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| A Letter Never Delievered | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Mar 15 2010, 10:29 PM (298 Views) | |
| + Byakko | Mar 15 2010, 10:29 PM Post #1 |
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I once gave a Kangaroo a heart-attack just by staring at it
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Announcing my return! --- I wrote you a letter, but could never even put the pen to paper. I wanted to tell you all about how much you mean to me. It didn't make sense though, so I scrapped the idea. In the end, I'll take my leave, and you'll hardly know. America, America the word leaves a taste on the tip of your tongue. Adventure and excitement, new discoveries and experiences. Will I love you when I get back? This poem is my letter, it'll never be delivered. It's not because I'm scared of what you'll say or what you think, but because, just maybe, you'll accept it. So now, before I take my leave, the start of life drawing nigh, I'll write this letter, even if it's never delivered. Miss me, won't you? Realise I'm gone, and know what you've missed. My last hope, before I sign this letter, that won't be delivered, is a simple one, albeit cheesy, in a spectacular way, it's a hope, that when I close my eyes, and the curtain falls, it will not be the last time I look upon your face. With all the love in my heart, the Poet |
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GFX Portfolio Tumblr DeviantArt ![]() Quoth the raven, `Nevermore.'" | |
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| Tim | Mar 16 2010, 03:46 AM Post #2 |
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I think this is really well written and thought out and as with the rest of your work the emotion really comes through. Good job again Mike ![]() ~Tim |
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| * Mitas | Mar 16 2010, 10:09 AM Post #3 |
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It truly was a Shawshank redemption
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You can really feel the emotion from it, very strong. It is well written. One problem I do have is that it switches between conversational and 'poetic', which can be a bit confusing. I don't know if you meant it to be like this because it's a letter, but for me it doesn't work. However apart from that, it's very good. Maybe you should consider delivering it, although that would contradict it's meaning :P Edited by Mitas, Mar 16 2010, 10:10 AM.
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"Then you've got the chance to do better next time." "Next time?" "Course. Doing better next time. That's what life is." | |
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