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| * -Zero- | Dec 10 2009, 05:17 AM Post #1 |
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Facespace Blog by, Peter_rocking Blog Entry 1 November 13, 2009 Hey everyone I am Peter and I’m 17 years old, I guess this is my first blog ever. Well I’m actually making this blog because of a friend of mine, his name was Jerry. Yeah you heard it right, past tense. A lot of you on my buddy list probably knew Jerry too, but for those that didn’t Jerry died on August 25th, 2009. I was completely destroyed he was my best friend and he was a great guy. He was someone you could always trust and count on. He was always ready to help other people. His cause of death was never released was never told for some reason. To make matters worst not long after Jerry died his parents disappeared, actually in all honesty I hadn’t seen his dad for a while already and his mother had been acting strange a few days before Jerry passed away. I know many of you are wondering why I am writing this just to say all that well, it’s just that I never got over his death, and I always thought it was suspicious, Jerry’s mother was not the only one acting weird. Before I say what I was going to say I will say this Jerry was always brave, never scared of anything, far from being a coward. However in the past year he has slowly been changing, he started getting a lot more scared a lot easier, started becoming more of a coward, became extremely paranoid, was scared to go out it even got to a point where he was scared to go home, he wanted me to take him some place far from this city. I tried to figure out what was wrong with him, spoke to his mom but she said he was having some troubles because her mom had just died and Jerry loved his grandmother. I guess I was too stupid and naïve to realize how pathetic of an excuse that was. Anyways I recently somehow got Jerry’s journals on the mail. I guess he was writing journals of his every day activity. Whoever sent them did not put a returning address. Each journal has the month name printed in big letters on the cover as well as the year. The oldest journal dates back to October 2008. There are a total of 11 journals, one for each month. I have not ready any like I said but I flipped through some are really short, others are really long. I’m not sure yet if he wrote one everyday, but I guess I’ll find out as I read through them. Well I’m sure a lot of you don’t care at all I had to say but I just wanted Jerry to be remembered by people know that he was a good man. I may or may not write anymore blogs, I guess I found the need to right this one for a reason. Well for whoever reading thanks for reading. Comments- Toyotamaniac011 says: Hey I am really sorry about Jerry. I didn’t really know the dude, but I saw him a few times he seemed rlly kool man. Cheer up im sure he wouldn’t want to see you down. Sexy+Cutie says: Awww Peter that’s sad, you miss him. I am sorry. When did you get the journals? Peter_rocking says: I got them today on the mail and when I got them I was reminded of Jerry and felt the need to post this blog I do miss him.Sexy+Cutie says: That’s freaky you got them on Friday the 13th. Cheer up Peter, I will see you in school on Monday, me and you are going to hang out ok? =] Peter_rocking says: Alright thank you Kristen. ![]() Sexy+Cutie says: No problem <3 Facespace Blog by, Peter_rocking Blog Entry 2 November 15, 2009 Well everyone here I am again, writing my second blog. I didn’t think I would be writing anymore blogs, I mean after all I’m not really a blog person. However something made me write it. I feel like I should share this with my fellow facespace friends and more people too. Jerry’s journal they are creeping me out a bit. I won’t type every thing because some things are just regular stuff, but I will share with all of you the creepy stuff Peterw as going through. I still haven’t finished the October journal, but already I can see why Jerry would start getting paranoid, I will put his entries in quotes. “October 7th, 2008-Today I was in the back of the car while my mom and dad were driving back home. As I usually like to do I was looking out the window, when I noticed a man, I would guess that he was on his fifties waving at me with a smile. I specifically remember that he barely