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Broly Movie 10 Remake: Super Warriors Never Die!; Remake of Broly movie 10
Topic Started: Sep 7 2010, 03:51 AM (3,904 Views)
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It takes a mere second for treasure to turn to trash.

I decided to re-write Broly movie 10, since a lot of people seem to think it pales in comparison to movie 8, and, in some cases, I'd agree. This was a project I was working on for awhile in the summer and have put it on hiatus, but, hope to finish it in the very near future. This is part one of everything I already have done. It doesn't showcase much now, but, there will be more actual fighting and Broly is not a psychopathic idiot in this one. In any case, part one!

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Rebirth of the Legendary Super Saiyan
Movie 10 re-wrote

The icy winds roar across the northern mountainside. The air is frigid and cold, yet, something dark looms in the sky. A small vessel descends upon the arctic tundra. The wind howls violently, as the very atmosphere reacts to the power contained inside. Lightning strikes across the land as the vessel harshly crashes into a canyon.
The canyon howls as the frozen-over canyon gives way and explodes. The vessel rests at the bottom of the crater. The ice melts, trickling down into the crater. The vessel, now noticeably a Saiyan pod, glows with faint energy.
"Ka... ka... kakarrot... I..." Broly heaved in agony as the blood from his stomach trickled up his chest and down his neck. His hands shook wearily, as he heaved up blood.
"KAKARROT!!" Broly screamed, reverting back to his base form from Super Saiyan.
Broly's eyes lowered a bit, as looked around the crater slightly. He had absolutely no idea where he was, but, the ice began to reform around the crater. He felt the chilling presence of almost certain death enveloping him. Images of Paragus, Goku, Vegeta and others flashed in his mind. Tears of pure torment streamed down his face as he closed his eyes and fell into a coma.
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Seven years pass, the Cell Games have ended. Son Gohan has taken up a leisurely life as a student at Orange Star High School and recently started training again for the "Strongest Under the Heavens" tournament. His younger brother, Goten, is now seven years old. Goten's best friend, Trunks, is eight. Son Goku sacrificed himself seven years prior at the Cell Games and now, life is rather peaceful.
"Just because I said I wanted to see the Eternal Dragon doesn't mean I wanted to fly all over the world looking for the Dragonballs, you know! This is getting really ridiculous!" Videl yelled at Goten and Trunks, who were easily flying faster than her.
"Nyah! Could you be any slower, Videl!?" Trunks yelled to Videl. "Besides, we only need the six star and the four star!"
Trunks laughed at Videl, as he held the Dragon Radar in his hand. They stood near a valley nestled in between two mountains, the drop off of the mountain gave way to rigid cliff sides and semi-grassy plains below. The cold winds brushed by.
"We really should have brought jackets..." Videl thought to herself.
Goten was searching around on the cliff side below.
"Goten, can't you find it down there? It should be somewhere in the cliff side!" Trunks yelled down to Goten, who was digging around the rocks.
"I can't find it anywhere! It has to be around here somewhere..." Goten said digging through the rocks.
Videl looked to the north and noticed a small village. She raised an eyebrow.
"Why does it look so poor? The land down in the valley here is fertile enough for crops." Videl thought as the cold wind howled by once again.
"You still haven't found it!? I say we just blow up the whole mountainside! That should make it easier, heh heh!" Trunks laughed as he jumped down to assist Goten in the search.
Videl began to wander towards the village, leaving Goten and Trunks in search of the Dragonball. She looked around and saw plenty of crystals in small, cold pools of water.
"Hey, I found it!" Goten yelled to Trunks. The six star Dragonball was resting in a birds' nest, which was sitting comfortably in a crevasse in the cliff side. Goten grabbed it, when suddenly the birds in the nest started screaming. Hundreds of birds flew out from the cliff side and in the valley below and started screaming at Goten and Trunks and swooping them.
"Ah, now look what you did! Goten, you're stepping on one of the babies, you idiot!" Trunks yelled to Goten.
Videl looked back as Goten and Trunks made a quick retreat from the mountainside. They caught up to Videl, who was scanning the area quietly. The wind brushed through their hair as they stood quietly. It seemed solemn, foreboding. Even Goten and Trunks were silenced and slightly afraid of the tone of the village and surrounding area.
"This place... seems... so unnaturally disturbed." Videl said quietly to herself.
Trunks glanced down to the Dragon Radar during the awkward silence and exclaimed, "The last Dragonball is nearby!"
Goten glanced over to the Dragon Radar. "It's that way, just to the right of that weird looking village! I'm going to have a mountain of candy and chocolate!"
"Not before I have my roller coaster park!" Trunks laughed and flew in the direction of the last Dragonball.
"Hey, wait for me!" Goten yelled and flew off after Trunks, leaving Videl alone in front of the village.
"Wait, what!?" Videl thought to herself as she saw Trunks and Goten off in the distance. "Leaving me alone out here!?" She yelled at them, to which they did not respond.
Videl stood quietly, alone for a moment. The vast, icy valley they were in gave way to steep mountain peaks with canyons settled in between. Videl realized how far north they were and sighed quietly, "I wish Gohan were here."
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Videl walked into the village, where a ceremony was taking place by the village priest, Meloja. Their homes were straw and wood, barely able to stand. The villagers looked quite poor and the place was clearly suffering from famine.
"Halt! Who are you?" The village elder stopped Videl, bracing himself in defense.
"I'm Videl. What exactly are you people doing here?" Videl asked.
"We don't take kindly to outsiders. We have enough problems as it is! Now, I ask again who ARE you?" The village elder questioned again.
Videl, slightly annoyed, answered again. "I'm the daughter of Hercule, Mr. Satan. I mean you no harm! I swear."
The village elder looked at her again and got close to her face. He had long, gray hair and a beard and sullen looking eyes.
"Yes, yes... I see. Your heart is pure. Well... if you must know, we are performing a sacrifice." The village elder said as Meloja continued to recite the incantation.
"A sacrifice?! For what?" Videl said in shock.
The elder lowered his head quietly and turned around, resting on his wooden cain for a moment. He stared at the handcarved wooden benches that the people of the village were sitting on, as a young girl stood upon an altar. Meloja continued his incantations, "The great demon who appeared here shall taste the blood of sacrifice to sate his lust! Oh shall it be!"
"What does that mean? What is he going on about?" Videl yelled to the elder.
"I'm sorry, we do not divulge such secrets to outsiders. You are still a stranger to us. I bid you good day, now, leave this place, before you share our curse." The elder said slowly walking away.
Videl tightened her fist and looked around at the poor, cold village. She walked forward, in between the aisles of benches and onto the altar. She grabbed Meloja's staff and pushed it down. "I will slay your monster!"
"You? You will slay our monster? Proposterous!" Meloja said, pointing at her accusingly.
"Why not? You won't even tell me what he's like! I have two very powerful friends that can beat him for sure!" Videl said.
Meloja tapped his staff on the ground and turned his back.
"This monster has terrorized the mountainside for over seven years now, we have not seen him ourselves, but, ever since the explosion... we've had crops dying, weather anomalies and famine. Side-effects of his immense power, I'm sure! Nothing you can do about!" Meloja yelled frantically, pointing his staff at Videl.
"Superstition makes me sick. So, you're just believing that some monster is doing this because you have no idea what it could be? Sounds ridiculous, to me. Do you even have any proof?" Videl asked.
Meloja stamped his staff on the ground. "Of course we have proof! We've seen---" Meloja was then cut off with a fierce, "Enough!" from the village elder.
"We have told you too much. Now, I ask you to leave, stranger. This is none of your concern!" The village elder yelled at Videl.
"But, I---" Videl stopped and looked around at the village who were glaring at her.
"This may not be the best way, but, this is the only way we know to deal with our situation. A dark omen has cursed our land and unless we sate it, it will destroy us. Now, go." The village elder said to Videl.
Videl turned quietly and walked out of the village, in shock at the preparation of the sacrifice she just witnessed. "I better go back at night and see where they take her to... maybe then I'll see what they were talking about." Videl said to herself as she headed towards the direction of Trunks and Goten.
