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Your. Moment.
Topic Started: Feb 21 2010, 05:47 AM (247 Views)
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Worthless, but existent
Ruthless pride is consistent

Mutter this calling
A final doing of undoings

Even words are falling
But no one can hear

Your moment of pandemonium has arrived;
Ridiculous fear

In your fallacy of arrogance, they had died;
Right here

To you, this is like second nature
You will soon realize that this is your failure

This is your moment
Grasp it and hold it

Yet just like that
It's dead and it's done with
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* Sousen Ichimonji
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You are calm and reposed, let your beauty unfold

I think I prefer this poem over Letter to Norm, but they're both very good. I like the style and structure of the poem, and the rythming... scheme? (I'm not too big on poetry jargon). Also a great display of vocabulary. Keep up the good work man.
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Call me a safe bet, I'm betting I'm not
I'm glad that you can forgive, only hoping as time goes, you can forget

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