really would have liked to fight with, uhm...him -I'm actually amazed she managed to do that, considering all the energy he gathered from us.-Trunks added. -Luckily for you guys...-Gohan started, looking at Xevo and Mizuna-That thing couldn't control that many amounts of power all that sudden, as he briefly woke up, so Mizuna had no trouble destroying it. -Are you kidding me?!-Mizuna shouted-That thing pretty much wore me off, but I didn't give in that easily. -Well, I don't know whom Mizuna destroyed, but there's something heading this way very fast, and his power level is higher than even Gogeta's.-Bardock said worried, while all of our heroes felt it, except for Mizuna. -It...it can't be!-Xevo shouted-It's him...it's that thing. He somehow survived Mizuna's blast. -Are you sure? How can you even tell it's the same guy?-Mizuna asked. -I can sense ki signatures emanating from anyone stronger than a normal human being, meaning I can "read" their lifeforce and power level. -Well, I don't sense anything. And how come you can do that and not me? -We'll teach it to you later, if we ever make it out, of course.-Pan answered instead. -Wait just a darn minute! How high is that things' power level anyway? -Way over 3 billion.-Xevo responded. -And how about mine? Tell me! -Uhm...somewhere below one billion... -Are you telling me, you knew all along that I had no chance against it, and you didn't tell me?! -I too was amazed that you actually managed to destroy it so easily. At least, now we're even. Remember how you let me fight those tentacles alone? -I swear, I'm going to kill you after all this! -Quick!-Goku started-Let's leave this town and head to the forrest. We don't want any more innocent people getting hurt or killed today.-so our heroes flew away, leaving the townsmen, the confused creatures, even Kibitoshin behind, while Pan carried Xevo with her; it didn't take too long, until they met up with It.-So, I guess my wish of fighting with you came true after all. But before we get started, mind explaining who you are and why do you desire so much power? -First of all...-It started-You may call me a "Megasaiyan." I am here to destroy the whole Universe, and after my mission is complete, I shall destroy myself as well, thus ending existence itself. -Wow, how original...-Trunks added-Everyone seems to want either to rule the Universe or destroy it. What is up with you guys, anyway? -At least, he intends to kill himself too after that; you have to give him some credit for that.-Mizuna replied to Trunks, which made him a bit blushed. -So, why DO you want to destroy the Universe? Do you at least have a reason at all?-Goku asked the Megasaiyan. -My reason will seem noble and malefic at the same this. -Noble?! -As you know, the entire existence is filled with both Good and Evil, which are constantly battling each other. While Good mostly wins, at least so may it seem, during their battle there are always numerous casualties, who either suffer a lot or die. I'm sure you guys have had your share encountering many evil forces. My purpose is simply ending this futile war once and for all, and the only way to do that, is to destroy the entire existence, so Evil could never be able to reborn. -Are you nuts?! You want to destroy Good as well, along with Evil? Why not just Evil?!-Pan asked madly. -Because Evil always finds a way to taint even the purest of hearts, thus coming back once more, stronger than before, starting the war all over again. However, there is balance between those two, both sides win and lose too, but they cannot exist without the other, so I must destroy both in order to provide true salvation for everyone. Our whole existence is just a mistake, a lie, as we can never truly live in peace forever, not even in the afterlife, cause eventually, Evil will find a way to reach that place as well, causing havoc. But no worries, cause I intend to end the Other World as well, somehow, so we may all be in peace forever, as if we never existed at all. No one managed to say a word anymore. Some of our heroes remembered, that about 15 years ago, Evil in the form of Kid Buu, indeed managed to travel to the Other World, using Instant Transmission, and would have even destroyed it, if it weren't for Goku and Vegeta to get his attention and lure him away from there. This means, that the Megasaiyan's purpose is actually rather significant and somewhat...noble. But does this means that our heroes are actually thinking of letting the thing go and destroy the Universe? Can that be possible? Find out next time, on Dragon Ball F! Edited by Megasaiyan, Jun 16 2012, 02:37 PM.