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"Hm, the Dragonball should be around here somewhere..." Trunks said as his stomach gurgled violently. "Ugh... I'm really hungry, Goten. Can we stop?"
"No! I wanna see Shenron!" Goten said looking through a pile of rocks for the Dragonball.
Trunks looked around and sighed. They were at an inlet in between two mountain sides. The sun was setting quickly and the air became even more shrill and painful.
"Goten, it's getting dark. We're not gonna find it like this, come on." Trunks said grabbing Goten.
Goten sighed, "Oh, alright."
"Hey, where's Videl!?" Trunks yelled.
"Oh man, we lost her?! She's gonna be so mad! Let's go!" Goten said as they both powered up and blasted out of the area.
The sun set on the frozen mountaintops. The village, nestled in between the lush valley and frigid mountains remained hush... as if waiting for something.
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Videl stopped suddenly, feeling a change in the wind.
"Something doesn't sit right about all of this..." Videl thought as she looked back at the quiet village. "The girl... the sacrifice, the monster. I wonder..."
Videl's thoughts were interrupted by Trunks and Goten screaming as they leapt down the mountain. "Videl! Videl!"
Videl flinched at the random yelling in the middle of the night and looked back up the mountainside. "Did you guys find the Dragonball?!"
"No! But, we know where it is! We'll look more in the morning! We're tired!" Trunks yelled, he then landed in front of her.
"Aaaand hungry!" Goten said as he landed as well.
Videl looked back at the village again with a concerned look on her face.
"Huh? What're you looking at?" Trunks said, peering past Videl.
"They might have food!!" Goten yelled and leaped down to the village below.
"Wait for me, Goten!" Trunks said following.
"W-wait!" Videl yelled out as she followed Trunks and Goten down.
"Where's the food!?" Goten yelled as the Village Elder came out of his shack.
"Who are you people!?" The village elder said abrasively. Videl floated down next to Trunks and Goten.
"I'm sorry, they're with me! Heh heh... they're just kids." Videl said embarrassingly.
"W-were they just flying...?" The elder said dumbfounded.
Trunks and Goten looked at each other and smiled in the gloomy dusk of the night, faces only illuminated by the dim fire in the center of the village.
"Heh heh! Watch this!" Goten said as he blasted into the air out of sight. Trunks started chuckling as both Videl and the Elder were in shock as he divebombed back down into the ground.
"It's easy!" Goten said.
"A-are you... messiahs?! You are more than welcome to stay here! Please!" The elder said.
"N-no, it's quite al---" Videl was cut off by Goten who blurted out, "Do you have any food!?"
"Why, yes... I believe we do have some! After all! We can spare for great beings such as yourselves, besides, I have a feeling we have some good omens in the coming days!" The village elder smiled genuinely.
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On the other side of the Earth where it was mid-afternoon, a teenage Gohan attending Orange Star High School landed in front of his home.
"Hey, mom!" Son Gohan yelled to Chi-Chi as he entered his home. "Sorry, I'm late! There were some burglars in Herculopolis I had to stop as I came home."
"Always the hero, aren't you? You remind me so much of your father! Which isn't a good thing in this case, mind you!" Chi-Chi said to him with her arms crossed in authority as Gohan took off his shoes at the door.
"I'm sorry, Mom! Heh heh... Say, where's Goten? You said he was staying the night at Trunks'? Where is he now?" Gohan said, looking around.
Chi-Chi walked over to the table and sat down and sighed, "You boys always stray from me... I have no idea! I called Bulma and she doesn't know either. They both ran off to "play" as soon as Goten got there and she hasn't seen them since!"
Gohan groaned in frustration. "I was supposed to train with Goten today! I've really slacked... he's been helping me get back in shape these past few weeks. What sort of mess has he gotten into? Though, that doesn't explain why Videl isn't here."
"What do you mean!? He could be hurt, Gohan!" Chi-Chi yelled.
Gohan laughed and rubbed the back of his head, "Oh, I'm sure he's fine. Here, let me find him." Gohan sat down at the table across from his mom and concentrated silently.
"Huh? That can't be right... they're way up north, almost near the Yunzabit Highlands. And... wait... is that Videl's chi!? What?! What's going on? Why are they all the way up there!?" Gohan exasperated in confusion.
"Y-Y-Yunzabit...!?" Chi-Chi said in shock.
Gohan stood up quietly and tightened his gi, "Yeah, I guess so!"
"FIND THEM!" Chi-Chi yelled as Gohan gulped and ran out the door.
"Geez, I didn't even get to eat dinner..." Gohan thought as he started flying north to find Goten and Trunks. "Oh well, I'm pretty far away, I'll stop in Herculopolis and get something to eat. I doubt they're in any real trouble, anyway."
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Several hours later, in the twilight before dawn, Videl awoke softly to noises in the village. The noises, were small, but, whispers and other soft movement. She leaned forward and saw torchlight moving away from the village and Meloja, the village priest, walking up a path to a large nearby mountain. She blinked softly and rubbed her eyes. She put her feet down in the straw floor of the "house".
Videl stood up, the cold mountain becoming illuminated by the suns rays. A slight feeling of warmth from the sunlight peered into the cabin as it hit Trunks and Goten both sprawled out on their bed. She smiled softly at them and then walked over to the door and cracked it open. She saw the Village Elder sitting calmly by the campfire as the village priest carried the sacrifice up the mountainside while chanting loudly.
"Let the beast within this mountain be quelled by the blood of one of our innocents! Only then, will our crops grow and be fertile, will the cold cease! Alakh mi na sa moraiya!" Meloja called out.
"What!? He's killing that young girl!" Videl thought as she bursted from the house. "What are you doing!?" she yelled.
Meloja, too far up the mountain to hear, continued. Videl yelled, "Answer me!? Do you really think this will solve anything!?"
The village elder lifted his head slowly, tears in his eyes. "She's my granddaughter... I... We've... lost hope. His way may not be the best... but, it's all that we have."
Videl grinded her teeth, slightly saddened for the poor villagers as she whipped her head back and screamed, "GOTEN!!! TRUNKS!!!"
Goten and Trunks, shocked, fell out of their beds in disarray as Videl began flying to the top of the mountain, which Meloja had already reached. Meloja set his staff on the girls' right shoulder and left shoulder. The girl began tearing up as Meloja continued the sacrificial rites. Videl landed a few feet away, standing near the ledge to the gigantic drop down into the ice-filled crater.
"You don't have to do this! This won't solve anything!" Videl said frantically.
"Quite interrupting, girl! You know nothing!" Meloja said cynically. He then continued, "Kalazkx makra ni oni su vasa! Cleanse the mind and soul for the beast!"
Goten and Trunks landed on the other side of Meloja in the gloomy twilight, the sun flashing over the crater as the wind swept by. Slightly warmer, but, still bone-chilling.
"Stop it or we'll beat you up!" Trunks said out of desperation.
Meloja snickered, ignored him and continued. He pulled out a dagger.
The girl began sobbing loudly, weeping violently and screaming. She tried forcing her way out of Meloja's grasp. Who got angered quickly.
"Stop crying! Stop crying!!" Meloja frantically yelled. He dropped his staff and tried shaking her.
"Do something Goten!" Trunks said.
Goten, out of desperation, started fake sobbing too.
"B-but... y-y-you can't k-kill her... sh-she's so p-pretty... t-take Trunks instead!" Goten yelled, sobbing.
"Me?! ME!? Take me!? That wasn't my idea of a plan, Goten!" Trunks yelled as Videl kicked Meloja in the head and his staff flew down into the crater and smashed loudly into the ice.
Deep within the icy crater, Broly stirs. He hears the crying of Goten and the girl and soon remembers Goku crying in his crib. This frustrates him, however, cold memories of Goku's punch to the stomach and his entire body literally exploding with blood fill his mind. He becomes enraged. Images of Paragus enslaving him and using him as a tool of destruction fill his mind.
"You're ruining EVERYTHING! You destroyed my staff! You... shall... pay!" Meloja screamed, stepping forward along the narrow crater's edge. The icy husk of the mountainside began to shake slightly.
"What is this, an earthquake?" Videl thought.
Broly shook inside the Saiyan pod. Vicious childhood memories filled his head, feeling trapped once more like he was for so many years by Paragus' mind control device.
"Ka... KAKARROT!!"
The ice in the crater began to crack as large ice chunks broke and fell off of the mountainside and down into the valley below. The villagers ran and hid.
"Wh-what... no...!" Meloja said in fear as he fell down. The girl began sobbing and running down the path to the village. Meloja ran down as well.
"Videl! Wh-what's going on!?" Goten yelled.
"I-I-I don't know!" Videl said back in utter confusion at the situation.
The entire mountain started to crack and emit a green glow. Suddenly the craters' ice shattered and a huge explosion erupted.
"KAKARROT!!!"

