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Feb 21 2010, 05:47 AM Post #1 |
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Worthless, but existent Ruthless pride is consistent Mutter this calling A final doing of undoings Even words are falling But no one can hear Your moment of pandemonium has arrived; Ridiculous fear In your fallacy of arrogance, they had died; Right here To you, this is like second nature You will soon realize that this is your failure This is your moment Grasp it and hold it Yet just like that It's dead and it's done with |
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| * Sousen Ichimonji | Feb 21 2010, 08:46 AM Post #2 |
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You are calm and reposed, let your beauty unfold
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I think I prefer this poem over Letter to Norm, but they're both very good. I like the style and structure of the poem, and the rythming... scheme? (I'm not too big on poetry jargon). Also a great display of vocabulary. Keep up the good work man. |
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