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| Megasaiyan | Jun 11 2012, 09:45 AM Post #70 |
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Episode 60: The Battle Begins Some of our heroes were still thinking about what the Megasaiyan told them: Goku, Gohan, Trunks, even Bardock. Xevo and Mizuna were confused because of them holding back, while Pan cut in madly: -Are you guys actually thinking to allow that thing to destroy the Universe?! Are you out of your mind?! He claims to be our savior, but he's no better than the Evil itself! Grandpa, papa, are you listening to me?!-and after a few more moments of hesitation, Goku was the one who responded to her: -You're right, Pan. He's no different than Evil itself.-then he turned towards the Megasaiyan-Sorry, pal. Your intention may be good, but I cannot allow you to destroy the Universe; that is not the right solution for our problems. So, I beg of you to reconsider and join forces with us and help us find a better, proper way, to somehow destroy Evil for good, and with our powers combined, I'm sure we will succeed. -Haven't you've been paying any attention?!-the Megasaiyan asked furious-No matter how hard you try, Evil always comes back stronger, and eventually, one way or another, will have the last laugh. Even as we speak, Evil is on Earth, plotting for revenge and world domination. I can also somewhat see into the future, and if I don't succeed in my mission, even you, proud warrior...-then it looked at Goku-...the purest of hearts, shall be tainted by evil in the near future. -What?!-Gohan cut in surprised-I'm sure you're mistaken. My dad cannot be subjugated by evil that easily; in any way at all. That's just impossible! -I'm sorry to disagree with you, but I am the one who can vaguely see into the future, not you.-then suddenly, Bardock was struck by some weird visions too, about his son, him having a different personality, enraged and ruthless, striking down his friends, especially Vegeta, with cold blood; the Megasaiyan noticed that something was wrong with Bardock and immediately understood what-So, I see your friend can also see into the future. Tell us, Saiyan, what do you see? -Father, is that true? Can you really see into the future? What do you see?-Goku asked worried. -Yea, I forgot to tell you that. Sorry. Indeed, I had some visions just moments ago, you turning bad, as if Evil itself has taken over your body and your will. My visions aren't exactly accurate, so I don't know when or how will that happen, but apparently, that thing speaks the truth. -That is just crazy!!!-Trunks interfered-I know Goku since I was eight years old, and I'm absolutely sure he wouldn't allow such a thing to happen to him. Right, Goku?-but Goku was speechless, while everyone fell to silent as well; however, after a while, Goku broke the silence once again: -Although, I too find it hard to believe that I would be so easily tainted by Evil, nevertheless, we should take it into consideration and prepare ourselves for whatever may happen in the future. However, I still disagree with you, Megasaiyan, and I'm almost sure that everyone else does the same, right guys? -You bet! I'm with you all the way, no mather what!-Trunks responded excitedly. -Me too, grandpa!-Pan added. -You already know my answer, dad.-Gohan said. -Mine too, son.-Bardock also added. -Me and Mizuna agree as well, right Mizuna?-Xevo stated. -I'm still angry with you, kid, so don't talk to me!-she replied angrily. -Fools!!!-the Megasaiyan shouted furiously-Do you honestly think that I will sit back and let this pointless war go on forever, for Evil to win in the end?! -I think that, up until now, me and my family and friends, have done a pretty good job keeping the balance in Good's favour.-Goku responded-And we shall do that, till' the end of time, by any means necessary. -Even if it means millions of souls to suffer?! -Everyone has to make a sacrifice. Luckily, we have the so-called Dragon Balls to restore everyone and everything. -I've heard about those balls. Just some other things that Evil will gain control over and use their powers for destruction. I'm telling you, there's only one way to end all this! -Enough with all this talking; you sound like a broken record! I'm warning you for one last time to stand back and leave this Universe be, or suffer the consequences. -Unfortunately, I cannot do that. I only exist for accomplishing that mission exactly, and will stop at nothing until I succeed. -Then prepare yourself to be defeated!-then Goku transformed into a Super Saiyan 4, and attacked the Megasaiyan immediately, of course, punching nothing but thin air, while It elbowed him effortlessly in the back, causing him to crush into the ground-I should have known this wouldn't work.