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I'll update with part two in the very near future! I would appreciate any feedback. Thank you. :)

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It's a good setup and I look forward to seeing more, honestly. I'm really anxious to see how you've changed the story (hopefully for the better). It's good so far.

In fact, you've given me inspiration to do something like this (not trying to steal your thunder or anything).
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It takes a mere second for treasure to turn to trash.

Haha. I'll post a bit more tomorrow if I remember, how's about that? However, I will have to finish developing the rest of it before I post the last part.
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Definitely post more whenever you can. I'm into this, man. I am into this.
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Two days late, oh well!

Part Two: Awaken the Legendary Saiyan!

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A small pizza parlor stood on the busy streets of Herculopolis, filled with bustling activity of workers on their lunchbreak, casual eaters and one Son Gohan.

"Haha! Wow, Gohan! You were amazing today in kickball, I'm glad you were on our team!" Shapner said, patting Gohan on the back. "Nice of you to take me up on my offer for pizza later!"

Gohan rubbed the back of his head and gave a cheesy smile. "Well, I happened to be in the neighborhood, heh heh."

Eresa laughed at Gohan. "Gosh, Gohan, you're so cute. Always trying to be so innocent and friendly!" She smiled at him flirtaciously.

"Did you hear about Steve dating Alicia? Oh man, what a mismatched couple!" Roger said as Shapner laughed.

"Definitely, I did NOT see that one coming!" Shapner said in response.
Gohan looked around. "High School sure is different, heh." He thought to himself as he took a bite of his pizza.

"So, Gohan, what about you and Videl?" Shapner asked Gohan, elbowing him in the side lightly.

"Huh, w-wh-what do you m-mean?" Gohan said blushing.

"She's always going over to your place after school. What's been goin' on?" Shapner said with an added chuckle.

"Training! Of course! What else?" Gohan said puzzled.

"Oh, training. Riiight." Roger said as Shapner chuckled.

"Hey, hey, lay off him. I'm sure it's nothing, right Gohan? Gohan?" Eresa paused and looked at Gohan. "What's wrong?"

"He's frustrated we figured him out, that's what's wrong!" Shapner exclaimed.

Gohan's fist clenched and he grinded his teeth. "What is this chi...?! It's... so familiar. Could it...?! It's right by Goten, Trunks and Videl..."
Gohan stood up. "I have to go!"

"Ahaha! C'mon Gohan, we're just messing around." Roger said apologetically.

"Sorry guys!" Gohan said leaping out of the window behind their booth and running around the side of the building. "I have to go... this feels very, very bad!" Gohan thought as he blasted off from Herculopolis at full speed towards Goten, Trunks and Videl.

"What... did he just... jump out the window?!" Shapner said in fear.

"Now look what ya did! He got scared and hurt himself, you jerk!" Eresa said, slapping Shapner.

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"Wh-who is that?!" Goten said pointing.

"Is that the monster they've been talking about? Just looks like some guy..." Trunks said, confused.

Broly looked around puzzled. "Where am I...?" He said quietly to himself. He looked down and saw Goten. "Kakarrot!?"

"Wha?" Goten said confusingly. "What's that?"

Broly roared and blasted towards Goten and kneed him in the stomach. Goten flew back a few feet and rolled on the ground in pain. "Why did you do that, you big jerk!?"

"He is not Kakarrot... But, I must be on Earth... Of course." Broly thought.

"This must be Kakarrot's son..." Broly smirked.

Videl stepped in the way of Broly.

"Listen, I don't know who you are, but, you're not gonna go around beating little kids! You brute!" Videl yelled at Broly.

"And YOU will stop me?" Broly said, laughing. Videl stepped back in fear as she got in a fighting stance.

"Videl! This guy isn't normal!" Trunks said, glaring at Broly. Broly punched Videl in the stomach as she heaved up some blood.

"Squishy." Broly said as he charged a chi blast with his fist still in her stomach and blasted Videl off of the mountain.

"V-Videl!" Goten screamed as he got up and turned Super Saiyan. Goten flew at Broly and punched him wildly in the stomach and kicked him across the crater. Broly slammed into the crater wall.

"Hoh!!" Goten yelled as he charged up a large wave of chi in each hand and released it as a huge barrage of blasts on Broly.

