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The Scent of This Letter
Topic Started: Dec 12 2009, 02:59 AM (262 Views)
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The letter was my heart
My heart made you cry

But my heart burns
It breaks so much

It takes my mind
It hurts me so

Die or live on
I just don't know
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Wow there is so much passion in this poem. It makes me feel as if I were the one writing it, and in all that pain. If you were writing based on your feelings, I hope everything is alright. Good work on it though.
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Yeah, I agree. The passion, feeling and emotion you put into this came thorugh very powerfully, and the shortness of it added to this.

My personal feeling is that you would have written this on how you were feeling in order to push such a tangibility of emotion into it.

Very touching and moving :)

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You are calm and reposed, let your beauty unfold

The short structure of this poem, as Tim said, makes it all the more powerful, and the intense emotion that is packed into it is raw and moving. And the fairly common theme, of a letter being sent with obviously negative contents, is one that most can relate to.

Very well done. :D
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Call me a safe bet, I'm betting I'm not
I'm glad that you can forgive, only hoping as time goes, you can forget

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The letter sent contained nothing negative at all in its contents.

The letter was my heart, and so I conveyed my feelings in it. Thanks for the compliments everyone.
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