-Goku thought-This was just like when I single-handledly attacked Friezell in vain, being crushed. I will definitely need a lot more help in order to beat this guy.-while his friends prepared themselves to intervene, when, out of nowhere, Kibitoshin appeared near them: -So guys, what's up?-he asked the others. -Kibitoshin, are you alright?-Pan asked. -Look who finally decided to join us...-Xevo started-Anything interesting happened in the surgery room, loverboy?-which made Kibitoshin to blush. -Yea, I'm a lot better now.-Kibitoshin answered-I could still use some healing from Xaras, though. However, that's not why I came here. I felt a very strong and evil presence coming from here, and I can see I was right. Who is this guy, anyway?-he asked, while watching Goku firing a huge Kame-Hame-Ha wave at It. -Kibitoshin, quick!-Trunks started-Take Xevo and the others back to Earth and bring my father here, and Goten too. No wait, bring everyone here; we will need all the help we can get to defeat this guy. -No way I'm leaving you guys to face this monster alone!-Pan objected. -Pan, leave this place immediately, and that's an order!-Gohan shouted at her; Pan was actually amazed at her dad, because he never yelled at her in such a tone, which made her realize, that he was serious as can ever be, when he told her to leave the planet-Kibitoshin, take these kids to safety, and bring back only Vegeta. -What?!-Trunks asked amazed along with Kibitoshin-But what about the others? -If we fail, they will remain the Earth's and the Universes' last defense. And Trunks, it's time for us to try out the Fusion technique you thought me. The dust from the Kame-Hame-Ha wave cleared and obviously, the Megasaiyan survived it. Goku knew all well that it would have no effect on it at all; he was merely buying some time until help arrived. But will that help be enough against the dreadful monster? Find out on the next exciting episodes of Dragon Ball F! Edited by Megasaiyan, Jun 16 2012, 02:39 PM.
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| Megasaiyan | Jun 17 2012, 09:00 AM Post #71 |
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Episode 61: Time Pressure!!! Goku flew into the woods, hoping that the Megasaiyan would follow him. Indeed, It did follow him, and it also knew, Goku was stalling for time, which pissed it off. They were both flying at an amazing speed, the Megasaiyan constantly appearing in front of Goku, who always changed his direction the opposite way. They were flying so fast, it seemed they were teleporting themselves between the trees at great distances. At some point, they ran into the anacondas' nest, which immediately attacked the two warriors. Goku decided to zig-zag them, while the Megasaiyan went through each of them, flying into their mouth at one end, and coming out on the other side. As It reached Goku, it kicked him on his back so hard, that he went through a dozen of trees, crashing on the ground. His lungs were in so much pain, he could hardly breathe. While flying towards Goku to finish him off, the thing was attacked by tens of Korioids, which tried to bite him like Kibitoshin, but as they came in contact with its body, they immediately got pulverized. Goku noticed the thing just in time, and he used the Instant Transmission to teleport himself back to the others. The Megasaiyan wondered where his opponent had gone to, and after sensing his ki back with the others, it became enraged, starting screaming loudly, while his voice echoed through the forrest, as the black aura surrounded his body in an incredible display. -All aboard!-Kibitoshin shouted to the kids. -How exactly are we going to go to this planet called Earth?-Mizuna asked curiously. -It's really simple.-Pan started-All we have to do is to hold on to Kibitoshin and he will teleport us there instantly.-while she, still carrying Xevo on her back, put her left hand on Kibitoshin's shoulder. -Right...-Mizuna added looking sceptical, while she also put her hand on Kibitoshin's right shoulder. -Be right back.-Kibitoshin said, as he put two fingers on his forehead, concentrating on Vegeta's ki; however, before he teleported away, Mizuna let go of him, thus Kibitoshin took only Pan and Xevo with him, leaving Mizuna behind. -Girl, are you nuts?!-Trunks asked madly-Why didn't you go with them? Are you so eager to die or what? -No one tells me what to do, and especially not you, twerp!-she responded furiously-We're not even a couple, and you're already bossing me around. With that attitude, you can say good-bye to our relationship! -Whoever said I wanted a relationship with you?!-while Trunks' words crushed Mizuna's hearth, she barely holding back herself from crying; suddenly, she turned around and flew into the forrest-Mizuna, come back! You don't know what your doing; you're heading for danger!