The side of the mountain collapsed and large amounts of smoke erupted.
"Heh, good work, Goten! Sure made easy work of that "monster"!" Trunks said laughing. "Wait, where is he!?"

Broly appeared, wounded a bit, behind Trunks and stomped on his back and he landed face flat in the ground.

"Hm... this doesn't make much sense. This is Vegeta's son... but his name is Trunks? Were they shrunk?!" Broly thought, very confused. Goten appeared behind Broly and kicked him off of Trunks. Broly backflipped and landed.

Trunks stood and turned Super Saiyan as well. "You're tough, but, you can't beat us Super Saiyans!" Goten laughed, "Haha, yeah!"

Broly smirked and wiped the blood off of his lip. "I won't just beat you. I WILL KILL YOU!" Broly roared and turned Super Saiyan as a huge blast of energy erupted, destroying the rest of the mountain.

"Wh-what?! How is he... a Super Saiyan!?" Trunks said in fear. They barely had time to react before Broly grabbed both of their heads and slammed them downward as he kneed them in the face simultaneously.

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Gohan paused for a second, he was floating mid-air over the ocean. "What is this energy... No... I-it couldn't be... He's dead. And Videl... I can't feel her chi..." Gohan said in fear and anger. He blasted off full power once again heading straight for Goten and Trunks.
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Goten tried punching Broly in the face, but, he grabbed his fist and swung him into Trunks who was attempting to kick him in the back. Broly shot a chi ball at them both and launched them into the side of another nearby mountain, which exploded on impact.

Goten and Trunks appeared on the right and left sides of Broly and shot two large chi attacks. Broly jumped over them and grabbed them and swung Trunks' blast at Goten and Goten's blast at Trunks.

Trunks narrowly dodged, but, Goten got clipped in the left shoulder as the blast exploded. Broly smirked at Trunks and flew at him. Broly appeared in front of Trunks and laughed.

"Ugh!" Trunks powered up quickly and hit Broly in the face, who smirked.

"Wh-what are you!?" Trunks said. Broly punched him in the stomach and elbowed him downwards and kneed him in the face. Broly grabbed him by the hair and lifted him up.

"You won't need to know when you're dead." Broly said laughing maniacally as he spin-kicked Trunks mid air down into the valley below.

Broly looked over and all was silent. "Really, is that all you've got?"

"HA!" Goten yelled as he shot a Kamehameha up from behind Broly. Broly looked behind him and the blast hit him directly in the back.

Broly turned around and smirked. "Impressive!"

Goten was in complete shock. "My turn!" Broly yelled as he shot towards Goten with a large amount of concentrated chi in his hand. He grabbed Goten's leg with his other hand and punched Goten straight in the throat as the chi exploded. Goten went back to base form as Broly held him in the air.

"Pathetic. I would expect more from the son of Kakarrot." Broly said as he charged another large chi blast to kill Goten. Suddenly, Goten turned Super Saiyan again and full-power kicked Broly straight in the jaw, slamming his mouth shut. Broly, in pain, released Goten as he started a large wave of ki blasts at Broly. Goten floated mid air, screaming "Hyah hyah hyah!" as the discs hit Broly in the smoke and exploded.

"It's... not... over yet!" Goten yelled, with blood trickling down his face. "Ka...me...ha...me...HA!!!" He yelled, shooting a full power Kamehameha straight into the smoke. The blast exploded violently and blew Goten back. Trunks leaned up from the rubble.

"Woah... I didn't know he had it in him!" Trunks said in base form, smiling. "Ugh... that guy's tough though..."

Goten cheered. "I felt that one hit home!" The smoke cleared and Broly reverted back to base form and fell down into the valley, laying on his back. The wind swept by gently as the Legendary Super Saiyan lay still.
"Did... did you kill him?!" Trunks said, running over to Broly. Goten landed as well, still in Super Saiyan. Goten looked at Broly.

"He looks really peaceful... he doesn't really look that hurt though." Goten said.

Broly's eyes flashed open as he smiled and turned Super Saiyan.

"G-G-Goten!" Trunks said. "I g-guess he has the same s-s-sense of h-humor!" Goten cried out as Broly grabbed them both, standing up and pile driving them into the ground.

Broly laughed as he stomped on Goten's back and kicked Trunks across the ground.

"I'm tapped out, Trunks..." Goten said hacking up blood. "That attack took way too much outta me!"

"Heh, even you runts can put up a decent fight! Saiyan blood, indeed." Broly said. "Come at me! I'm enjoying this!" He said smiling and then laughing.

"Who ARE you!?" Goten yelled at him.

"I am Broly!" Broly said, charging violently towards Goten and Trunks. Goten, being nearly out of energy, was clotheslined into a rock. Broly grabbed him and threw him down.

Broly laughed at Goten as he slid to the ground.
Broly turned around and Trunks turned Super Saiyan and swept Broly up from under his feet. Trunks then kneed him in the stomach, smashing him into the ground. Broly grabbed him and slammed his face into the cliffside. Broly held him and slammed him into it again.

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"Wh-what is this!? Trunks? Where are you?! This chi... Kakarrot, you damn idiot, once again you fail to finish them off!" Vegeta said, standing up from his bed in Capsule Corp. "Fortunately, I'm not soft like you." He said smirking. "I'll finish him!" Vegeta roared, turned Super Saiyan and blasted full speed out of his window.
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Trunks kicked Broly's arm violently, which did nothing to loosen his grip. Goten lifted himself up barely. Goten flew and kicked him in the back, which had no effect. Broly, with his left hand still gripping Trunks' face, swung around and grabbed Goten's face with his other hand. Broly then charged two large amounts of chi in both hands and blasted them through the cliff.

The cliff imploded in on itself. Trunks powered up and roared, screaming.
He swung at Broly, who dodged and kicked Trunks in the neck as he slid across the ground, now in base form, coughing up blood.

"I... I can't beat him..." Trunks said as his vision blurred slightly. He looked up and his eyes widened. The sun played down into the valley as Broly slowly began walking over to Trunks. The sun hit the orb and its orange glow illuminated the surroundings briefly.

The four star Dragonball. It was somewhere in or on that mountain that was just destroyed! Trunks ran towards it, but, Broly flew over and kicked Trunks down, then slamming his right foot down on his legs.

"Where do you think you're going?" Broly looked up and saw the Dragonball. "That's not a rock..." Broly thought to himself, but, paid it little attention.

Broly stepped down hard and began crushing Trunks' legs. He started laughing maniacally.

"I could have sworn you were Saiyan! Trash!" Broly said, crushing Trunks' legs, smirking.

"GOTEN! I... I can't move! The Dragonball! NOW!" Trunks screamed out as Goten pulled out of the rubble.

"The Dragonba...!" Goten said as he powered up and flew over to it. Broly charged a chi blast and shot it at him, which Goten dodged. The resulting explosion sent the Dragonball sliding across the valley. Broly, while still standing on Trunks, began shooting a barrage of chi disks at Goten. Goten dodged four of them, but, was hit by the fifth and was blasted next to the Dragonball.

Goten coughed up blood and reached down, grabbing the Dragonball. "Th-the bag... is in the house." Goten stood up and began to fly towards the village.

