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Peter's Blogs
Topic Started: Dec 10 2009, 05:17 AM (916 Views)
Tim
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I like it, though I did feel a bit as if this part of the story didn't have so much development on the plot as much as the internet side of it. Had a slightly different feel to it, still good though :)

~Tim
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Yeah interesting development. I'm starting to wonder about the Dontamessawithme guy, whether he'll be an important figure later on.

And you improved a little on staying in character as 'Peter', good job.
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Really enjoying it.
I like the fact i'm thinking of what will be uploaded next by Peter and coming up with theories and such.
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Blog Entry 5
November 20, 2009

Well hey everyone, I hope you are all having a good Friday. Sadly I have not yet read any more entries, but there was something I really wanted to share with everyone that’s following my blogs,. Today when I got home I basically did the same routine as always check the mail before coming in the house. Today there was only two things in the mail. One of them a bill for my parents, the other one someone had to put it in the mailbox because it had no address or anything on the envelope just my name. It said ‘Peter’ in big letters. Once I got inside the house I decided to open the envelope inside there was a small paper I will quote word by word of what it said.

‘Are you enjoying Jerry’s journals? I really like your blogs, I can’t wait until you get to the January entries of Jerry,’

Well that’s all for today and as of today I am making my Facespace profile private so that only people I have on my friends list can read my blogs. Tomorrow I will probably have read more journal entries.

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Sexy+Cutie says:
That’s a mean joke for someone to do :(

Peter_rocking says:
Yeah well whoever sent it, it’s not funny. This is not a subject to joke about.

2kool4u says:
Look up at the sky and sing at the stars, yeeeaaaaah boi!

Peter_rocking says:
Wtf?

Sexy+Cutie says:
You are such a weirdo Brian.


No input this time around? :( haha alright ill get the next entry tomorrow
Edited by -Zero-, Dec 13 2009, 07:57 AM.

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Aw I was hoping more to the story would be revealed. Oh well, it's looking good so far. I'll keep reading the ones you post.
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Wow, sorry Zero!! I so thought I had replied to this one!!

I thought it was good, allowed for some development without reading more of the journals :)
Who's watching him?? Stalking him?? What will happen next??

Stay tuned for next time on Peter's Blogs :rofl:

Looking forward to tomorrow :)

~Tim
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Blog Entry 6
November 21, 2009

Earlier today I started reading the November journals from Jerry. Up until November 19 there was absolutely nothing of interest, however came the entry for November 20th and it was pretty interesting. I will post the entry as usual.

“November 20-Today I stayed home because I was sick. Of course both of my parents still went to work. Therefore I was home alone the whole morning. At about ten am the door bell rang like ten times, but I never answered it because I didn’t feel like walking downstairs, I was sick and tired plus my parents recommended me not open any doors. At ten seventeen am my cell phone began to ring. I looked at the number but it was private. I wondered it if it was the school or a friend wondering where I was so I decided to answer. The first thing I hear is the voice of a man saying, ‘You didn’t go to school today, you must be sick then. Should have answered the door, I would have taken care of you,’ and then the phone hang up. Was this yet another stupid prank call? It’s one of those things that I just will forget right away because it has no importance to anything whatsoever. I must say though these prank calls are getting very annoying.”

“November 21-Eventhough I’m still a little sick, I decided to go to school today to make sure I don’t miss too much material. During my third period class I was called to the office. I went as I was told, once I got the lady told me someone had dropped me a letter. I took the letter and opened it on my way up inside was a paper that said, ‘I’m glad you are feeling better,’ the letter was not signed or anything. I am beginning to think none of this is a prank, seems like I have a stalker. For now I won’t tell anyone anything, so that people don’t start getting worried, I need to make sure of this first. Tomorrow is Saturday so I am going to do some investigating.”

Well I would post his entry from Saturday, except it was ripped out, and I guess Sunday and Mondays was there too since the next entry is from November 25th.

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Sexy+Cutie says:
A stalker? Do you think it’s the creepy man?

