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Dec 18 2011, 03:03 PM Post #1 |
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The Legendary Nightmare
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Chapter 1: The Beginning of a Nightmare Chapter 2: The Calm before the Storm Chapter 3: The Nightmare Begins! Chapter 4: The Storm Intensifies! Chapter 5: Super Android 31! Chapter 6: Beyond Super Saiyan 2! Edited by brolyeuphyfusion, Feb 22 2012, 04:15 PM.
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Dec 18 2011, 11:11 PM Post #2 |
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Good fanfic, but it was a little fast paced. BTW: What made you think of this villian? |
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| Illustrious | Dec 19 2011, 09:50 AM Post #3 |
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For starters, you're supposed to use quotation marks when people are speaking. Also, those don't seem like chapters, more like prologues or something. |
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| Copy_Ninja | Dec 19 2011, 10:45 AM Post #4 |
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Novacane for the pain
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Is this just like your ideas for a fanfic? If you expand everything, add some detail etc it could be pretty good. |
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Feb 22 2012, 04:17 PM Post #5 |
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The fanfic is complete! It's short, but I'm not that good at fanfiction |
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| Megasaiyan | Mar 1 2012, 07:49 PM Post #6 |
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Osz Karoly Szilard
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Yeah well where was Piccolo anyway? We see him only at the end... Nevertheless, nice try!
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| Optimus Banana | Mar 2 2012, 12:10 AM Post #7 |
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The first 3 chapters seemed good and original. But to me, it seems like ch4 on you just mixed the plot and fight sequence between super 13 and Bojack. |
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