"G-Goten!" Trunks yelled as Broly roared and kicked Trunks in the gut. Trunks flew over the side of a cliff and down into another more lush valley below, landing face down, unconscious. Goten flew over the village, but, was not fast enough, as Broly appeared in front of him chuckling.

"I'm gonna die... T-T-Trunks..." Goten said, quivering in fear. Broly grabbed Goten by the shoulders and tugged violently, dislocating one of Goten's arms. Goten yelled in pain as Broly swung him into the partially destroyed village.

"Your effort is wasted. Now, perish along with the rest of this planet!" Broly yelled as he powered up and blasted downwards towards Goten who was laying near unconscious in the rubble.

Just as Broly was nearing Goten, Gohan appeared. Gohan quickly turned Super Saiyan and reached under Broly's arms and flipped him backwards, throwing him violently into the same valley that Broly kicked Trunks into.
Gohan panted and landed next to Goten and began shaking him.

"Goten, Goten! Are you alright?!" Goten opened his eyes slightly. "Ugh... Gohan... he's unbeatable. He beat us up... I think Videl didn't make it..." Gohan's fist tightened as he looked over at Broly who was rising up from the valley.

"Broly..." Gohan said quietly. Goten leaned up, holding his dislocated arm with his good one. "Broly... you know him, Gohan!?" Goten exclaimed, coughing a bit.

"Yeah... he's a Super Saiyan that Dad defeated seven years ago. I guess, he survived... Now, he's a lot more powerful than even before. But, I don't know about unbeatable. He hasn't transformed yet?" Gohan asked Goten.
"W-wow... Yeah, he's a Super Saiyan! See!" Goten pointed.

"Hmm... maybe because of the scars Dad gave him, he can't turn into his Legendary form like the last time. I might be able to win this!" Gohan thought as he turned to Broly.

"Hahaha!" Broly laughed as he looked over at Gohan. "So, big brother has arrived to save the day? A bit late, aren't you?"

Gohan's fist tightened as Goten laid back down in pain. "Stay down, Goten. Get some rest. I'll handle this." Gohan powered up to full-power Super Saiyan and charged at Broly.

Broly smirked and charged at Gohan. They began exchanging blows violently at a lightning fast speed mid-air.

"W-woah... they're so fast." Goten thought, still barely awake.

Broly punched Gohan in the gut, who retaliated by kicking Broly in the back of the leg. Broly grunted in pain and swung at Gohan, who slapped his fist out of the way and tried punching Broly in the chest, but, he dodged and grabbed Gohan by his shin and threw him against the cliff-side. Broly shot a large chi ball at Gohan, who deflected it back at him. Broly moved his head and dodged it.

Gohan appeared behind Broly and entwined his hands and swung at Broly's shoulder. Broly elbowed Gohan in the stomach and swung around, kicking him in the neck, sending him flying into the valley below.

"Damn... he's really tough. He might just be a bit stronger than I am right now." Gohan said, blood trickling down from his mouth and panting.

"Where's Kakarrot?" Broly asked as he began charging a chi ball in his hand.

Gohan was caught quite off guard by the question. "Dad died seven years ago defending the Earth! And I will too if I have to!"

Broly is shocked by the realization that Goku is dead, however he smirks. "And you will." Broly throws the chi blast at Gohan.

"No! I knew it!" Gohan puts his arms up and a chi barrier that he had been forming appears around him. The blast hits the barrier directly and explodes, echoing outwards with a shrilling roar.

The explosion causes a huge crater to blast out violently in the valley. Trunks is consumed in the blast as well and is sent flying out of the valley over the cliff-side near Goten, still unconscious, but, close to death.
The smoke clears and Gohan is kneeling down, panting and slightly bloodied. His gi is torn up at the shoulders and arms.

"Damn... even though I could sense he was building energy, that was still quite an attack to guard against. He even broke through my chi barrier. If he keeps doing those, I'm finished!" Gohan thought. "I don't know how I'm going to beat him like this."

"What? He put up a barrier? He's better than I thought." Broly said to himself, smirking as he charged at Gohan once more.

Broly uppercutted Gohan, who, as he was flipping backwards, kicked Broly in the chest and powered up which pushed him several yards backwards. Broly roared and flew at Gohan. Broly tried kneeing Gohan in the chest, but, Gohan dodged and kicked Broly, who slid across the ground. Gohan charged at him and tried swinging again, but, missed. Broly ducked under Gohan as he swung and put his hand to Gohan's stomach.

"Wh-what?! Dammit!" Gohan thought as Broly smirked and released a large chi ball into his stomach. Gohan flew about twenty feet backwards before the chi ball exploded and he landed on the ground. Gohan groaned and stood back up, panting. Gohan resumed a defensive stance, as Broly began quietly charging energy in his fist again.

"That same attack won't work on me again, Broly. You won't catch me off guard anymore." Gohan said smirking. Broly's eyes widened a bit and he re-absorbed the chi he was building.

"Hmph." Broly grunted.

Gohan stared at Super Saiyan Broly for a moment. They both stood still in silence.

"Why are you even doing this, Broly?!" Gohan yelled out to Broly. Broly seemed caught off guard by the question.

"Obviously you're not a pure-blooded Saiyan!" Broly said, launching at Gohan once more. "BIG BANG ATTACK!" A voice rings out from a hill nearby in the valley. A huge blast fires at Broly. Gohan and Broly are both caught off guard as the blast directly hits and explodes outwards, consuming Gohan in the explosion as well.

"Heh. Legendary Super Saiyan, pathetic." Super Saiyan Vegeta said as he lowered his hand and jumped down, walking through the smoke as it cleared.

"Wh-what?! Vegeta?" Gohan said, now more wounded from the explosion. "Ugh... I didn't even sense him coming!" Broly is clearly wounded now, as well, with blood trickling from his forehead and arms, which took the brunt of the explosion.

"Vegeta... another worm crawling out of the woodwork!" Broly said laughing.

"Feh. Trash? I am the Prince of Saiyans! You are a mere low-class warrior, Broly. I don't care what you are." Vegeta said, landing in front of both Gohan and Broly.

"The great Prince Vegeta has his ego back? Hahaha! I seem to remember you cowering in fear last time we met!" Broly said laughing.
Vegeta looked sharply over at Gohan.

"You know you can't win like that, you fool! If you're so hesitant, I'll do it for you!" Vegeta said roaring. Both Broly and Gohan look on in shock as Vegeta's chi skyrockets and his muscles grow slightly larger. Electricity forms around him and his hair becomes spikier and more defined.
"V-Vegeta! You've ascended the Super Saiyan level, too!" Gohan exclaimed.

"Yes, I have. Unlike you, I have kept up my training. I've become too powerful now. It seems the Legendary Super Saiyan can no longer live up to his reputation after his beating from Kakarrot! I'll make this quick." Super Saiyan 2 Vegeta said, powering up.

"Wh-what?!" Broly said, sensing Vegeta's chi. Vegeta slams his fist across Broly's face, flies behind him kicks him in the back and then shoots a large chi ball into him as he slams into the ground. Broly gets up, shaking slightly and even more wounded.

