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The New Android..
Topic Started: Feb 22 2012, 05:23 AM (1,762 Views)
Jamason
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SSj3 Goten

It has been 4 years since Goku left with Uub..
Goten trained with Trunks but not frequently, while Trunks trained vigorously with Vegeta. By now Trunks at base is equal to Gohan post Z-sword training (BEFORE he had his potential unlocked) and Goten was not far behind. Videl trained with Gohan and now her power increased to that of 2nd form frieza. Hercule learned a few new tricks under his sleeve from secretly training with Videl. Vegeta trained vigorously but smarter then he did before in order to test his own limittions, then break them. Majin buu lived with Hercule. He neglected any training and lived in luxury. Krillen and 18 lived in peace with there young daughter Maron. Tien still wandered the planet attemtping to get stronger with Choutzu. Yamcha won the lottery and retired living in a large manson with lots of pretty ladies. Chi Chi still had Goten living with her while Gohan and Videl lived together with there 8 year old daughter Pan. Vegeta and Bulmas daughter Bra was taking ju jitsu lessons while training with her father now and then, although she hated this because hes "too harsh on her".

But there times of peace will soon be interrupted once again, by an unexpected force..

Part one: Peace, Shattered!

Chi Chi: Goten.. oh Goooten..
Goten: *rustling in his bed, trying to stay aseep*
Chi Chi: Goten. *she said in a motherly soft tone with a smile on her face* Im going to count to 3..
Goten: ....
Chi Chi: 1.. 2...
Goten smiles eyes still closed
Chi Chi: 3... NOW GET UP RIGHT NOW BEFORE I SMACK YOU OVER THE HEAD SO HARD MAJIN BUU WOULD BE CRYING!!! *She flipped Gotens bed and Goten stumbles up in his pjamas with a look of fear on his face*
Goten: Ok Ok im up! *He said holding his hands up in front of his as if he was too push Chi Chi*
Chi Chi: Now gt ready for school or your going to be late!

The scene then cuts off with Goten flying out of his house stumbling to put his clothes on in the air as he flies towards the city.
Goten: Crap crap crap!

He flies through a cloud and is stopped by a seemingly solid thing hidden among the clouds

Goten: Ah what the?!

He hovers out of the cloud staring at it beffudled
The object soon released an air preasure that dispearsed the cloud revealing the stranger to Goten.
Goten: D.. Dad?.. DAD!

Goten lowerd himself down in front of Goku excited and smiling hard

Goku: Hello son
Goten: Dad! I cant believe it! i missed you!
Goku: Thats good.. Goten.. *Goku said, his face black and his voice cold.
Goten looked up at Goku and realized something that shocked him to the core..
Goten: Dad.. What.. Why cant i feel your power?
Goku then teleported behind Goten and elbowed him in the neck full force.
Goten: OW! Dad?! what the heck!

Goku lifted up his hand facing Goten and blasted a blast. Goten dodged it and looked at his father angry and confused..
Goten: (Dad.. you didnt release any energy when you shot that.. its almost like.. You have no lifeforce)
Goku eyed down Goten and said in a harsh dark voice: Goten.. You've gotten alot stronger. I can tell.. But it wont be enough foryou to handle what im about to do..
Goten shocked: DAD! What are you saying?!
Goku got in the stance to perform the kamehameha and a purple colored energy was charged, still Goten felt no energy being released from Goku.
Goten: Dad.. I.. *Goten studdered and took a huge gulp* Gruahh!!!!!!
Goten transformed into a super saiyan and began to charge his own kamehameha. Its power was enough to take down the likes of Cell like nothing.
Goku did not hesitate and fired the purple blast and Goten did the same Gotens blast did nohing but becom engulfed in Goku's blast, enveloping him with the full force of the fiersome kameameha.
The blast fired into space and exploded thousands of miles away from the planet.
Goten stay there in the position he was in before, his shirt singed off and pants close to tatters, his body burned and ached with a horrible pain. Goten looked up at Goku with confusion and frustration.. H let out bleakly..
Goten: ... Father.. Whats.. Whats happened to you.. Why are you-
Goku: Enough. This ends now.
Goku sped behind Goten and jammed his fist right into Gotens back, his fist puncturing Gotens body yet not going all the way through. Goten stayed there, too mch in shock too feel the gruesome attack and what would soon follow.. Goten reverts back to base and Goku removes his hand. goten begins plummeting for the ground, the last thing he sees is his fther. looking down at him from the sky with a cold stare in his eyes.
Goten: D.. Dad...

The warped Goku then sent an energy wave towards his half dead son, and incinerates Goten into ashes..

Goku: One down.. Soon. All shall follow my sons fate.

Goku then begins to fly towards the city.
Goku: i sense Trunks.. He will be next.

End scene.
constructive criticism?
Ill be adding new chapters every other day.

Part 2: Goku and Dr. Ao
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Part 3: Fury
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Part 4: Assemble!

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Pat 5: Meanwhile.. On the other side.
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Part 6: An explanation..
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Part 7: Brutal Beating
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Part 8: Too late..
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This ending the New Android Saga. Stay tuned for the sequal saga.

Edited by Jamason, Mar 1 2012, 05:42 AM.
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Dude, I gotta know why Goku hurt Goten! Was he the Android!? Was he being controlled by the Android!?!?!?!?
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That was actually pretty good, I look forward to the rest.
Edited by KingOfAllSaiyans, Feb 23 2012, 02:45 AM.
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The Legendary Nightmare

That Goku is probably an evil android clone
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Jamason
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SSj3 Goten

New chapter updated. Part 2, The Fall of The Prince's Son.
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I like it! Although one thing is maybe change the chapter titles, because it pretty much spoils exactly what is going to happen.

EDIT: Cant wait for the Vegeta vs Goku show down, should be good!
Edited by KingOfAllSaiyans, Feb 23 2012, 02:52 AM.
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Jamason
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SSj3 Goten

Part 3's up. And i changed the titles so they spoiled less :p
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The Legendary Nightmare

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Edited by brolyeuphyfusion, Feb 23 2012, 07:41 AM.
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Novacane for the pain

I like it, very good story. Definitely better than what I can write for DBZ that's for sure. The only thing i'll say is that the structure of writing it like a script doesn't work as well for a story, but that's just me being a little nit picky and it's something that doesn't really bother other people. Nice work though, looking forward to reading the rest.
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Trunks is the Legendary Super Saiyan

You just don't understand the true power of Trunks.
Trunks is the true Legendary Super Saiyan. Broly pales in comparison to him.

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Jamason
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SSj3 Goten

Part 4
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Two thumbs up. I can't wait to see whether or not
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Trunks is the Legendary Super Saiyan

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Feb 24 2012, 02:45 PM
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Would have been a great fanfic if you didn't downplay Trunks.
Edited by Lssj Future Trunks, Feb 24 2012, 03:07 PM.
Trunks is the true Legendary Super Saiyan. Broly pales in comparison to him.

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SSj3 Goten

Lssj Future Trunks
Feb 24 2012, 03:06 PM
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Would have been a great fanfic if you didn't downplay Trunks.
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Part 5, up/
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