Peter_rocking says:
It could be

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Nice entry, interesting that the 'person' is watching him pretty much 24/7 to know what he's doing. It's also good that Jerry's starting to suspect something and that the stalker knows about Peter too. Keep it up.
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Wow, this is a very tense story, and written in a very interesting way! I love how mellow about the whole thing Peter is, if it was me I'd read all the journals in one go then learn some self-defence, if this is going the way I think it is :D

Well done Zero, nice work!
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Ohh, what's going to happen next?!?!? I'm intrigued... Why are the pages missing, who has them?? Is he trying to set peter up?!?

Looking forward to the next one :)

You get a rep point for this story!!

~Tim

EDIT: Actually you know what would be a good idea, maybe when you've finished post it bit by bit on an actual blog and get people to put the comments in, see what happens?? Could be interesting!!
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Blog Entry 7
November 22, 2009

Well I finished the November entries from Jerry’s journal. There was really not much of interest until I got to the last day, November 30th.

“November 30th-Today is Sunday and it’s snowing outside. My mom and dad went over to a friends house for a social gathering. They asked me to shovel the snow from the driveway so that they could park the car easier when they get back. So I guess that’s what I will be doing for today.

I have shoveled the snow outside, while shoveling a man I have never seen before walked towards me. He was wearing a tuxedo, a tie, and an old fashioned expensive hat. He looked to be on his mid thirties if I had to guess. Anyways he looked at me and then started asking me questions like what’s your name, when were you born, where was I born, If I was home alone often, what do my mom and dad do for a living, where they work. Of course I didn’t answer any questions I simply decided to go inside the house and wait until the man left. I think he understood because he quickly left. When my parents got home I told them about it but they said it must be a salesman and that it was my fault he had come and asked me all those questions.”

I have not yet started reading the entries from the December journal, however in the cover of the journal in very small letters, not the same hand writing as Jerry’s there is a small message for me. It says “Dear Peter, up until now it must not be very good. I am sorry to tell you December won’t be too different. I promise January to be good. xoxo”
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Sexy+Cutie says:
Well I don’t see what’s so special about these entries, sorry Peter.

Peter_rocking says:
Well, idk, I guess I felt that it was weird that’s all.

Footabll says:
Yo dude man, get a life stop posting stupid blogs

Peter_rocking says:
How about you get a life and stop posting in stupid blogs?

Sexy+Cutie says:
Sergio just because you are our schools quarterback doesn’t make you cool :p

Peter_rocking says:
What bothers me the most is the little message on the cover of the December journal.

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It's almost a if they were given to him for a reason!! I like the way this is going :)

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Ooooo creepy. Very good I'm enjoying it so far. I can't wait to read some more.
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Blog Entry 8
November 23, 2009

Well this is a bit unusual, it’s 4AM, and I am up writing a blog. Well as you may have guessed I did not read any journal entries. So many of you know how I’m always saying I’m not really a heavy sleeper that I wake up easily. So I woke up about ten minutes ago with a sound of a car coming in the street. I decided to look outside the window to see who the hell was driving at this time of the night, what I saw was jus plain freaky. I saw someone couldn’t really see the face too well it was too dark, but that person seemed to be about my age maybe a little younger starring at my window. Of course my room is on the second floor and has curtains so he couldn’t see anything inside. However what happened after is what freaked me the hell out, and I almost ***** my pants too. The kid or whatever said something and next moment I hear someone jumping down, I look down and see a man perhaps on his mid thirties or early forties running away from the house and then the kid followed him. It was just not that it hit me, he was trying to climb up to my window. I’ll admit I’m scared *****less and I’m going to have to do something about it, this is not funny at all. If its someone trying to prank me because of my blogs, you better stop, this is not a damn joke! I swear if I catch you doing it again, I will tell the cops. And if one of you sent me those journals come forward now, I’m getting sick and tired of all this crap now. Jerry was my best friend, he died, and he had these journals if I find out he was killed, I will find you and get your ***** in jail like it should be you sick bastards.
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Again, good entry, can't wait for the next one.

Oh and don't worry about the shortness of some of them, speeds up the pace of the story in parts which can be good.
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