Vegeta begins laughing with great pride. "Ah, THIS is the Legendary Super Saiyan!?"

"You can't even transform anymore. This is just too easy!"

"N-no... I am the Legendary Warrior! I cannot be defeated!" Broly said in fear.

Vegeta began laughing hysterically at this point. Gohan looked at Broly and then back at Vegeta.

"What...? He really can't transform anymore?" Gohan said.

Broly smirks, wiping the blood off of his mouth.

"What're you smiling about, trash?!" Vegeta yelled, pointing at Broly.

"Yes, Vegeta. Laugh. That's what I want to see... Now, I'm going to slaughter YOU!! I want to see your face contorted with fear, now,
HAHAHAHA!!" Broly yelled as he lifted into the air and began screaming. Rays of light began shooting out of his chest.

"Wh-what?!" Vegeta yelled. "N-No!!" Gohan thought as he put up another forcefield.

Broly screamed as his chi exploded outwards and the sky turned from a cloudy, light blue to magenta then to yellow, then to a dark gray and then to a deep purple as the light re-focused on him. His chi exploded further outwards, consuming Vegeta and Gohan in the blast. The ground tore up and the entire valley became leveled, the trees became uprooted in a vehement tearing sound. The beaming light refocused on Broly, who was roaring under his breath.

The vicious aura could be seen from miles. Vegeta was slightly bloodied from being consumed in the energy wave. Gohan was mostly unaffected by it, due to his forcefield. Broly smiled maniacally as looked at Vegeta, who was in awe and fear.

"Not laughing anymore, Vegeta?"
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Wow, superb chapter. The only thing I didn't like was Goten and Trunks lasting rather long against SSj Broly. That was sort of unrealistic, at least with the way I see their power, but it was good action nonetheless. Broly copying Goten's "playing possum" technique, that was quite brilliant.

I'm glad you did some things the movie failed to deliver on, such as Gohan using SSj against Broly, and Vegeta even making an appearance. Nice work. I'm curious to see how this will go.
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Well, I figured since Broly was just toying with them, they would last a little longer. Evidence of this is the fact that Goten and Trunks only managed to actually do a little damage to SSj Broly when catching him off guard, while SSj Gohan was actually able to do a bit of damage in combat. But, I do see where you're going. This is, in no way, a finalized version. I may re-edit it and make that part a little bit shorter.

Yeah, haha. I was trying to give Broly some actual personality, as well as giving Vegeta a good moment in there. I'm going to get working on Part III. It will retain some aspects of the original movie 10, actually quite a few, but, tweaking them and adding more to the actual fight scenes. That's what I aim for the next part. :)
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Well, I figured since Broly was just toying with them, they would last a little longer. Evidence of this is the fact that Goten and Trunks only managed to actually do a little damage to SSj Broly when catching him off guard, while SSj Gohan was actually able to do a bit of damage in combat. But, I do see where you're going. This is, in no way, a finalized version. I may re-edit it and make that part a little bit shorter.

Yeah, haha. I was trying to give Broly some actual personality, as well as giving Vegeta a good moment in there. I'm going to get working on Part III. It will retain some aspects of the original movie 10, actually quite a few, but, tweaking them and adding more to the actual fight scenes. That's what I aim for the next part. :)
I was wondering how they were putting up such a good fight and then I realized Broly was still in Base. Then when he went SSj I was like "hell yeah, he's about to one-shot them and show them up, unlike in Movie 10". I admit I was reading and just going "come on, why is he taking so much time taking them out?", but your explanation soothes things quite a bit.

I'm actually really glad you gave Broly some personality and gave him more lines in here than he had in his entire movie career. Haha. He seems pretty smart now, honestly.

What are you using to determine Broly's strength? Opinion mixed with that research you did, or something else?
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Research I did, but, I am going to have a little fun with it.
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I´m into this neci, Keep it up 5*, Maybe i will... base a sprite work on this if you don´t mind?
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It takes a mere second for treasure to turn to trash.

I'm really trying to change Broly's backstory and try to give some real depth to his character. I'll probably end up making him look like a softie in disguise, which isn't my goal... so, this will require some tweaking.

I was going to work on it for another hour, but, I just realized that I have two big ***** assignments due tomorrow. *****tits.

And go ahead, Nusu. :) That'd be cool with me, and cool in general! :D
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I'm really trying to change Broly's backstory and try to give some real depth to his character. I'll probably end up making him look like a softie in disguise, which isn't my goal... so, this will require some tweaking.

I was going to work on it for another hour, but, I just realized that I have two big ***** assignments due tomorrow. *****tits.

And go ahead, Nusu. :) That'd be cool with me, and cool in general! :D
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Part III: Birth of Insanity

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"Still laughing, Vegeta?" Broly said as he disappeared and re-appeared in front of Vegeta and grabbed him by his throat, lifting him up. "I don't think so." Broly said, laughing insanely as he began crushing Vegeta's throat.

"N-NO!" Gohan screamed as he too transformed to Super Saiyan 2 and kicked Broly viciously in the back, which had no effect. Broly dropped Vegeta and swiped him with his arm mid air and sent him flying through one side of a hill and out the other. Broly roared and slammed into Gohan.

Gohan flew several yards before grabbing the ground with his hand, scraping his hand up, but, regaining his balance. Gohan leaped and punched Broly straight in the face, which had no effect.

Broly smiled and punched Gohan mercilessly in the stomach. Gohan coughed blood up on Broly's arm. Broly dragged his fist upwards and uppercutted Gohan. Broly then grabbed his face as Gohan was flying upwards (from being uppercutted) and slammed him into a rock.

Broly then charged a chi blast with the hand holding Gohan's head into the rock and blasted Gohan down.

Vegeta roared and powered up to full power and blasted towards Broly and kicked him in the chest, which made Broly lose his balance and fall back a few feet. Vegeta reappeared on the other side of him, swiping him at his neck. Broly grabbed Vegeta's leg and slammed him into the ground.

Broly then backflipped while still holding onto Vegeta's leg and slammed Vegeta onto the ground and landed on him. Vegeta screamed in pain.
"Still got some fight left in you?" Broly said smirking as he stepped off of Vegeta.

"Trunks... I can barely feel your chi." Vegeta thought, panting as he looked up at Broly, who was merely smirking maniacally and looking down at him. Vegeta stood back up and roared, flying into the air.

"Would the Legendary Super Saiyan DARE take this head on?! Bwahaha!" Vegeta said, powering up once more. Vegeta outstretched his arms and two large chi bombs appeared in both of them.

Broly chuckled. "Prepare to face your fears... AND DIE!" Broly yelled as he formed an energy shield.
"FINAL FLASH!" Vegeta said, slamming his hands together and a giant ray of pure energy shot toward Broly.
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"I had suspected as much... the Earth will be destroyed." Piccolo thought, standing at the edge of Kami's lookout. He threw his weighted clothing down.

"Dende, I must go. The Earth is in danger." Piccolo said nodding to Dende and blasting off of Kami's Lookout.

