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| Secret Units; A new war is about to break lose | |
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| * -Zero- | Dec 8 2009, 05:35 AM Post #1 |
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Yeah I know this is not the greatest writing and not my best stuff, but this story is just a side project while I work on my bigger one, so I kind of type this in quickies thats why it comes out the way it does Secret Units Bombs were dropping everywhere in Las Vegas. People were screaming everywhere they were going. Tanks were shooting things everywhere, soldiers running around the streets and shoot people. Meanwhile in Washington D.C. a man on his mid fifties was watching the news. While another man about on his forties was standing next to him. The man on his fifties turned and spoke. “I think it’s time to get our military forces to Vegas.” “We should leave some in here just in case,” the other man said. “Yes, we have a lot of rookies, Colonel Smith.” “Then the rookies will see some action General Sosa.” Episode 1-Recruiting Andre was at his house watching some television when he turned to the news about Las Vegas. The reporter was speaking on television. “What started this assault in Vegas is still unknown. Nor is it known who is behind this attack. The president has spoken to the media and has promised that he doing everything possible to reach contact with the terrorists and find out what exactly is happening. As soon as we have more news we will come live on air,” the reporter finished speaking and Andre turned off his television. He was still quite a long distance away from Las Vegas but the thought was pretty scary. This seemed to be the worst terrorist attack of his lifetime. Tanks, airplanes dropping bombs in Vegas, civilians being killed in the streets it was all very scary. He got up went to the fridge and got himself a drink. He had no idea what lay ahead of him. George was enjoying the warmness in Florida. The weather there was at seventy degrees there while everywhere else in the country was getting cold. He was wearing just a t-shirt and he had just finished an ultimate Frisbee match with his friends. A car pulled in front of him. A tall man got out of the car and walked towards him. “Are you George?” the man said. This man was tall and muscular he was probably on his late thirties and had short thick black hair. He had a scar on both of his cheeks. “Yes?” George responded confused. Meanwhile in the military training base rookies Jacqueline, John, and Peter were running back and forth in training. Their trainer walked up to the three of them and spoke. “The three of you have been called for duty. You will be leaving for Vegas at eighteen hundred hours.” Andre picked up the phone and spoke. “Hello?” “May I speak to Andre?” the voice said. “This is Andre speaking,” “You have been chosen to be in a special units team, if you refuse you will be arrested. There will be a vehicle to pick you up in about a hour. If you run away you better be sure you know what you are doing,” the man hung up as fast as he spoke. Andre was confused he had no idea what that was all about. It did sound very serious though. George was inside the car and he had no idea why. The man had told him to get inside the car or he would be arrested. He knew that if he had tried to run he would have been shot since the man had shown him a gun. There was nothing else he could have done. Whatever was happening was no joke and he was now in serious business. Later on the day, Andre got out of the car that had picked him up. He was instructed to enter the building and walk down the hall into the last room on the right side. That’s exactly what he did. Once he entered the room the man said that he would have to wait a few more hours since they were sending someone from Florida. Andre did not like the idea of waiting in a room for many hours without doing anything. Patience was not one of his best strengths. Why were they even sending someone all the way from Florida to Wisconsin? The whole day wasn’t making any sense at all. Jacqueline, John and Peter were in a military plane on the way to Las Vegas. In the plane there was plenty of other soldiers and there was plenty of other planes too. In the front of the plane, Sergeant Adams was looking outside the window. To him this was feeling like the beginning of another war. He had been one of the soldiers sent to fight the war in Iraq in return he had watched his best friend die in action. The images still hunted him at night, but he knew he had to live with them. His duty and his devotion was to serve and protect his country. Andre opened his eyes looked at the watch and realized he had fallen asleep. He had woken up by the sound of the door opening. He looked back and saw two people walking inside. One of them was the man that had told him to wait a few hours. The other seemed like a young guy. “Let’s get the introductions out of the way. You may call me Sir Jones or just sir. This here is Andre and that is George. There is no need for the two of you to get acquainted since you will not be working together. Andre is nineteen years of age, George is seventeen years of age,” Sir Jones said with a firm voice. “What is going on?” Andre asked. “The two of you have been chosen to lead a team of special units.” “Wait what? You want us to go fight a war?” George shouted. “Not exactly. You two will be more like secret unit, you will be infiltrating secretly, using stealth.” “Like Solid Snake from the metal gear solid games?” Andre asked. “EXACTLY! So from here on out George your codename will be GMR and Andre your code name will be Zero,” sir Jones said. To be continue… |
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| Tim | Dec 8 2009, 06:37 AM Post #2 |
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Ohh, exciting!! I like the way you have split up the focus throughout it, makes it interesting to read while giving you perspectives on the characters. So was this planned as an intro then?? Or to go after you had introduced the characters more. That would be the main critique I would give it, not as much information on the characters as I would normally prefer. Though then again you may have planned it this way, either way I think it has a lot of potential for a good action / adventure novel. You planning on doing anything further with it?? ~Tim |
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| * -Zero- | Dec 8 2009, 08:35 AM Post #3 |
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Yeah I plan on making a series, sometimes I don't really describe the characters, sorry for that haha as I said this is more of a side project that I do in quick time, so it;s not going to be as well written as it could be. But I'll keep making more chapoters actually I already have four done. Thanks for reading Also I'm sorry if I misuse military ranks, there are so many that it gets confusing. I'm just basically making this my own thing, since research would take a lot of time and as I said this is simply more of a side project Edited by -Zero-, Dec 8 2009, 08:42 AM.