-he shouted after her, starting to regret ever telling her not wanting a relationship; he wanted to fly after her, when all of a sudden, Goku appeared near him out of nowhere. -Father!-Gohan shouted. -Come on, guys! What's keeping you? We are running out of time!-Goku said agitated. -Kibitoshin, should be back with Vegeta any time now.-Gohan answered, after that, turning toward Trunks-Trunks, are you ready to perform the Fusion with me? -But what about Mizuna?-Trunks asked being worried about her. -I'll go after her!-Xaras volunteered. -Go find her and stand by, cause we will need your healing powers!-Gohan rather ordered, then Xaras flew in the direction where Mizuna did earlier-Trunks, I need to ask you...Can you transform into a Super Saiyan 3? -I never tried it yet.-Trunks replied-I don't know if I'm powerful enough. -Will you try, please? -What's the point? Even if I succeed and we perform the Fusion Dance correctly, we will only reach Super Saiyan 4 and be somewhere as strong as Goku. It won't do any good against that thing's awesome power. -Maybe so, but we will also have to buy time for Goku and Vegeta to fuse as well; they are the only ones who can defeat that thing, so we mustn't make any mistakes. That Megasaiyan creep can easily wipe us all out in a split of a second if he wants to, so we must distract it at all time. Now hurry, and try it! But as Gohan finished his sentence, he and the others looked around to see in horror the Megasaiyan holding in his hands Xaras and Mizuna. In his left hand, he was holding Xaras by his neck, while in the other one, Mizuna by her head. It started gripping them harder and harder, while you could actually hear their bones crushing, as they both screamed in agony. Goku immediately teleported himself behind him, using once again the Instant Transmission, grabbing Its long, spiky hair, pulling it upwards. The thing immediately released its victims, starting cursing Goku and being extremely pissed off with his technique, as the bodies started falling down. Luckily, Gohan caught Xaras, while Trunks grabbed Mizuna, before she reached the ground. Goku started spinning the thing faster and faster, until It lifted its right hand and shot a black energy ball at Goku, whom immediately let go of it, throwing the Megasaiyan far away. However, It suddenly flew right back at Goku, banging his forehead with its own, filling Goku's forehead with blood. Elsewhere, Trunks laid down Mizuna on the ground, who was unconscious, while Xaras was still ok. He also asked Xaras not to heal her, so she wouldn't get into any more trouble. Filled with anger, Trunks started powering up, hoping he would ascend to Super Saiyan 3... TO BE CONTINUED>>> Edited by Megasaiyan, Jun 17 2012, 07:10 PM.
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| Megasaiyan | Jun 23 2012, 03:53 PM Post #72 |
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SSJ3 Trunks Episode 62: The Struggle Within The It and Goku were both in mid-air, while blood was still dripping from Goku's forehead, causing him to feel dizzy. However, the Megasaiyan had another surprise for him: It lifted its right hand and formed five black energy balls from each finger, and before combining them, It started: -Remember that so-called Kame-Hame-Ha wave you threw at me earlier?-It asked Goku-I may not sense ki energies, but by taking the blow of your wave, I accurately measured its strength... -And?... -And each of these energy balls is the equivalent of that one wave. Now imagine it five times stronger, as I combine them.-which it did, making an energy ball the size of Goku's SSJ4 Kame-Hame-Ha wave, but five times stronger. -I was afraid you were going to say that... -Sayonara, proud warrior!-the Megasaiyan shouted, as it threw the black energy ball right at Goku, barely giving him time to think. Suddenly, Gohan appeared next to his father, transformed into a Super Saiyan 3, and as they looked at each other, it seemed as if they read each other's mind, both making a Kame-Hame-Ha wave and threw them against the black one, while the white ones also combined. Of course, the black wave overwhelmed the white one, along with Goku and Gohan, causing a huge explosion in the air, which threw our heroes to the ground. As the dust clears, we see both Goku and Gohan still alive, the first in his first Super Saiyan form, while the second in his normal form, both filled with bruises. But the Megasaiyan wasn't through with them yet, making another black Kame-Hame-Ha wave, this time with his other hand: -You barely managed to survive the earlier wave. With this one, I will surely wipe out, both you and the ones behind you.-then Goku and Gohan looked behind them, only to see, Trunks, still powering up and trying to reach the third Super Saiyan form, Mizuna laying unconscious on the ground and Xaras looking back at them amazed-Good riddance to you all!