Dende stood quietly and felt Broly's presence. "It is in danger... I wish I could do something to help. This power is unlike one I've ever felt before."
Dende walked over to the edge of the lookout and stood quietly.
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"I... I gotta... the Dragonballs..." Goten said to himself as he crawled through the partially destroyed village, heading to the guest home they stayed in with the four star ball clutched in his hand.
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Broly flew at Vegeta as an energy shield formed around him. Vegeta roared as the blast thickened. Broly was struggling a bit, but, pushing through Vegeta's attack.

"N-No!" Vegeta yelled as Broly punched him in the stomach. Vegeta coughed up blood and leaned forward a bit.

"Ugh... I underestimated him... He's too powerful." Vegeta said looking up at Broly, who was chuckling.

"Had enough yet?" Broly said. "I killed your son and now I will kill you. Everything that your weak mind has found solace in at this planet will be destroyed. And you will be POWERLESS to STOP ME!" Broly said laughing.

"T-Trunks... I... Ugh..." Vegeta said. Broly dropped his head down and kneed him in the face then elbowed him downward into the ground.

Vegeta laid in the rubble, still in Super Saiyan 2. Gohan stood up, still in Super Saiyan 2 as well.

"Vegeta... I'm sorry." Gohan said as he looked over at Vegeta. Vegeta had tears in his eyes as he roared angrily.

"Heh." Broly grunted.

"I HATE IT! I'm always second to Kakarrot... and now, I can't even defend my family... and... YOU KILLED MY SON!" Vegeta said roaring as he flew at Broly violently. Broly grabbed Vegeta by his arm and twisted it. He yelled in pain. Just as Broly was going to slam him onto his knee, he was blasted in the back by Gohan, dropping Vegeta.

Vegeta swung his leg around and kicked Broly in the neck, who grunted in pain.

Broly swiped at Vegeta, who dodged and sent a large blast into Broly's chest, which exploded outwards, sending Vegeta down into the field again. He glided across the ground and gently landed. He began to wildly fire chi blasts into the smoke.

"Goten... KA... ME... HA... ME... HA!!!" Gohan screamed, firing a full power Kamehameha into the smoke as it blasted Broly straight into the ground and exploded. The entire valley cracked and a huge amount of energy erupted from underneath, the ground cracking, seeping through.

Gohan's inner rage kicked in as Vegeta looked on in shock, flying next to Gohan and powering up, charging two huge amounts of chi in each hand. He clapped them together and shot a huge beam down into the same hole that Gohan blasted Broly into. It exploded and the ground completely shot into the air, cracking apart and being destroyed completely.

Shrapnel from trees and a cold roar erupted as a lot of green energy came out of the ground. Vegeta screamed violently as he put everything he had into the blast, merging his into Gohan's. Gohan powered up and finished his blast as well.

"V-Vegeta! We'll destroy the Earth if we put anymore power into this!" Gohan said powering down.

"You damn fool! HE KILLED TRUNKS!" Vegeta yelled as he roared.
Gohan grabbed Vegeta's hands and stopped him from continuing to fire the blast. Vegeta slugged him in the stomach.

"You... little *****!" Vegeta said.

"Vegeta... I'm sorry. There is no hope for any of us if you destroy the Earth." Gohan said to him, who nodded his head slightly and powered down. They both landed near the village, overlooking the utterly massacred valley, with tiny amounts of cracked land left and a huge black pit going to nothingness below.

Gohan panted as Vegeta stood up and looked around the village. He saw Trunks laying amongst some rubble and walked over to him and picked him up.

Vegeta's eyes opened slightly. "He's still alive!"

"W-wow... they... they did it! I guess we don't need Shenron..." Goten thought as he painfully pulled himself back over. "That big Broly must be super tough... he wasn't even going all out at us in his Super Saiyan form... I definitely wouldn't have wanted to be Gohan a few minutes ago!"

"I... I don't sense Broly. Did we do it?" Gohan thought as a large hand clasped his shoulder.

Gohan turned around, shocked. However, he was greeted with a smile.
It was Piccolo.

"P-Piccolo! You came!" Gohan said. Piccolo smiled.

"Of course I came, Gohan... I can't just sit and watch on the lookout while Broly is on Earth." Piccolo said. "Here... you might need one of these."
Piccolo gave Gohan a senzu.

"W-Wow! Yeah... I'm really worn out. I put everything I had into that one blast." Gohan said eating the senzu, his gi torn up at the ankles and only one shoulder part remaining.

Vegeta ran over to Piccolo.

"Give him a senzu, NOW!" Vegeta said demandingly. Piccolo nodded and gave Trunks a senzu.

"Eat it, Trunks! It'll heal you!" Vegeta said as Trunks slowly chewed the senzu. Slowly his eyes opened. "D-Dad...?"

Vegeta looked down at Trunks for a quick moment and smiled, but, suddenly realized his act of compassion and dropped Trunks on his head.
"Ow!" Trunks said, slowly standing up. "I'm really stiff... where's that Broly guy?"

"Dead. Vegeta and Gohan finished him off." Piccolo said. "Or did they...?"
"Or did they...? What are you getting at!?" Vegeta said as he took a senzu from Piccolo for himself.

Gohan, meanwhile, gave Goten a senzu. "I can't even sense Videl's chi... that bastard... she's dead..."

"I'm saying Broly is a tough opponent. You've noticed how his chi just builds back up no matter what you do to him. Not even Goku could kill him seven years ago." Piccolo said.

"Peh! "Goku" was too weak! Just like with Freeza! He didn't have the guts to finish him off, but, when his son over there pops a blood vessel and rips loose and I show the true power of a Saiyan prince, there is no way that brute could survive!" Vegeta said cockily.
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Broly laid in base form underground, trapped under a pile of rocks. Very hurt, but, not mortally wounded. He went into a semi-coma like state again. His mind began to go into the past.

"Broly... my son, you only exist for one purpose. To serve me." Paragus said to a recently mind controlled Broly. "I love you son, the only person who ever has. Everybody hates you Broly, you are a freak. I'm the only one who knows your true power, and values it!" Paragus said smiling.

"Yes... father." Broly said, tightening his fists lightly.

Broly's mind flashed again as he saw himself flying over a city in Restricted Super Saiyan.

"Destroy! Broly, destroy!" Paragus said, laughing, using his mind control device.

Broly grunted and launched the chi blasts down at the city as they exploded violently, roaring outwards and killing all of the inhabitants.
"Bwahahah! Soon, the entire galaxy will be destroyed!" Paragus said, clapping Broly on the shoulder. A small child ran out of the rubble, crying loudly.

Broly pictured Goku crying in his crib, however, he was not angered by it, rather saddened.

Paragus seemed confused as Broly landed in front of the child. "I'm sorry." Was all he said to the child, in his calm, restricted demeanor.

"My parents are dead..." The alien child said crying. Broly winced at this painfully as Paragus used the mind control device and yelled "Kill it!". Broly tried to fight it, but, the child cried even louder, scarring Broly as he punched through its stomach. It looked up at him, crying a little more and died. Broly turned and roared, running at Paragus.

