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| * Bex | Sep 12 2010, 04:39 PM Post #1 |
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http://viddy193.deviantart.com/art/O-H-O-T-S-S-B-B-179006066 Click the link and tell me what you think. |
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| * -Zero- | Sep 14 2010, 05:41 PM Post #2 |
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That's actually really good, I could see it being a song. It's pretty deep too good job Viddy I could definitely see it being a song, and I'm sure a lot of teenagers could relate to the song which is another plus
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| * Bex | Sep 15 2010, 01:17 AM Post #3 |
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Thanks very much for the feedback ^.^ I guess its just a matter of time before actually writing music to it and making a proper song. |
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| Bouncefox | Sep 15 2010, 08:09 PM Post #4 |
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"What's this? More wolves hungry for the blood of Almire?"
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Eh, I don't read many songs. I can definitely see where you were aiming, and the tone you gave off, but it's just really hard for me to enjoy this fully without hearing something. :< But I like it. The negativity is scary, though... |
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| * Mitas | Sep 15 2010, 08:38 PM Post #5 |
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Yeah I'm the same as Bouncefox. It's hard to get a real feel for the lyrics if you haven't heard it performed. However from what I've read I like it. It doesn't seem amatuerish when I read it, it actually sounds like you know what you're doing. Good work. You should put up a performance of it. |
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| * Bex | Sep 15 2010, 09:18 PM Post #6 |
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There's no music to it yet. |
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| Strawberry | Sep 16 2010, 12:38 PM Post #7 |
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I truly liked some of the verses, while some others I couldn't feel that much... I guess they felt a little bit "studied". But I liked the whole piece in general, I don't remember reading other lyrics from you in the past, how long have you been writing?
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| * Bex | Sep 16 2010, 03:06 PM Post #8 |
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Lyric writing i've probably spent the least amount of time on compared to actually playing the guitar, doing GFX, drawing and even just story writing. I find that trying to write songs like a song sounds more like rhyming poetry, so instead I just organise my thoughts into random segments and then go through them so that some lines arent longer than others etc. Also, don't worry too much about negativity, that's just what I do with my writing for songs at least just so that I can release pent up negative energy but with that said I do try to give it some meaning. |
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