-the thing yelled, as he prepared himself to throw the black wave at them. Just then, it stroke him: FEAR of losing his friends and everyone else dear to him, ANGER towards that thing which called itself a Megasaiyan, COMPASION towards the girl lying in the grass being injured, REVENGE for everyone who has been killed or hurt by that monster with the black aura, HATRED towards It, for thinking it had the right to end the entire existence; all these emotions burned his soul in flames, causing him to cry out for peace, releasing his true power and allowing him to ascend to the next level. Trunks burst out and transformed into a Super Saiyan 3, but it was too late, because the thing was about to fire the black energy ball at them, giving him and the others no time to react. Suddenly, a loud voice shouted GALICK GUN behind It, firing a big white-purpleish energy wave at it, distracting the thing which lost the energy ball, but not damaging it at all. Vegeta appeared near Trunks, while Kibitoshin started healing Gohan, as Goku felt relieved that luck was on their side for a change. -Oh great, more annoying fighters. When will you realise, that there's nothing you can do to stop me?-the Megasaiyan asked. -By now, you should know that we will never give up on trying to destroy the likes of you!-Goku replied. -You should also know that you're only prolonging the inevitable, and I'm starting to lose my patience. You do know that I can end all this in less than a sec, right? -Then why don't you? -I just want for you guys to die in peace. It's rather obvious that you also fight in the name of Good, so you all deserve the chance to accept my proposal and die willingly at my hands for the right cause. -I'm sorry to tell you, but right now, you yourself represent Evil and must be stopped at all cost. -How dare you say such a thing about me?!-the thing shouted, as the black aura reappeared around it, It becoming madder and madder. Not far from the battle, Vegeta stared at Trunks with a little smile on his face, but also feeling sad: -I am proud of you, son...-he started-You managed to transform into a Super Saiyan 3 a lot earlier than I have in my lifetime; heck, you transformed into a Super Saiyan when you were only a kid. If you focused on your training a lot more, you could become the strongest fighter there is. Unfortunately, you achieving SSJ3 is rather insignificant at the moment, cause that thing is way out of your league, even mine. -Thanks, father!-Trunks responded a bit blushed-Your words mean a lot to me, and don't worry. I won't attack that thing on my own; I needed to transform into a SSJ3 so I could fuse with Gohan to buy some time for you and Goku to also fuse. At this moment, only Gogeta can destroy the Megasaiyan. -The what?!-Vegeta asked pissed off. -It calls himself a Megasaiyan. -How dares he relate himself to my proud race?!-then Vegeta flew right at It. -Father, no!-Trunks shouted. -I am a Megasaiyan!- the thing yelled-I'm nor Good, nor Evil, but the End itself!-then, all of a sudden, Vegeta appeared in front if it: -Call yourself whatever you want, but don't you dare call yourself a Megasaiyan! You're no Saiyan, hell, you're not even a human. Just because you have a Saiyan tail, doesn't mean that you've become one. And I heard what your plan is: you want to destroy everything in this Universe, thinking it is the only way to get read of evil. Well, tell you what! Once, I was evil too, and I also know some others who were in my position, but guess what? Against all odds, I changed and become somewhat good, as well did the others. Which means, not only the good can be tainted and become evil, but vice-versa too. -So what? Am I supposed to sit back and hope that everyone will become good again? Is that it? Sure, there are some rare occasions, but it is so much easier to become evil and good. For instance, did you know that your friend there, Goku, if I recall correctly, apparently the purest of hearts, will also turn evil in the near future? -Kakkarott? Evil? Bwa-ha-ha-ha-ha-ha! Don't make me laugh! That's one of the funniest and stupidest things I ever heard. -The one who looks like him, his father, I believe, has also seen the future and can confirm you that I'm telling the truth.-then It looked around, unable to find Bardock-Now where is that guy, anyway? I hope he just ran away and not trying something stupid. Anyway, unless Goku or Kakkarott or whatever, is stopped, it might even kill you in the future. -I don't know what you two saw, but I know for sure that Kakkarott wouldn't kill his worst enemy, unless he was forced to, and I'm a living proof of that. So, enough of this gibberish talk and prepare to die!-the he transformed into a Super Saiyan 4 and attacked It with all his strength. TO BE CONTINUED>>> Edited by Megasaiyan, Jul 3 2012, 01:12 PM.
