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Welcome To Eden; Not a poem? =O
Topic Started: May 29 2010, 08:27 PM (486 Views)
+ Byakko
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I once gave a Kangaroo a heart-attack just by staring at it

this is the second flash fiction I've written. I like the character of TopHat (if you can't guess who he is, he's the man in the top hat) and might try use him again

For those that don't know what "Flash Fiction" is, it's basically you tell a story in as few words as possible. Here, I use a grand total of 59 words. it is up to the reader to make their own decisions as to what has happened, or about to happen. Check the wikipedia page if I've explained it badly

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The man in the top hat with the crazy stare pulled back the veil. The troupe of misfits stared in horror at the desolate wastelands that lay before them. Some gasped.

"Welcome to Eden," TopHat cried hysterically with a smile from ear to ear, "the land of lonely hearts. Enjoy yourselves!"

Then, all was black, and they knew nothing...


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Chiaroscuro ♥

Like I said over msn, I absolutely loved this flash fiction, it's mysterious in a way and it reminds me of Tim Burton's fantasy worlds mixed with poetry, and I looove it.

Great job, Mike!

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* Sousen Ichimonji
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You are calm and reposed, let your beauty unfold

I have never ever read a flash fiction this good. Because it's the first flash-fiction I've read, I think. :P

But aside from that, I think this is quite good. I suppose the purpose of flash fiction is to suggest a situation and leave the rest of the story to the imagination of the reader? Because if it is, thenthis one has done it's job quite well. :)
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It truly was a Shawshank redemption

Yeah I've never heard of Flash Fiction either. It seems like quite an interesting writing/imaginative exercise.

I like it. It's mysterious, evokes questions and the way you got across the character of the man in the Top Hat in so little words is brilliant.
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