had any hair, he was pretty tall and seemed to be really strong. He was wearing shorts with a tuxedo jacket and a tie. It was really weird, he had absolutely no shoes on. Anyways after waving at me he took out a knife from his shorts and pointed at me and winked, that really creped me out. I told my mom and dad about it, but they simply told me that we are in October after all it all had to do with Halloween. I thought about it and decided to let it go, they were probably right anyways.” “October 10th, 2008-Today is a Friday so I told Peter to head on home without me because I wanted to go and get some extra help for my science class. I left school at about four pm, and had to walk home alone. My house is about ten minutes walking from school. I can’t believe I am seventeen, have a license but have no car. I’m so grateful Peter is such a great friend and gives me a ride home everyday on the cold is just a pain in the butt. But anyways when I was halfway home the same man that I had seen waving at me the other day was walking on the other side of the road. He looked at me and smiled. He was still wearing the same exact clothes and had absolutely no shoes on. He began walking towards me, and I waited for him to see if he wanted to say anything. When he got close to me he kept a weird smile on his face, it was starting to freak me out. He then said this, “To be you, and to see me, must suck.” And with that he walked away. I didn’t like the guy he had a creepy aura to me, I decided to pick up my pace on the walk home…” “October 11th, 2008-I was so happy it was Saturday when I woke up, but sudenley my house phone began to rang. I looked at my clock today and realized it was already noon. Both my dad and my mom would be out of the house at this time, my dad worked and my mom was probably out with her friends. I answered the phone and a voice said, “Is this Jerry?” It was definitely the voice of a man. Of course I answered yes, I thought it was a teacher or some family member, however his response creped me out big time, he said, “How are you doing today hun? Enjoying your day off? I miss you.” The voice said, I had no idea what the voice was talking about, I thought it was a prank so I asked him if it was Peter or someone else that I know his response was, “Don’t you remember me hun? I spoke to you yesterday when you were walking back home from school, and I waved at you the other day when you were in the car with mommy and daddy.” The man told me. I knew it had to be him, I absolutely told no one about the other day in the car except my parents, as as for yesterday I didn’t even tell them no one else knew I had seen that creep again.“How did you get my number?” I asked, and the only thing he said before he hung up was, “I’m disappointed love.” I just don’t know anymore, I don’t think this is a Halloween joke anymore, I’m beginning to get freaked out. I am still debating if I should tell anyone or not about this. I guess I will see what happens from here on out.” Well that was the last one for now. I have read his entries all the way to October 22nd, and so far nothing creepy or weird has been happening. I know some people may ask why did I post all the blog entries about this creepy guy, well for the people that know me will probably already know that I think this creepy man is involved with Jerry’s change in personality, and even his death. Anyways I will keep reading his journals, it’s bringing tears to my eyes though thinking I’m holding something that Jerry himself wrote when he was alive. Comments- Power_to_raider_nation says: Dude some people are just creepy as hell. Even if that whole thing is a joke, it’s just a big no no, creeping up on someone like that. It’s bullcrap. Sexy+Cutie says: Ewww creepy old dude. Didn’t the dude know Jerry liked girls! I would know he was in love with my best friend even though he was always too scared to admit it. Aww I miss Jerry, I know how you feel Peter :(, don’t forget we have to hang out tomorrow. Peter_rocking says: I just don’t know why Jerry didn’t tell me any of this, maybe because he didn’t think anything of it? Maybe at the time he wasn’t too scared? I don’t know maybe I can find out more while I keep reading the journals. Michael121 says: I so would have kicked the dudes *****. Edited by -Zero-, Dec 10 2009, 09:52 PM.