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| Megasaiyan | Jun 30 2012, 04:30 PM Post #73 |
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Episode 63: Desperation Vegeta was all over the Megasaiyan, or was it the other way around? The thing avoided Vegeta's every hit, which irritated Vegeta. But to make things worse, it began constantly beating him up, in the end kneeing Vegeta in the face, knocking his front teeth out. To Its joy, Vegeta started coughing a lot of blood out, along with his broken teeth. The Prince of all Saiyans screamed in pain, while the Megasaiyan punched him down on the ground, with its Saiyan like tail. While Vegeta was falling down, the thing made a huge black energy ball with his left hand and threw it at Vegeta. The great prince suddenly stopped himself from falling down, only to see the terrifying death ball coming right at him, giving him hardly enough time to react. However, he managed to do a back flip in the air, the energy wave barely missing his head, but cutting down most of his red hair. The blast reached the forrest, destroying everything in its path for hundreds of kilometers; luckily, the rest of our heroes were teleported to safety in time by Kibitoshin. -Kakarot, I would need some help right about now!-Vegeta shouted towards Goku, who by now was completely healed thanks to Kibitoshin. -Right.-he responded, then he turned into a Super Saiyan 4 and flew next to his comrade-Wow, Vegeta! You look just like Recoome, with very little hair and no front teeth, when I first met him back on planet Namek.-while this remark, truly pissed off Vegeta; however, the Megasaiyan looked amazed at Goku: -How is it that you regained all of your strength, all of a sudden?-It asked. -As I said before, we will stop at nothing from destroying the likes of you. Even if we fail today, there will be others left who will somehow find a way to finish you off. It's like when Chi-Chi used to take me shopping and there were these special sale offers: "Buy one, get one free." In this case, you mess with me, you'll have to face many of my friends and family, not to mention the ones back on Earth. -Indeed, you're right. The more I prolong this fight, the more you appear, thus increasing your chances of somehow defeating me. The time has come to end all this. I really tried to reason with you guys, so my conscience is clean. Now all it remains is to go forth with my mission. Good riddance!-then the Megasaiyan started powering up so madly, that the whole planet began shacking, and considering it was three times bigger than the Earth, it meant that this time, the Megasaiyan was done playing around and was going for complete annihilation. The thing then lifted its both hands in the air and instantly made an enormous energy blast with a white sphere inside of it and dark-red electricity flowing around it; the blast was ten times bigger than Goku's Spirit Bomb, which destroyed Kid Buu 15 years ago. Trunks, Gohan, Xaras and Kibitoshin watched the wave completely shocked, while Goku and Vegeta stood their ground firmly, thinking of a way to stop the threat: -Vegeta, quick, the Fusion Dance!-Goku shouted desperately. -There's no time for that, Kakarot! I have a better idea that might just work. -But what if it doesn't? -Just trust me, damn it!-then quickly, Vegeta told Goku his plan. -This end now!!!-the Megasaiyan yelled-BALL OF OBLITERATION!-then It prepared itself to throw the ball of destruction towards our heroes, when suddenly, Goku appeared right behind it and grabbed its tail-AAAAGH!!!-the thing screamed in pain, as if its body was stung with thousands of needles at the same time, while the enormous blast disappeared from the sky-What have you done to me you filthy Saiyan?! -Wow, I can't believe Vegeta's plan actually worked.-Goku said happily and amazed-Even though you're not a real Saiyan, but by growing such a tail, you also gained our races' weakness. -Let me go, you piece of trash! -Not a chance! Vegeta, now is our chance! Use your finishing move, now! -You don't have to tell me twice.-Vegeta replied with a smirk, as he powered up and discharged a red beam of energy towards his opponent-FINAL FLASH!