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| * Lord Cooler | Oct 27 2010, 06:02 AM Post #1 |
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Here is part 1 of a story I'm working on. Battle of the Ice-Jins Planet Cold Cooler deep in thought sits on his throne next to the empty thrones of his father and brother. “Something on your mind sir?” asks Salza who has been watching Cooler for quite a while, too afraid to interrupt his lord. “Why does he favour him so? I’m the oldest, I was first. Here I am left to look after this worthless planet while they go off and conquer a planet together. Well no longer will I stay here. Salza go and rally up any troops who are loyal to me and who will leave this planet with me to find a planet of our own.” “Yes sir right away!” Salza leaves the throne room with a smirk on his face. “Finally I can get away from that bumbling idiot Jeice. He might consider himself my rival but he is nothing but a nuisance. When Lord Cooler overthrows his father I will be sure to find and kill you.” Cooler clenches his fist. “I will find a planet, build up the strongest army the universe has ever seen. And when the time is right I will destroy my father and brother and I will be the strongest in the universe!” Stands up and destroys his throne with his tail. Part 2 Planet Freeza Meanwhile on a planet far away King Cold and Freeza celebrate their conquering of a planet for Freeza. “That was far too easy don’t you agree father?” “Yes Freeza but did we really have to kill everyone? I do think it would have been nice to keep a few alive to recruit them into our army, especially since you’re taking quite a lot of my troops for yourself.” “I suppose I did get a bit carried away but I was so excited. This is my first planet after all. I can’t wait to tell Cooler that I got my own planet before he did hehehe.” Jeice talks to Freeza through the scouter. “Lord Freeza we have located a perfect location to build your home. With your order sir the troops will start building.” “Do not start until I arrive. I want to see if this location is to my liking first.” “Yes sir we await your arrival.” King Cold’s scouter beeps. “Yes what is it, it better be important!” “King Cold sir it appears Lord Cooler has left the planet with a small portion of the troops.” “WHAT! I have always known he would betray me but never this soon. Freeza I must leave immediately.” “Yes father but what would he be up to?” “I have no idea but I must see how many troops I have left and what else he has taken from me.” Cold leaves on his ship leaving Freeza to build his own empire. Part 3 might come tonight and that will finish off the introduction to this story. Edited by Lord Cooler, Oct 27 2010, 09:27 AM.
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| Wintergreen5000 | Oct 31 2010, 05:19 PM Post #2 |
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I like it. I've always enjoyed Freeza, Cold, and Cooler. Pretty tight how Cooler is so rogue. He's dope. Try and make 'em longer though. Hopefully you continue this. |
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| * Lord Cooler | Nov 1 2010, 01:35 AM Post #3 |
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Thanks for taking the time to read it. Will try do another part soon but I have been sick. |
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| keziah | Nov 2 2010, 07:59 AM Post #4 |
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hey lord cooler make sure you will finish this story... i will surely read it... dude i really like the galactic empire business thing of frieza and his family... and dont forget to tell us if the next part is already done... adios!!! keep it up... |
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| * Lord Cooler | Nov 2 2010, 11:10 AM Post #5 |
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Part 3. This ends the introduction to my story Planet Cooler and a father’s wrath Cooler stands over the last survivor of the planet he just conquered. “I will ask you one more time, will you join my army or would you rather join the rest of your race?” “I will never work for a murderous monster like you”, He spits on Cooler with a look of disgust on his face. “Very well if that’s the way you want it to be.” Cooler points his finger at the victims face and shoots a death beam through his head. “Salza order the troops to start building my home straight away. And tell them to make it fast.” “Yes sir, do you have anywhere in mind?” “No I don’t care where just have it done.” “Right away sir, and can I ask what you will be doing Lord Cooler?” “I have training to do. If I’m to overthrow my father I must first become stronger than him.” King Cold is staring at Coolers smashed throne when a soldier approaches. “Sir we have done a head count and it appears that Lord Cooler has taken 30% of your army. And with Lord Freeza’s 40% gone that only leaves you with 30% of your army left.” Cold clenches his fist until it begins to bleed. “Tell the troops to stay on high alert. If they spot Cooler approaching they are to engage him immediately. And do not refer to him as Lord Cooler anymore. No son of mine betrays me like this deserves to be royalty. Also contact Freeza and tell him to start recruiting soldiers for his army. If they don’t join him he must destroy them so that Cooler can’t get them. Now leave me be, I have thinking to do.” Cold sits on his throne with a worried look on his face. Edited by Lord Cooler, Nov 2 2010, 11:11 AM.
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| * -Zero- | Nov 7 2010, 07:47 PM Post #6 |
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It's a pretty interesting story so far, hopefully you continue with it to see where it will lead to. |
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| Wintergreen5000 | Nov 9 2010, 06:29 AM Post #7 |
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Keep it up bro. I hope Cooler gets down with Cold and Freeza soon!
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| ruiruirui | May 22 2011, 03:19 PM Post #8 |
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i like freeza so much!! he is so scarely and so storong!!! |
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| Cal | Aug 16 2011, 08:40 AM Post #9 |
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I may not deserve to live, but I will protect those in my reach with my reverse blade!
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Ever heard of a cliffhanger? You've had 9 months to make the next part, my expectations are high. Truly a great introduction though.
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| * Lord Cooler | Aug 16 2011, 08:57 AM Post #10 |
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OMG finally some more interest in my story haha. I really should get a move on with the story. I have the whole thing thought up in my head but I find it so hard to put into words. Thanks for the interest Cal. |
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| + Pyrus | Aug 17 2011, 05:18 AM Post #11 |
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What the crap? I thought I'd commented on this months ago. Ah well, I'll do it now. I love it. Cooler's one of my favorite characters (in English or Japanese), and you're doing him justice so far. Get this next part up, man! |
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Aug 17 2011, 05:22 AM Post #12 |
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This rocks! Looks like a fight between Lord Cooler and Lord Frieza will be had! |
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| * Lord Cooler | Aug 17 2011, 06:49 AM Post #13 |
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Thanks guys. I really should change the title for part 3. Seeing as it isn't just Planet Cooler we visit. |
![]() Thanks to + Rebel X for the awesome sig above. ![]() Thanks to Anonymous23 (Ana) for the awesome sig above. Don't forget to participate in the Dragon Ball Rewatch! Lord Cooler - I am the supreme master of this universe. I am the great destroyer, the taker of life. I kill when I want, the weak die and the strong survive. Saiyan insect, prepare to be squashed. | |
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Jan 26 2012, 10:41 PM Post #14 |
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Looking forward for the rest of the story if you still plan on finishing it. |
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