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Which color scheme should I use for Teen Goku Jr's Gi? (See images I posted for numbers)
1 (Blue Gi+Teal Jumpsuit) 2 (40%)
2 (Teal Gi+Blue Jumpsuit) 1 (20%)
3 (Blue Gi+Orange Jumpsuit) 1 (20%)
4 (Orange Gi+Blue Jumpsuit) 1 (20%)
Total Votes: 5
Dragon Ball Z: Legacy; This is a continuation of DBGT: A Hero's Legacy
Topic Started: Nov 22 2011, 03:23 AM (1,170 Views)
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This is a fanfic I created, continuing the events in DBGT: A Hero's Legacy. It takes place right before the end of the fight between Goku Jr and Vegeta Jr.
I will be adding some art to this soon, but that won't be until my scanner works again :(
ORANGE text is Goku speaking.
PURPLE text is Vegeta speaking.

Chapter 1:

Goku Jr and Vegeta Jr. Facing off in the World Martial Arts Tournament, these two show the most shocking display of power anyone has seen at this tournament in years. The fight begins, evenly matched for the most part, as both boys turn SSJ. They continue fighting, and Goku lands a kick right on Vegeta's temple. Vegeta is dazed for a moment, and descends slightly in an attempt to regain his bearings. However, almost immediately after the first blow, Goku sends him speeding towards the ground with a powerful Ki cannon. Smashing into the concrete of the arena, Vegeta is now realizing the strength of Goku. Vegeta manages to utter "S-so... you're not as bad as I thought... looks like I might have to a-actually TRY... heh, heh..." Goku simply smirks and replies "Oh, were we SUPPOSED to be trying? Oops, I thought we were just getting started." Vegeta jumps up, racing towards Goku. He uses his speed to teleport right behind him, where he send him flying with a strong punch straight to his back. "AaaaaaAAAAUGH!" Goku yells as he is tumbling towards the edge of the ring. As he catches himself, right on the edge, he spins around on one foot, supported by his Ki, and fires a Ki blast directly at Vegeta.
Vegeta easily avoids this, sailing into the air. "HA! Is that the best you can muster up? I would have expected better from someon-UGHH!" Vegeta is cut off, as Goku appears above him and sends him spiraling back to earth with a powerful blow to the top of his head. Vegeta catches himself, and glares up at Goku. Goku descends to the floor of the ring, but Vegeta instantly flies high above it.

"I'M DONE WITH THIS FOOLISHNESS! THE GAMES ARE OVER! I CAN'T DISAPPOINT MY ANCESTORS LIKE THIS!" he screams.
"What is he talking about?!" Goku says to himself.
"THIS IS A TECHNIQUE THAT WAS USED BY MY GREAT GREAT GRANDFATHER... LET'S SEE HOW YOU HANDLE THIS!"
"Oh, *****!"
"....GALICK....!"
"Damn, a simple Ki Blast won't be strong enough... I have to try it. I've never done it successfully before, but now's as good a time as any, I guess..."
"...GUN...!"
"Kamehame..." He felt a powerful energy pulsing through him. He could feel the energy gathering in his cupped hands.
"FIRE!"
"HAAA!"

Goku calls out the chant, and releases the Kamehameha Wave, with more power than he ever knew he possessed.
The two beams collide, sending shockwaves through the arena. The raw energy of the two attacks colliding caused massive pulses of energy to emit from the center.
They were evenly matched, the beams wrestling directly in the middle, neither one giving way.
Goku knew he couldn't lose, because if he slipped up Vegeta's beam would hit the Earth, severely damaging or even destroying it. There was too much at stake. Too many people down there. Too much at risk. He. Couldn't. Lose.

Something came over him, some kind of instinct, some reaction, he wasn't sure, but he felt it. He wasn't sure how , but he knew exactly what to do.

"...K-Kamehameha...!" He spits out the words, barely able to speak because of the stress on his body.
"TIMES TEN!" He felt his entire body surge, and felt the tremendous power release from inside of him. The Kamehameha Wave's aura turned a bright crimson, and it sparked with a powerful intensity. It surged up, through Vegeta's Galick Gun with ease.
Just before it engulfed him, Vegeta was shouting out to Goku "NO! I CAN'T LOSE! NOT LIKE THIIIIIIIIII--"
**
Everything became quiet. Goku fell to his knees, his body giving out from the stress it just endured. His hair fell back down to it's sides, and faded to it's original black. He collapsed, knowing that he had won.