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| * Mitas | Dec 10 2009, 11:44 AM Post #2 |
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Interesting idea, I'll read the next entry. One thing I do think you need to improve on is the comments that people are leaving. Some of them don't seem realistic. Also in peter_rocking's last comment ('I just don't know why Peter.........') you used 'Peter' instead of Jerry. |
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| Tim | Dec 10 2009, 11:59 AM Post #3 |
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Wow, that's very suspense filled and an interesting approach to make, putting it as an online blog and all. Very clever ![]() I'm enjoying it and trying to figure out where it goes next!! Why the journals were delivered to him?? Was that man involved?? So many questions!! ![]() ~Tim |
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| * Light | Dec 10 2009, 04:09 PM Post #4 |
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I used a similiar idea in my English coursework, someone else going through someone else's writing. Really good so far, looking forward to unveiling the mystery. |
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| * -Zero- | Dec 10 2009, 07:31 PM Post #5 |
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Thanks everyone. And Mitas thanks for pointing out that last comment haha I do that a lot end up switching names by accident. And Light thats great I stated writing this cause I saw something on youtube called Marble Hornets its pretty cool, so it inspired me to write this |
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| Pookie | Dec 10 2009, 09:16 PM Post #6 |
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It's a very clever idea like some people have already mentioned. Just make sure you don't mix up names and you'll be fine. I'll read the next entry when you post it. |
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| * -Zero- | Dec 10 2009, 10:22 PM Post #7 |
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Thanks to everyone who reads and comments Facespace Blog by, Peter_rocking Blog Entry 3 November 16, 2009 Well here I am again, writing my third blog entry. I have finally finished the October journal for Jerry. After that last entry that I had posted from him from October 11, it seems like nothing else out of the ordinary happened in October, well that was until October 31st, the day of Halloween. This entry was quite long, but well I’ll post the whole thing and maybe you can all help me with figuring it out a few things on it. Before I post it though here are a few pointers, me and Jerry were supposed to go to a Halloween party together. Jerry had promised me that he was finally going to admit to Katy that he is in love with her, and before the Halloween party he was going to come over and hang out for a bit. Also October 31 entries are split into bits which is probably why it’s a longer one, seems like he was writing about his whole day. “October 31st-Well I just woke up like two minutes ago. I’m really exited because its Halloween, me and Peter are going to go to a party today. I’m finally going to tell Katy her feelings, Peter made me promise him that I would. He thinks the two of us would be good together. I don’t think she feels the same way about me though, but the only two people that know I like her Peter and Kristen say she does like me, either way I will find out today. I’m supposed to go to Peter’s house to hang out there for a while before the party, but before I go into his house I should go and buy something for me to dress up as. But for now I have to go to school, booooring. I just got back home from school, I got my money and now I’m going to go down the street to the Halloween store to check out what I can dress up as for today. I don’t even know why I’m writing this down it’s not even that important, not like it’s going to be anything of interest when I am older. I just got back from the store, screw that I don’t need to go to any damn Halloween parties. That store sucks and I am never going to go back to that store ever again! If Peter doesn’t like the fact that I am not going that’s too bad! I don’t care, I know he will say you promised you would tell her, but whatever promises can be broken it’s not like I’m going to get sick over it. My parents better get home soon too, otherwise I’m going to tell them off. Stupid people really making me angry. Well it’s nighttime which means the Halloween party must be starting already. Peter was disappointed in me earlier when I called him and told him to cancel all of our plans. I’m sure they are all having fun there without me. My parents haven’t gotten home yet, I am starting to get worried. I am beginning to think what he told me was true after all and I refused to believe. Which makes me start thinking that not going to that Halloween party was exactly the best choice I made for the day. I hope Peter can forgive me, it’s for the best. Finally the smile has come back to my face, my parents are home and they are safe after all, they were just having fun at a friends house. I guess he was wrong after all. I’m so stupid for ever even taking him serious. I guess it’s time that I go to sleep now, I can sleep in peace. Its three oclock in the morning, my cell phone started ringing the moment I answered the other person hung up, I hate stupid prank calls, it disturbed my sleep. I managed to fall asleep, but I was awoken at 4:03 in the morning when something hit my window. I looked out the window and saw nothing. Must have been a darn bird or something. This is getting irritating I need some sleep, at this rate I will be sleeping all day tomorrow, I just realized I should have written this in my November journal but that’s ok, Ill just leave it like that will make no difference in the future.” Well everyone that was all. Now there are just a few things that caught my attention, as many of you will notice he said nothing about that creepy guy from before, however there was still a mysterious person that he was referring to as “he and him” For some reason which surprises me Jerry did not get more specific. He usually says things more specific and tells things what happens. Why didn’t he type anything about his trip to the store? Also towards the end his phone rings and they hang up? Usually on pranks the pranker will talk. Also about one hour later something hits his window? This is all starting to sound very weird. I hope that in future journal entries Jerry will mention what happened on the store it could really help a lot. I might not be able to read anything more until the weekend since I am going to have so much homework, one thing I must do tomorrow after school is visit the Halloween store down the street from Jerry’s house. I think the store is going to close soon for the year, they are still having the after Halloween sales, so I need to go tomorrow and see if there is anything strange in there. I doubt it though, Jerry went there one year ago things could have changed in there. Comments- Sexy+Cutie says: This is really starting to creep me out o.o, it’s like those horror movies, except this is real life. Dontamessawithme says: Sounds like your friend is just mentally challenged. Sexy+Cutie says: Who are you to talk about Jerry like that? >:-(, according to your profile you are not even from the same school as us Dontamessawithme says: I don’t know you from anywhere so stay of my nuts ok? Peter_rocking says: Both of you please stop. Donta you have no right to talk like that to Jerry or to Kristen ok? I haven’t met you in real life so I would easily delete you from my friends list Dontamessawithme says: Whatever Edited by -Zero-, Dec 10 2009, 10:23 PM.