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| Tim | Dec 8 2009, 12:56 PM Post #4 |
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No problem , if you want a hand with the ranks or anything PM me or something, i've looked it all up before and don't mind doing a bit of research again =D ~Tim |
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| * -Zero- | Dec 10 2009, 04:37 AM Post #5 |
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“Ok so I have two questions. First one is, why us? Out of so many people in this country you pick us two. Second of all how are we supposed to succeed? We have no experience what so ever,” Andre said. “We keep tabs on every computer and the two of you have a big liking for stealth and war games we keep track of things that interest us from conversations. As for the other question, well no one said you would be going right away. We have the best training program. It will take six months to get you ready but by the time the six months come you will be the best at what you do if you find the will inside of you,” Sir Jones said. “Six months? Are you kidding me? Do you really think the terrorist attack will last six months? Whatever happened to your other secret units team?” Andre shouted. “Our records have been infiltrated, our secret units team have been exposed and for their safety we have asked them to leave their homes and go somewhere safe. You two will not be put into record. Also we believe this is going to be a big war. We are not sure what is happening and why, but what we do know is Las Vegas was easily attacked this thing is not going to end so soon. Other countries will find the opportunity to attack our country and this will open things big time.” Episode 2-The War Begins Las Vegas Day 1-20:00 December 3, 2009 Sergeant Adams Unit The plane landed and Jacqueline had her weapon ready. She was using a famas. “Alright listen up everyone. This is not training camp anymore, you get shot you die. We are here to serve and protect our country, but we also leave no man behind. Do not shoot civilians. Best of all stay alive!” Sergeant Adams shouted out to everyone on the plane. He got his gun ready and everyone was ready for war. The plane had landed away from the battles going on to give the soldiers time to prepare and attack. Jacqueline was moving behind Sergeant Adams while Peter and John were side by side with her. “It will be alright, Jacqueline. Chances are we outnumber the terrorists,” John said. “Whatever happens lets make sure that neither of us dies,” Peter said to Jacqueline and John. “Yes, we joined camp together we will get out of here together,” Jacqui said. John and Peter nodded their heads. Their guns were at the ready and shortly after they could hear the shooting and the tanks firing. “Alright our tanks are going to move in. The moment our tank shoots down their tank we are going to move in. Follow my orders stay behind me,” Sergeant Adams said. His team consisted of about twelve other soldiers, eight of them being rookies including Jacqui, Peter, and John. The friendly tank shot down the terrorist tank and Sgt. Adams started moving forward. He looked to his right and then his left and then in front of him. He looked to his right again and shot his gun and killed a terrorist soldier. Every soldier kept looking in all directions quickly with their guns at the ready. They were in dangerous ground now, if they let their guard down they could be shot and killed in an instant. Jacqui saw five terrorist soldiers moving in front of them she shot and killed two of them while Peter and John killed the other three. “Good job, keep it up,” Adams said through the radio. Although they were all close together they communicated through the radio to make things much simpler. “Alright team let’s go inside that casino and clear it,” Sgt. Adams said. Jacqui noticed that all around soldiers were fighting their guns and fighting. There was a lot of different teams. However their goal was simple to help one another in the best way possible. Sgt. Adams and his team were slowly getting close to the casino. “Ruben you’re up,” Sgt. Adams said. Ruben moved to the front of the line with his gun at the ready he looked inside the casino and saw nothing there. “It’s all clear sir,” Ruben said and then was shot in the head. He fell on the ground and Jacqui tasted a little vomit in her tongue. “Damn it a Sniper,” Sgt. Adams shouted looking at the rooftops with his weapon at the ready. “Everyone get inside the casino quickly!” he yelled. His whole team quickly ran inside the casino while a bullet nearly missed John. Sgt. Adams was the last one to go inside the casino. “That was too close. We have to pay attention for snipers on the outdoors. Also this casino is big so it does not mean that it is completely clear. We have to check the other floors without Ruben we are down to twelve counting me. So we will stick together,” Sgt. Adams said. Wisconsin Day 1-20:12 December 3, 2009 Secret Unit Training “Well from here on out the two of you will go separate ways. The two of you will have different instructors for your training. You will be ready to go in June of 2010, until then do not expect to have any social life,” Sir Jones said. Andre and George began realizing how terrible the next six months would be. However they knew that they had no other choice. They had to do what they were being told to do. “Don’t worry about your families we will deal with them ourselves,” Sir Jones added right before he led Zero and Gmr to their instructors. “Hello I am Colonel Roy and I will be your instructor Zero.” “I am Colonel Miller and I will be your instructor Gmr. There is a lot of training up ahead of us. Come with me now we can’t afford to waste anymore time,” Colonel Miller said with a smile. Meanwhile in Washington D.C terrorist tanks began entering the city and firing everywhere. A terrorist plane flew by and dropped a bomb on the white house. One of the biggest explosions was heard and pieces of the white house were flying everywhere. People began o scream in panic. To be continued… |
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| Tim | Dec 10 2009, 11:52 AM Post #6 |
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Cool =D Very interesting, I like how you have the different groups split off as it sort of makes you wonder what will happen!! Only critique for that lot would be some of the formatting make it a little confusing to follow, though I admit that could well just be the forum / my computer messing it up. Nice work though Keep it up =D~TIm |
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