**********



That's all I have so far, just the end of their fight. Give me any suggestions for improvement.

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Wow, very intense. Nice work bro!
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Broskey
Nov 22 2011, 05:12 AM
Wow, very intense. Nice work bro!
Thanks bud, but I'm just getting started. That was basically the prologue. ;)
As I add more, it will showcase Goku Jr. in his teen years, but before I do I would like some help with which colors I should make his Gi as a teen...
Since my scanner is not working, I made some MOCK-UPS in MS Paint (NOT INTENDED TO BE GOOD, MY ACTUAL DRAWINGS ARE MUCH BETTER. But my scanner isn't working so I can't post those YET. :( ) to get some opinions on the color. Tell me which scheme you like the best, 1, 2, 3, or 4?

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3: Posted Image

4: Posted Image

Just vote, 1-4 with the poll above, so I know how I should color my REAL drawings :)
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I voted for 1. I was torn between 1 and 3. I'm not a huge fan of 4 since it's basically just like Goku himself.
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^ yah but the 4th still looks the best try some other colour combos

the first three are eye sores no offence

the story was pretty good though

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read this, stunning visuals, easily pictured events, corny dialogue but works for this genre. wasnt sure about the coloured writing for the different characters, but, i actually liked it, was easy to move through the story an clear to see.

You planning daily/ weekly/ monthly updates or is it just whenever you can?

for the drawings, wasnt sure, i did initially just think the fourth but as wolfganghameha points out, it just a goku knock off, but is still a good visual. Maybe try to get more red in, other than the bandana.

hmm thinking, doesnt Goku jnr have the blue/ torquise palet in the show? The 1st be fine then
http://dbzf.co.uk/topic/8040430/1/
Link to my DBZ fan-fic tale: Saiyans, Frieza, the Ginyu Force and other alien races and beings all chucked into the soup-pot for all out action and glory!

http://dbzf.co.uk/topic/8129945/1/#new
Link to a DBZ inspired story/ battle scenario that i did when i was 16

http://dbzf.co.uk/topic/8071554/1/#new
Link to the Marvel/DC tale of the super-powered hereos and villians of both verses. Biggest heavy-hitters square off in an almight-free-for-all brawl!
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read this, stunning visuals, easily pictured events, corny dialogue but works for this genre. wasnt sure about the coloured writing for the different characters, but, i actually liked it, was easy to move through the story an clear to see.

You planning daily/ weekly/ monthly updates or is it just whenever you can?

for the drawings, wasnt sure, i did initially just think the fourth but as wolfganghameha points out, it just a goku knock off, but is still a good visual. Maybe try to get more red in, other than the bandana.

hmm thinking, doesnt Goku jnr have the blue/ torquise palet in the show? The 1st be fine then


Yes, the dialogue is rather cheesy, but I think it fits with most DBZ dialogue in that manner ^-^
Also, for updates, I'm going to TRY to make it bi-weekly. (I will most likely have an update by this Saturday to start.) And for the colors I wanted to either put a slight spin on what he wore in the movie, or change the look almost completely as he got older. Picture this:
Grey Gi+Red Jumpsuit/Belt
Red Gi+Grey Jumpsuit/Belt
Orange Gi+Black Jumpsuit/Belt
Black Gi+Orange Jumpsuit/Belt
Black Gi+Red Jumpsuit/Belt
Any of those sound good? Oh, and his hair doesn't look like Goku's here because as only a 1/16th Saiyan, his hair grows normally, so he gets it cut. But from what I have planned so far, his looks will be changing ever-so-slightly as the story progresses. :)
Thanks for reading guys
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Nice job :)
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This fanfic is better than GT itself! Lol.

BTW: I voted for 2, it was a really hard choice between 1 and 2, but I voted for 2 because the Gi looks better and it stands out a lot more :cool:
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Ten thousand fists
Dec 1 2011, 09:24 AM
This fanfic is better than GT itself! Lol.