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| * Mitas | Dec 10 2009, 10:43 PM Post #8 |
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Good new entry, story's starting to unfold now and I wanna know what's happening with Jerry :P One piece of advice I will give is that when Peter is writing his blog, there are parts where you come out of character and it's almost as if it's you telling us things we need to know in the story directly, rather than Peter writing the blog, if that makes sense. |
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| * -Zero- | Dec 10 2009, 10:50 PM Post #9 |
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Alright lol, can you give me an example? haha cause if I know examples then I can look into fixing it in the future lol |
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| * Mitas | Dec 10 2009, 11:24 PM Post #10 |
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The dots are where I've cut out a bit that was ok. Don't get me wrong, it's not all bad, it just needs a slight tweak in style to make it seem more 'Peter' than you. Also the last paragraph where Peter is explaining his thoughts on it. It doesn't really need much changing because it's the thing that he would be writing about, but it seems as if you're trying to cover all angles so we don't miss anything that's been said, which I guess is a good thing. But like I said, I like it, keep it up. |
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| * -Zero- | Dec 10 2009, 11:30 PM Post #11 |
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Yeah you're right, sometimes some things should be left out so that the readers can think about it themselves. I'll keep that in mind for future entries |
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| * Mitas | Dec 10 2009, 11:32 PM Post #12 |
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Yeah. Although you've picked a very interesting and clever idea, it's quite hard to implement :P But you'll be able to do it, just spend a little time thinking about it as you're writing, how it sounds etc. |
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| Pookie | Dec 10 2009, 11:36 PM Post #13 |
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Wow awesome! The story is getting good. I also want to know what is happening with Jerry. |
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| Tim | Dec 11 2009, 12:30 AM Post #14 |
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Same!! I am very intrigued and am enjoying the writing style!! Apart from a few little errors I think it's good. I like how you added in what was basically a spammer for what seemed to me a bit of realism and a slight comic relief, at least imo. ~Tim |
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| * -Zero- | Dec 11 2009, 03:49 AM Post #15 |
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(I am great full for all of you reading this, I did not think It would catch as much attention, thank you all for reading ) ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Facespace Blog by, Peter_rocking Blog Entry 4 November 17, 2009 Well sadly I have not read any more entries yet. However I did go to the Halloween store down the street from jerry’s house. Lucky I went today because this upcoming Friday is the last day they are opened. Everyone is probably curious or maybe not as to what I saw there, well it was just like a regular Halloween store. The person working there must be on his thirties and has black hair so it’s definitely not creepy man. I asked him if anyone else worked there but he said only him and his wife worked there. Him and his wife may not be getting along lately though the man was not wearing a wedding ring and he did not seem in an extremely happy mood, but anyways I am starting to get off topic here haha. I guess going to the store was of no help, bah it irritates me I wish I had more time to read more entries. I should have more time on the weekend when I don’t have so much darn homework. Until I read more entries I won’t post anymore blogs unless something big comes up. Comments- Dontamessawithme says: What the hell did you expect to find anyways? Fingerprints? Blood? Video Tape evidence? Stop being childish and thinking your some kind of detective. Your friend died no one told you about it cause they don’t give a s**t about you. Get over that psychotic weirdo. Peter_rocking says: I’m done dealing with you, I’m just going to hit the delete button and forget you ever existed. Dontamessawithme says: Ask me if I care… you’re a bunch of fools anyways Peter_rocking says: Well goodbye, deleted already. I don’t even remember when and why I added you but you’re now gone anyways. |
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