"What?!" Paragus said as he narrowly dodged Broly's strike. Paragus desperately used his mind control device to stop Broly, who roared in anger. Tears rolled down his face and he began to sweat heavily as he powered down to base form and fell on his knees.

"How is he capable of such compassion?! Is he really kind hearted or is he just sickened to be doing my deed? Bah... Saiyan of Legend..." Paragus thought as Broly panted heavily on his knees.

Broly's mind flashed again, except to an earlier memory of himself.
Broly was quietly sitting on a ruined planet, which Paragus had cleared out himself for Broly and him to live at for some time. Broly sat on the ground and stared at the sky.

"Broly, what are you doing?" Paragus said sternly.

"What do you care? I'm just sitting here... did you really have to kill all of them?" Broly said.

"Broly! You are a Saiyan! A legendary warrior with great capabilities! Such pacifism is ridiculous!" Paragus said and continued, "Listen, I know you haven't had the Saiyan mission in your head, but, you have Saiyan blood."
Broly sat quietly as Paragus thought to himself, "Bah... The damn boy is soft. It's my fault, he just sits around quietly, like he's waiting for something. I need to unlock his true abilities!"

Broly's memories flashed again.

"Look, dad! I made a friend! I'm gonna name him Rex." Broly smiled calmly as he held a small dog-like creature in his hand, as a small boy of around five or six.

Paragus growled angrily at Broly.

Broly stirred in his underground coma-like state.

"Dad! Have you seen Rex?" A slightly older Broly said to Paragus. Paragus smirked as he pointed towards a small city they were flying over on a nearby planet to the one they were staying in. Broly nodded his head and blasted off towards it, flying through outer space for just a moment, but, reaching the planet.

Broly landed on the planet and came to the city. He landed in it, it seemed somewhat abandoned. He looked around the city-streets of the ruined place. It began to storm as huge winds kicked up around him in the planet. The skies began to churn a fiery red fury as a thunderous boom roared overhead. Broly entered the main plaza of the city and saw Rex, his pet, laying bleeding and panting in the center of the city.

"R-Rex... REX!" Broly said shaking his dog angrily. He stood up, his fist tightened. Suddenly, the creatures that had destroyed this great city leaped out of the rubble. They were twice Broly's size and very powerful, resembling large spider/humanoid creatures. They swiped at Broly. Broly screamed as his arm got slashed open and he was knocked next to his dog.

"I-I'm sorry, Rex." Broly said coughing up blood as he laid in the rubble next to him. Paragus floated overhead, chuckling. The large creatures surrounded them as Broly stood up, powering up and charging at them. He tried to punch one, but, it dodged and stabbed him in the forearm.

Another one stabbed him in the leg. He coughed up blood. He looked back at Rex, who whimpered and tried standing up.

"What?! I mangled that dog!" Paragus said to himself. "How is it still standing?"

Rex dived at the spider creature on Broly, but, it slashed Rex, killing him instantly.

"R-REX!!! WAAAAAAAAAAAH!!!" Broly said screaming, tears flowing from his eyes as he turned Super Saiyan for the first time. He roared as his energy exploded outwards, instantly killing the spiders that were stabbing him. He stood, bloodied and angry as he mercilessly began killing each of the spiders.

"What is this... transformation? Could he be... I knew it...!" Paragus said, shaking slightly. "Together! We will destroy the cosmos!"

Broly powered down to base as each of the spiders were dead, however, he was drained and was bleeding heavily. He fell down in the water as the skies began pouring acidic rain. Paragus swept down and grabbed Broly in a rush and brought him back to the planet they were staying on.

Paragus sat next to Broly in a ruined-like cottage on their planet and mended his wounds. Broly regained consciousness and stared at his father.
"...Why did everyone die but us... why did Rex die?" Broly asked, coughing.
Paragus was taken aback slightly and looked at Broly. "Things die, Broly. Just when you rely on something the most, it disappears. The only true thing in this world is power."

Broly sat up slightly, in pain as he looked up at the sky through one of the holes in the cottage. He lost consciousness again and hit his head hard against the stone table.

Paragus' words echoed with him, "The only true thing in this world is power."
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"D-Dad!" Trunks said to Vegeta, "Is Broly gonna come back?"

Vegeta grunted. "Dammit, Trunks. I'm trying to find his energy. How am I supposed to do that with you bothering me!?"

Piccolo, in a meditative, cross-legged stance sat up. "I think he's really gone. Perhaps we overestimated his power."

"I'm not so sure..." Gohan said. "Maybe we should take a look down in that crater, just in case."
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"This is wonderful!" Paragus thought to himself as Broly violently destroyed cities out of sheer anger, in Super Saiyan.

"Yes, Broly! Destroy, maim and kill!" Paragus said laughing as Broly laughed insanely, destroying cities, now significantly older, but, not yet mind controlled.

"Good. At this rate... We'll be able to settle Saiyan dominance once more with Broly, my superweapon!" Paragus thought, while laughing. Paragus suddenly seemed shocked as Broly charged a huge energy attack. "N-No! Broly! You'll destroy the planet! Enough!" Paragus said, trying to stop Broly. Broly stood still as Paragus grabbed his arms.

"You said... the only thing that matters... is POWER! I AM GOING TO SHOW YOU MY POWER!" Broly said, elbowing Paragus violently in the ribs as he lost his breath and fell back, barely conscious as Broly finished charging the energy bomb. Paragus flew down to his Saiyan pod and got into it, panting heavily with a little blood coming out of his mouth. Broly threw the energy bomb.

"M-Must... set coordinates." Paragus said, vision blurring. He quickly set the coordinates for the planet they lived on and launched the pod. He barely made it off the planet as it became a green blur and radically exploded. A shower of pure energy rained out into space, as Broly blasted off at full speed out of the explosion, past Paragus' pod and towards the planet.

"B-Broly... you've become a monster... ugh. I'd be tempted to think you would die out in space here without oxygen... but, somehow you seem to hold it just long enough to survive every time..." Paragus thought to himself. "I'm starting to think... I've made a bad decision..." He thought as he passed out.

As Broly flew through space, he thought to himself, remembering Goku in his crib and sighed out of anger and remembered everything crying as he destroyed them. "Such weakness... power is all that exists, without it, you are infinitely nothing."
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This part does seem to contradict itself in a few spots, such as Broly believing power is everything, however, later on when being mind controlled, is sympathetic to the weak. However, ye shall wait for the next part. :)
Edited by Sam, Sep 11 2010, 05:10 PM.
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Piccolo Daimao > Piccolo Jr.

That´s great. It makes it look.. that Broly was just a poor mentally sick child who just wanted a good father, Who force´d him to kill a child. And it also looks like that Broly didn´t actually hated Goku.. he feel´t sad for him cause he cried. Maybe Broly should´ve been the Goku of DBZ xD. Of course this is just Fan Fic however its great keep it up.
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It takes a mere second for treasure to turn to trash.

Haha, indeed. I've worked on it a bit further, but, I'm unsure how to proceed between the next part and the ending (which I think I've already decided upon partly) so, I'm going to take some time to think about it.
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