BTW: I voted for 2, it was a really hard choice between 1 and 2, but I voted for 2 because the Gi looks better and it stands out a lot more :cool:
Thanks, you two :)
I know I said I would update last Saturday, but for personal reasons (Let's just say a family member is very ill... ) I couldn't get it out then.

CHAPTER 2 WILL BE RELEASED TONIGHT AT 9PM EST

:)
Edited by Ricky, Dec 2 2011, 12:00 AM.
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Dec 1 2011, 11:59 PM
Ten thousand fists
Dec 1 2011, 09:24 AM
This fanfic is better than GT itself! Lol.

BTW: I voted for 2, it was a really hard choice between 1 and 2, but I voted for 2 because the Gi looks better and it stands out a lot more :cool:
Thanks, you two :)
I know I said I would update last Saturday, but for personal reasons (Let's just say a family member is very ill... ) I couldn't get it out then.

CHAPTER 2 WILL BE RELEASED TONIGHT AT 9PM EST

:)
No problem, I understand. Family affairs are very important, just keep up the good work :cool:
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CHAPTER 2:
Friend or foe?
A new fighter is discovered!

ORANGE - Goku
LIGHT BLUE - ???
3 weeks after the epic conclusion of the World Tournament, Goku begins his intense training, now that his wounds are healed and he is back to 100%. That last fight with Vegeta had conditioned his body (in an extremely painful and unorthodox way, but effective nonetheless.) to a level he couldn't have imagined before.For one, he had now not only become a user of the Kamehameha Wave, but a master of the technique. The strain he put on himself in that struggle paid off, as it strengthened him tremendously. It also gave him better control over his Ki, which increases the strength of his Ki-Based attacks.
***
Goku has gone off to a forest area to train alone, one that is far away from civilization so that he can practice freely. He was in the middle of working on a combination move he created, when all of a sudden he felt a strong power. He turned to see a boy, about his age, standing behind him. Goku went to him, and asked "What are you doing here?" because he thought that he was far away from civilization. "I came here to train. Same as you." the boy replied. Shocked, Goku asked "But how did you get here? I thought I was miles away from any cities..." "I flew. Just like you did. You're not the only one who can do that, ya know..." "If you're here to train, maybe I should-" "And you're not the only strong one, either!" He cut in. The boy leaped forward with incredible speed, catching Goku in the jaw with a powerful punch. Goku regained his footing and suddenly came to the realization that this kid wasn't bluffing.... he was strong. They both charged now, sending bits of dirt and blades of grass flying as they flew across the ground. Their fists collided, striking at the exact same moment. They hit with exactly equal force, sending shockwaves through the air and tremors through their bodies. Goku stepped back, slightly dazed, and fired off a barrage of Ki blasts in the direction he remembered the boy last being. He stood there, regaining his composure as he shook off the dizziness. The smoke cleared, and he saw that the boy was no longer there. "Nice light show, but I'm not that slow." "Oh, *****!" Goku went flying as the boy hit him directly in the center of the face with a hard kick. Goku flipped around in the air, touched his feet to the ground, and used his Ki to redirect his momentum in the opposite direction. He was now charging straight at the boy. "Ka..." He teleported behind the boy, and swept his legs out from under him with a swift low kick. "Me..." Before he even hit the ground, Goku grabbed him by the foot and swung him around, throwing him straight into the air. "Ha... Me..." He cupped his hands and held them behind his body, staring at his target and gathering just enough energy to stun him. He did not want to kill him, only immobilize him. He swung his hands forward, and released the energy. "...HAAA!" The bright blue beam shot forward, connecting with its target. As soon as it hit, Goku pulled his hands back down to his sides, concluding the release of energy. He watched as the boy fell to the ground, completely unmoving.
***


That's all of Chapter 2. Kinda short, I know, sorry. But I promise, CHAPTER 3 WILL BE EPIC. Also, sorry it's a couple hours late, but let's just say I had to spend some time at the hospital with a family member of mine... Anyway, enjoy!
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No comments in a while T_T
Should I just close this, is there a policy or something if I don't get any replies? Do I have to delete it? ._.
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I like it al lot, please continue ;)
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