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inconnue.
Topic Started: Aug 22 2009, 01:17 AM (333 Views)
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boomboompow.

inconnue.

walking around
in a desolate place
looking for something
that still hasn't been found
faces pass me
like a single blur
not giving me a chance
to let my voice be heard

i walk alone
head held low
a smile quickly fading
my tattered heart still aching
who can help mend,
this broken spirit?

- written for an assignment in AP Literature.

dART
chaleureuse. chic. createuse. douce.
leave me something nice.
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Seems a little simple to me, but not in a bad way, I like it :)
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boomboompow.

Lol, thanks. That was the point though, to be simple, but not.

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chaleureuse. chic. createuse. douce.
leave me something nice.
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It truly was a Shawshank redemption

Good job, it may be simple but it's quite powerful. I like the structure too.
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"Then you've got the chance to do better next time."
"Next time?"
"Course. Doing better next time. That's what life is."
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