-he yelled. The wave was getting closer and closer to the thing, and with its sudden power decrease, it might have even destroyed it. All of a sudden, two tentacles came out of Its back, piercing through Goku's both shoulders, causing him releasing the thing's tail. Recovering its strength, the Megasaiyan ricocheted Vegeta's attack right back at him, whom had no time dodging or teleporting away, so he got hit with his own attack. Then the thing turned his attention towards Goku, who was still caught in its clutches; however, the monster wanted to teach Goku a lesson for disobeying him, so it enlarged its tentacles, ripping Goku's arms off, while he screamed in agony. Goku's arms fell down on the ground, while much blood splashed along the way, Goku barely keeping himself conscious. -Now I understand why you Saiyans keep your tails wrapped around your waists.-the Megasaiyan said smiling-I guess I should do the same.-and so it did. -What...what are you?-Goku managed to ask. -As your friend said before, I'm nor human, nor a Saiyan. I'm more like a hybrid, and since I stole most of my powers from your race, that's why I look similar to you guys. But as you can see, I'm more than meets the eye. Like my new tentacles?-It asked, while more tentacles appeared out its back, ripping Its shirt off while also putting fear into our heroes' soul. Even Vegeta, who by now was only a SSJ2, was also petrified of that beast. However, something had to be done and quickly, before things could get even worse, so Gohan decided to intervene: -Trunks!!!-he yelled-It's time for us to fuse! -But...but that thing is so powerful...We don't stand a chance!-Trunks responded. -Trunks, snap out of it! Our dads need our help. Even if it means, distracting it just for a very short while, that will give them enough time to fuse. Now hurry and get into position! -Very well...-Trunks managed to say, then both he and Gohan prepared themselves to perform the dance. However, the Megasaiyan was very eager to finish off Goku as fast as possible, so it attacked him with its spread tentacles. Goku has nor enough power to dodge them, nor hands to perform the Instant Transmision. It seems that he's a goner, unless someone miraculously can save him somehow. But who in the Universe can save him now from that dreadful thing? Stay tuned for more awesome battle sequences on Dragon Ball F! P.S: I would like to apologize for misspelling KAKAROT. Up until know I added another K and a T, writing it Kakkarott, but I checked it on the Internet, and found out I was wrong. Unfortunately, I won't make time for correcting it in my previous episodes, cause that will take a lot of time, checking it on various sites, where I posted my story. I will only correct it in the distant future, when I'll expand the episodes. Sorry again! Edited by Megasaiyan, Jul 3 2012, 05:31 PM.
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| Megasaiyan | Jul 1 2012, 04:52 PM Post #74 |
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Osz Karoly Szilard
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DBF 64th Anniversary Episode Well, folks, the time is near to reach the 64th episode of my not-so-famous-yet fanfic:) That's right. I reached the same amount of episodes that of the original DBGT. So, this calls for a special episode. What will make this episode so SPECIAL? I will make it ( hopefully ) the most exciting and best episode yet. Which means it will be somewhat longer than my usual episodes. I already finished writing it in my notebook and will post it ASAP ( in about two days ). But until then, I would like to thank every fan of mine whom commented/liked/favorited my stories and my drawings so far. As I said before, after finishing this saga, I will take a break from it and write a couple of interesting DBZ specials that you all like:) But not after making two more trailers of my fanfic first. With that said, I wish you all the best and have a great, hot summer vacation! SEE YA:) Edited by Megasaiyan, Jul 1 2012, 05:19 PM.
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| Pookie | Jul 3 2012, 02:43 PM Post #75 |
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Pookie Powa!
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I've been reading some of your fanfic. This is way better than GT was so I give you props. I read the last 2 pages so I'm going to start from the beginning, but some things I noticed that could help you get better. Some things you should try -Being more descriptive with battles to get the reader really into it -Try using quotation marks consistently because it got confusing on who was talking. |
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